Scented Letter Unsent
By stuart_pid
The empty morning, cold and wet,
is shadowed under clouds of gray.
The pelting rain against my window
shatters all my hopes for play.
You tumbled from my thoughts
as I awoke to meet another day.
The image of your precious face
and echos of your whispers fade.
I long to have you next to me
so troubles touch can drift away.
I almost feel your forehead
gently resting on my chest.
My arm extended, uninhibited
across your shoulders crest.
I almost feel in unison
your breath against my own,
but in reality I realize
I only lay here all alone.
My lips caress your kisses
always after sleep has fallen.
I can hold you in the night
but when I wake you will be gone.
I sometimes wonder whether
you were more than just a dream.
Subliminal subconcienceness
that seemingly extrudes extremes.
Imagined instigations
of inflated brain activity.
Though soley owned at night
and in the morning...only memories.
IT'S KILLING ME.
I need to see
your sensuous sienna eyes.
Your slightly crooked smile
that consumes me with desires.
Your lightly twisted thoughts
that fill my own with inspiration.
The person that you are
who fills my heart with admiration.
The passionate excitement
and delight for life within you...
I should stop myself at some point
or perpetually continue.
I guess what I am trying to say
in some ambiguous, backwards way
is though I'm with you every day
...I miss you.
Comments on "Scented Letter Unsent"
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On Friday, July 22, 2005, Elegant Kiss
(178) wrote:
...I miss you.
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A former member wrote:
i think you're amazing.
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, VenomPlease
(134) wrote:
Awww... that's all I can say. Well that and that you've got the rhymes down good, nice and fluent and unforced it seems. Well done.
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On Monday, April 25, 2005, AniDayz
(812) wrote:
...extremely wonderous...words fail me.
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A former member wrote:
I sometimes wonder whether
you were more than just a dream.
Subliminal subconcienceness
that seemingly extrudes extremes.
......FUCKING BEAUTIFUL! Penn!
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A former member wrote:
ahh dude... first, my congrats on an awesome poem, second, my congrats on writing the poem i never could, third, my condolances, i know this too well.
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On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, diavolessa
(207) wrote:
memories...used pelts over one's conscience. you are wonderful...
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A former member wrote:
This is well writen.....and EXTREMELY DEPRESSING!!!!!!
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A former member wrote:
FUCK
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On Tuesday, February 1, 2005, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
I can remember that feeling, haven't been there in a while, *envious of you* excellant portrayal of the temporary absence
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A former member wrote:
Oh Wow. You wrote. I'm so happy to see new works from you. I adore you. The last line bled me dry. This was sublime.. It made my heart long for desires and kisses. Lovely, dear!
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On Thursday, January 27, 2005, Zhee
(529) wrote:
this really tore my heart apart... absolutely beautiful! a masterful expression of imagery and emotion!
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A former member wrote:
Very beautifully written
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On Saturday, January 22, 2005, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
When I awaken in the night. I think you are lying by my side. Did God answer my only prayer. But when I reach, you're not there. So many can relate, S.
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A former member wrote:
great ryhme scheme. this was beautiful, and absolutly adorable. "I should stop myself at some point or perpetually continue" i love that line..............................................................................................-samone
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On Friday, January 21, 2005, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
"Subliminal subconcienceness that seemingly extrudes extremes" beautiful... s-s-s-e-e.... followed by "Imagined instigations of inflated brain activity"... i-i-i-b-a.... it melts off the tongue.... the imagery is marvelous, the yearning visible. Thank you
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On Thursday, January 20, 2005, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
beautifully said, quietly sombre and heartfelt write, with several excellent lines for both metre and content - "that seemingly extrudes extremes" is my fave, i think... Great write, anyway!
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On Thursday, January 20, 2005, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
..my gods this was so beautiful and breathtaking..*runs for tissue box*...thank you
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On Thursday, January 20, 2005, elisa
(1595) wrote:
this just burns a hole in my heart.....*sigh*~elisa