Wishing for you

By BetaWolfinVA

Wishing for you
Coming Down off a Sugar High (and Wishing for you)
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my only regret
about last night is that you
weren't really here
.
cuddled in my arms
and cupped, as i drifted off
to sweet dreamless? sleep

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Published on Wednesday, February 27, 2013. Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

think that stanzas 5 and 7 are much better apart on their own, thats how it started really (but i started intending to write about the sugar high).... heck with it, doing both versions, tell me if either or both versions are worth saving

Comments on "Wishing for you"

On Thursday, February 28, 2013, Pryzm (71) wrote:

Very nice....I like this one a lot. You're voice is unique and welcoming. Thank you.
On Friday, March 1, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

thank you... some times it seams that the less i write the better i am LOL... glad that you enjoyed it :)
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, Dei (663) wrote:

i prefer the shorter version. I find it a bit more honest and personal. like you arent trying to hide what you really mean under pretty blankets. both ARE beautiful. But the first one won me.
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

agreed: truly doesn't really matter where the feeling came from, only that it is remembered
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, Malice In Wonderland (976) wrote:

just remember, all that glitters is not gold.... this is sweet and pretty, and absolutely lovely.... I have been in this position many a time...
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

i thnk we all have been, me, im just riding the waves, i think i went to sleep happy for the first time in a long time
A former member wrote: I think both versions work but with definite different meaning, when stanzas 5 and are separated, to me the separate 5 and 7 are something of longing and love, but when added to the sugar high it conjures images of love but also of someone who's out of it. great write though i really enjoyed it
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

thank you very much, glad that you enjoyed it :)
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, devilsrighthand (27) wrote:

I liked it, I felt something when i read "my only regret about last night is that you weren't really here". It touched me deep down, thankyou.
On Wednesday, February 27, 2013, BetaWolfinVA (791) wrote:

those two stanzas are what i woke up with this morning