By Six-Out

the floodgates are open-
but you're safe. with your head on the armrest.
and your bags too heavy
on the floor.

I can see the weight of the world in your eyes- when they're open.
and I can tell that you're worried.
I'd keep you safe if I could.
but they'd all tell me I'm just a romantic
the hopeless is implied
and I'm staring helplessly
as the chances- drift and float
and when you stood up.
I saw you kind of smile.
me a goodbye.

and even though I think we both know
that I'll never-ever. see you again.
when you left my sight- I missed you as if
we'd been together for ages.
when- in a sense. we'd never met.

and they tell me I'm hopeless.
a romantic wouldn't have let you walk away.
empty handed with just my daydreams
and silent thoughts.

of late nights and terminal trists
it's times like this
that I know I'm a poet.

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© 2006 Jon Rodgers
Published on Sunday, September 10, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Unearthly On Thursday, November 21, 2013, Unearthly (40)By person wrote:

    This was beautiful, very vivid. I really loved it :) you're a great poet, thank you for sharing!

  • Musik2MyEyes On Wednesday, February 24, 2010, Musik2MyEyes (222)By person wrote:

    Not even going to take the time to read all those comments...I know what they must convey. This speaks to me of time...and even the smallest increment can feel like ages when the emotions brought on by someone we meet feels endless. I knew someone only briefly...but I will miss them for all eternity. I love your writing. Please don't ever stop seeking inspiration...wouldn't want your words to ever end.

  • Spiritus_Frumenti On Monday, June 22, 2009, Spiritus_Frumenti (345)By person wrote:

    a bittersweet self-affirmation piece is what i needed today. you are a true poet, my friend....

  • Narcissa On Monday, July 28, 2008, Narcissa (405)By person wrote:

    I stumbled upon this piece and though it appears that it doesn't need any more praise...It touched the poet inside of me.

  • totaltrip On Tuesday, June 17, 2008, totaltrip (36)By person wrote:

    this is my favorite i think.

  • Mari On Sunday, December 3, 2006, Mari (432)By person wrote:


  • Mylissa On Saturday, November 11, 2006, Mylissa (884)By person wrote:

    Insanely beautifully!

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, November 9, 2006, carlosjackal (2297)By person wrote:

    Words fail me. Except to say, Falling in love is so easy when caught in moments like that you describe, but, man, how it can paralyse us, too. I hope you come back with some more stuff soon.

  • Tracer On Friday, September 15, 2006, Tracer (105)By person wrote:

    Funny the hypocracy that follows the notions of being a romantic...misunderstood, and then called out when you finally give in. A poet at heart, brah, thats all you need to be. Saddening story (excellent crafting) that continually plays out...Corey Scholar

  • Malice In Wonderland On Thursday, September 14, 2006, Malice In Wonderland (1029)By person wrote:

    'I'd keep you safe if I could' 'and even though I think we both know that I'll never-ever. see you again...' You'll always be nothing short of excellence...well written and thought provoking. Scholar

  • Dissolving Poet On Tuesday, September 12, 2006, Dissolving Poet (617)By person wrote:

    Wow, Jon this left me in shivers, and wanting to read more. You left me in awed beauty~Gothic

  • PoeticHellion On Tuesday, September 12, 2006, PoeticHellion (192)By person wrote:

    *falls out of chair* Jon, I'm in love with you.

  • Alanarchy On Tuesday, September 12, 2006, Alanarchy (1134)By person wrote:

    It get's to me sometimes. It's almost a blessing AND a curse. Sorta like Spiderman :D You always hit the mark man. Always, and never leave me wanting more, wishing the work would just keep going at the same time. Excellent.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Tuesday, September 12, 2006, TropicalSnowstorm (1708)By person wrote:

    I too really love the lines quoted by Dying_Angel, this is indeed a delicate, beautiful piece that is coloured with sadness. Love your work. Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • sIo On Monday, September 11, 2006, sIo (833)By person wrote:

    makes me cry.

  • swing_the_hammer On Wednesday, September 13, 2006, swing_the_hammer (49)By person wrote:

    makes me cry, too.

  • Dei On Sunday, September 10, 2006, Dei (709)By person wrote:

    Your writing always leaves me with broken hearts and tears.

  • Cattarax On Sunday, September 10, 2006, Cattarax (152)By person wrote:

    :) ... Jon havent read something wonderful from you in a while .. this left the sweetest taste in my mouth .. one that will linger for a while :)~T~

  • veingo On Sunday, September 10, 2006, veingo (572)By person wrote:

    Damn, man. I could have written a hundres stories like this. But never...NEVER so gracefully, as you have. ^V^

  • A former member wrote: "it's times like this that I know I'm a poet." indeed you are..only a poet could make me feel this way after reading a piece of such artistic beauty. you're amazing.

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