Fire Lit Lies ~-in smoking truths-~

By elisa


today i watched
as a train passed by
in absolute silence

...on days like this
he drowns
the sound of the world
with static wonders of
'what'
to even
'wonder'
if anything at all

i feel him
bleeding words
of fear
in the cold
approach of loneliness
though...





i would die forever
to save him from
Nothing.

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Copyright 2005 elisa
Published on Sunday, May 1, 2005.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • DarkAsh On Sunday, January 8, 2012, DarkAsh (45)By person wrote:

    Wow, this is really great. I wish I could be as subtle and fluid.

  • jajang829 On Monday, October 26, 2009, jajang829 (23)By person wrote:

    Fantastic write... inspiring, touching and smooth. I absolutely loved it... now I must read your other works...

  • Methos On Sunday, December 31, 2006, Methos (121)By person wrote:

    Excellent write. Truly a display of aptitude and understanding. Great work! -Methos

  • A former member wrote: Love that last line. Speaking of lines, throw me one, I need help.

  • blue On Saturday, June 11, 2005, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    Again, you've got it! Oh yes you do! ~b

  • Serenity On Saturday, June 11, 2005, Serenity (469)By person wrote:

    Truly amazing

  • A former member wrote: kewl

  • elisa On Tuesday, May 3, 2005, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    '...kewl...'....oO your very deep.....i'm touched

  • Solace On Monday, May 2, 2005, Solace (1069)By person wrote:

    Polished in a beautiful way, its like a coin of truth gleaming in a dark night, something you leap for not for economy but for the gleam...

  • DarkDruidess On Sunday, May 1, 2005, DarkDruidess (326)By person wrote:

    immeresed me in a bittersweet longing I had forgetten the feel of...glorious

  • Anth On Sunday, May 1, 2005, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    this reminded me somehow, as if you was watching me at work, distant, what to wonder, if just to escape...so beautifully written, faves

  • elisa On Sunday, May 1, 2005, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    what a strange coincidence.........i edited 'one' line about feeling him crossing over the tracks on his way to work......but worded differently....very interesting~elisa

  • Six-Out On Sunday, May 1, 2005, Six-Out (1435)By person wrote:

    I could close my eyes and see your honesty. This tore me to pieces in the most beautiful way.

  • elisa On Tuesday, May 3, 2005, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    i have a damn good aim;)

  • A former member wrote: That last stanza alone was amazing. I love poems like these, short but overwhelmingly powerful.

  • A former member wrote: i loved the last stanza...perfect ending, all around good job.

  • blue On Sunday, May 1, 2005, blue (1454)By person wrote:

    ooh! I swear you come from purist energy! ~b

  • AniDayz On Sunday, May 1, 2005, AniDayz (820)By person wrote:

    the title intruiged me...as does the piece that follows. you are beautifully brilliant. 'static winders'~the emotion of this stabs my heart in half.

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