Fire Lit Lies ~-in smoking truths-~

By elisa

today i watched
as a train passed by
in absolute silence

...on days like this
she drowns
the sound of the world
with static wonders of
'what'
to even
'wonder'
if anything at all

i feel her
bleeding words
of fear
in the cold
approach of loneliness
though...

i would die forever
to save her from
Nothing.

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Published on Sunday, September 1, 2024. Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"

Comments on "Fire Lit Lies ~-in smoking truths-~"

On Sunday, January 8, 2012, DarkAsh (45) wrote:

Wow, this is really great. I wish I could be as subtle and fluid.
On Monday, October 26, 2009, jajang829 (23) wrote:

Fantastic write... inspiring, touching and smooth. I absolutely loved it... now I must read your other works...
On Sunday, December 31, 2006, Methos (121) wrote:

Excellent write. Truly a display of aptitude and understanding. Great work! -Methos
A former member wrote: Love that last line. Speaking of lines, throw me one, I need help.
On Saturday, June 11, 2005, blue (1409) wrote:

Again, you've got it! Oh yes you do! ~b
On Saturday, June 11, 2005, Serenity (469) wrote:

Truly amazing
A former member wrote: kewl
On Tuesday, May 3, 2005, elisa (1595) wrote:

'...kewl...'....oO your very deep.....i'm touched
On Monday, May 2, 2005, Solace (1065) wrote:

Polished in a beautiful way, its like a coin of truth gleaming in a dark night, something you leap for not for economy but for the gleam...
On Sunday, May 1, 2005, DarkDruidess (313) wrote:

immeresed me in a bittersweet longing I had forgetten the feel of...glorious
On Sunday, May 1, 2005, Anth (1126) wrote:

this reminded me somehow, as if you was watching me at work, distant, what to wonder, if just to escape...so beautifully written, faves
On Sunday, May 1, 2005, elisa (1595) wrote:

what a strange coincidence.........i edited 'one' line about feeling him crossing over the tracks on his way to work......but worded differently....very interesting~elisa
On Sunday, May 1, 2005, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

I could close my eyes and see your honesty. This tore me to pieces in the most beautiful way.
On Tuesday, May 3, 2005, elisa (1595) wrote:

i have a damn good aim;)
A former member wrote: That last stanza alone was amazing. I love poems like these, short but overwhelmingly powerful.
A former member wrote: i loved the last stanza...perfect ending, all around good job.
On Sunday, May 1, 2005, blue (1409) wrote:

ooh! I swear you come from purist energy! ~b
On Sunday, May 1, 2005, AniDayz (812) wrote:

the title intruiged me...as does the piece that follows. you are beautifully brilliant. 'static winders'~the emotion of this stabs my heart in half.