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"Lift not the painted veil" (Collab with Percy Bysshe Shelley)"
By TropicalSnowstorm
"Lift
not the painted veil which those who live are
blinded by" (Collaboration
with Percy Bysshe
Shelley)
Lift not the painted veil which those
who live
Are blinded by that strive to purchase
joy
And it but mimic all we would believe
A seductive call to the Gates of
Troy
That will lie in flames before we take leave
Prospects vanish obscured by their decoy.
I knew one who had lifted it--he sought,
To find true pleasures that would
not decrease
But found them not, alas! nor was there
aught
That could make the longing in
his soul cease.
He’d have cast off all to feel inner peace
A splendour among shadows, a bright
blot
Pleading for heaven to trade his
increase
For truth, and like the Preacher found
it not.
by Percy Bysshe Shelley and Steve McKennon
**I decided to "team up" with Shelley to write a sonnet. The original
text from his "Lift not the painted veil which those who live" is
in GREEN and
my lines are in BLUE.
The original sonnet is available at: http://www.sonnets.org/shelley.htm#300
Unauthorized Copying Is Prohibited.
Ask the author first.
Copyright 2014 TropicalSnowstorm
Published on Wednesday, October 22, 2014.
Filed under: "Structured" and
"Poetry"
Author's Note:
A fun writing experiment "teaming up" with a classic poetComments on ""Lift not the painted veil" (Collab with Percy Bysshe Shelley)""
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On Saturday, December 13, 2014, georgelstein
(62)
wrote:
and now the metaphor of the painted veil is clear to me. well, done.
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A former member wrote:
As dwells said the blend was flawless and flowed marvelously. Very much enjoyed.
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On Sunday, October 26, 2014, anaksunamun
(88) wrote:
a very unique idea . Fun to imagine it in two different voices while reading aswell. Awesome job Storm ..
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On Friday, October 24, 2014, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...you take on a bold endeavor, to reflect the thoughts of a Poet so skilled in romance & art. it's a successful venture, truly well crafted...
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On Thursday, October 23, 2014, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Not familiar with the original, but the blending was seamless TS. I get more with every consecutive read and the archaic lingo is spot on; the Troy tercet was terriffic! - Dan
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