It Should Have Been Better

By cre

She rarely spoke of her start in life Or the years she'd worked to overcome strife And all anyone saw was the smile in her eyes Too smug and self-righteous to ever realize Her tenderness, fragile, like a dream on the wind Made her easy to crush when she needed a friend When the love of her life loved someone else And spun her joy into a version of hell She sought out her comfort in the hugs of others But it was clear from their words they felt so far above her:

it could be worse - don't cry do not weep you have no right here you sit so sad and sighing while half the world is dead or dying they shamed her heart with verse upon verse of "just remember - it could always be worse"

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She moved on and found new smiles Worked at making life worthwhile But soon enough the hard times hit The kids were hungry in clothes unfit She toiled from dawn till late at night Though sad and worn she did not cry Until one day in weariness She wept to friends of her distress But once again they could not see Past their own big heads to their friend in need

it could be worse - don't cry do not weep you have no right here you sit so sad and sighing while half the world is dead or dying they tore her heart with verse upon verse of "just remember - it could always be worse"

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Then one day on a warm spring morning She fell to sickness with little warning The doctor confirmed her silent fears And told her she'd reached the dusk of her years Her heart was sad and she ached for friends For someone who'd hold her and help face the end But alone she drew her final breath And her "friends" were surprised when they heard of her death By way of GoodBye she left a few simple words And prayed they'd be heeded and not go unheard:
You always told me not to cry That as for weeping I had no right When I was sad and fell to sighing You said just think, you could be dying You broke my heart with your careless verse Don't you know I knew it could have been worse? I only wanted warmth and love But no matter my need it was never enough My last dying hope is that somehow you'll see How hurtful and careless your actions can be And maybe the next time a "friend" needs some care You will be kinder, and you will be there So farewell, remember, the point of this letter: It could have been worse, but it should have been better.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Wednesday, July 9, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • precarious pixie On Sunday, September 4, 2005, precarious pixie (11)By person wrote:

    absolutly right.i hope everyone reads this and remembers it when a friend comes to them.bcuz i know to many times people have died bcuz their "little" problems have been pushed aside.this is beautiful and breath taking

  • Butterfly On Thursday, July 14, 2005, Butterfly (99)By person wrote:

    Still catch tears everytime I read this. Absolutely amazing.

  • A former member wrote: Is speachless....

  • A former member wrote: I loved it! It touched my heart

  • A former member wrote: wow...this is great, for so many of us our friends are all we have,and there are times when we couldnt get through without them...so many people fail to see this...fabulous job

  • peril_notion On Friday, May 27, 2005, peril_notion (87)By person wrote:

    beautiful, cre.... absolutley gorgeous. ~Heather

  • A former member wrote: That is sooo amazing!! I loved that last verse especially, this poem is truly... no words compare to this work

  • etarnally damnd On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, etarnally damnd (61)By person wrote:

    this is one of the best things i have read in a long time and is truly moving-michael

  • A former member wrote: I'm so lovin' this!

  • rondant On Friday, April 8, 2005, rondant (58)By person wrote:

    beautifully written....Ronda

  • A former member wrote: INCREDIBLE!

  • A former member wrote: I really like this, and I know I've read it in an email. I constantly come back to it, because it's just amazing!

  • A former member wrote: Dude, I love like almost all of you're poems. You're stuff is the shit guy! Just like it's touching. Keep it up

  • suicideseason On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, suicideseason (1636)By person wrote:

    Dude...you called her 'Dude'...she's no dude.

  • suicideseason On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, suicideseason (1636)By person wrote:

    Oh...and not just a girl,a babe...a royal babe.

  • Twilight On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, Twilight (1782)By person wrote:

    im gonna have to agree with tim...i dont like confrontation...but cre is a girl:)

  • A former member wrote: I have read this poem over and over again, each time it seems to have more and more meaning to me. This is one of my favorite poems :) --beautiful

  • A former member wrote: omg so true. i know this feeling very well. you said it perfectly. amazing write!

  • A former member wrote: baked to poetic perfection. such a story wrapped in relatively few words. i add myself to the vast list of accolades.

  • Butterfly On Monday, November 15, 2004, Butterfly (99)By person wrote:

    Wow this is absolutely stunning. Almost brought a tear to my eye. I love this. Going into my fave list now.

  • A former member wrote: this poem is now one of my favs.nice work

  • A former member wrote: honestly my favorite poem on the site, has been ever since you posted it. i have no idea why i have no comment here yet

  • Nesfurata On Friday, October 15, 2004, Nesfurata (58)By person wrote:

    A wonderful message. It really gives a lot of insight and things to think about. Great job -Elizabeth

  • Ravenblade On Saturday, October 2, 2004, Ravenblade (307)By person wrote:

    GOd, I've missed reading this over and over again, I just felt inclined to reread all my favorites again tonight to just see how it makes me feel....still loved this just as strongly...>Raven

  • A former member wrote: I do not pity the girl. However this poem is smooth like silk and I do like the measage

  • Lucia On Monday, June 28, 2004, Lucia (5)By person wrote:

    I read this once long ago, and have now since returned tonight to find it again... Simply breathtaking, and so true... I love your style, and this piece strikes me especially. / Lucia /

  • A former member wrote: I've always admired this work. It's been months since I last read it. But I've found it at last.

  • A former member wrote: makes me feel like shit inside but understand at the same time

  • Savannah On Sunday, May 23, 2004, Savannah (218)By person wrote:

    I will remember this poem next time someone tells me that and I will smile inside.

  • aXe FactoR On Thursday, April 29, 2004, aXe FactoR (333)By person wrote:

    really very very true... a lot of things in life could really be much worse..but can be better... great awesome write...no wonder its a finalist poem... life transforming poem...makes me reaccess life and its complexities... powerful!

  • girlafraid On Saturday, April 24, 2004, girlafraid (479)By person wrote:

    this is so sad...made me think of my mother, it pretty much described her life...if only people would realize this

  • Daegonna On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Daegonna (27)By person wrote:

    yes it should have been better... (her life i mean) GREAT WRITE! ~Daegonna~

  • Beautiful Scars On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Beautiful Scars (175)By person wrote:

    Oh wow...this reminds me of my own life...This poem gave such A feeling of sadness.....this is so beatifully written...-fairy-

  • BoldSolitude On Tuesday, March 16, 2004, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    I remember reading this when you posted it, back before I was a member and I liked it then. It has been one of those poems that sticks with you. I looked it up again on the search option so I could make it a favorite.

  • A former member wrote: agreed. I read it before I was a member, and now its on my favorite!!!

  • A former member wrote: Your comments go on and on so I am just another fan. I hope you realize how much you do by doing what you do.

  • A former member wrote: this is amazing....i think you could possibly be one of the best writers on the site....you have so much talent and you show it well

  • flying_fox On Wednesday, January 21, 2004, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    I really related to this - can't stand the phrase "it could be worse"...and I love the last line, so true, vey powerful. FF

  • A former member wrote: I loved the ending.....its so very true in the sense of how "friends" can be so blind staring through you.....very good....loved it

  • Cwn Annwn On Friday, January 2, 2004, Cwn Annwn (89)By person wrote:

    I could read this one over and over and over and over and over...I LOVE IT SO MUCH! ~GoNe~

  • Delphoid-Q On Wednesday, December 24, 2003, Delphoid-Q (213)By person wrote:

    *Shivers*. I feel honoured to have been allowed to read this. I won't praise it with exclamation marks and such. All I will say is that this is one of the best. Ever. And i'm not merely referring to dp.com, either.

  • A former member wrote: Ooohhhhh *Cries* It's s-s-so SAAAAAAD!! I LOVE the last Line!! It' just makes it all so TRUE!!

  • A former member wrote: Where is my comment? I know I've commented on this before. I had to of! It's one of my favorites on this whole friggin site! Oh geez...well anyway, this is amazing Cre. The message is so very powerful.

  • A former member wrote: I know I've told you this a million times but your works just blow my mind...you are so talented.

  • A former member wrote: Damn right it should have been better!

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