It Should Have Been Better
By cre
She rarely spoke of her start in life Or the years she'd worked to overcome strife And all anyone saw was the smile in her eyes Too smug and self-righteous to ever realize Her tenderness, fragile, like a dream on the wind Made her easy to crush when she needed a friend When the love of her life loved someone else And spun her joy into a version of hell She sought out her comfort in the hugs of others But it was clear from their words they felt so far above her:
it could be worse - don't cry do not weep you have no right here you sit so sad and sighing while half the world is dead or dying they shamed her heart with verse upon verse of "just remember - it could always be worse"
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She moved on and found new smiles Worked at making life worthwhile But soon enough the hard times hit The kids were hungry in clothes unfit She toiled from dawn till late at night Though sad and worn she did not cry Until one day in weariness She wept to friends of her distress But once again they could not see Past their own big heads to their friend in need
it could be worse - don't cry do not weep you have no right here you sit so sad and sighing while half the world is dead or dying they tore her heart with verse upon verse of "just remember - it could always be worse"
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Then
one day on a warm spring morning
She fell to sickness with little warning
The doctor confirmed her silent fears
And told her she'd reached the dusk of her years
Her heart was sad and she ached for friends
For someone who'd hold her and help face the end
But alone she drew her final breath
And her "friends" were surprised when they heard of her death
By way of GoodBye she left a few simple words
And prayed they'd be heeded and not go unheard:
You
always told me not to cry
That as for weeping I had no right
When I was sad and fell to sighing
You said just think, you could be dying
You broke my heart with your careless verse
Don't you know I knew it could have been worse?
I only wanted warmth and love
But no matter my need it was never enough
My last dying hope is that somehow you'll see
How hurtful and careless your actions can be
And maybe the next time a "friend" needs some care
You will be kinder, and you will be there
So farewell, remember, the point of this letter:
It could have been worse, but it should have been better.
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Comments on "It Should Have Been Better"
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On Sunday, September 4, 2005, precarious pixie
(11) wrote:
absolutly right.i hope everyone reads this and remembers it when a friend comes to them.bcuz i know to many times people have died bcuz their "little" problems have been pushed aside.this is beautiful and breath taking
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On Thursday, July 14, 2005, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
Still catch tears everytime I read this. Absolutely amazing.
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A former member wrote:
Is speachless....
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A former member wrote:
I loved it! It touched my heart
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A former member wrote:
wow...this is great, for so many of us our friends are all we have,and there are times when we couldnt get through without them...so many people fail to see this...fabulous job
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On Friday, May 27, 2005, peril_notion
(87) wrote:
beautiful, cre.... absolutley gorgeous. ~Heather
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A former member wrote:
That is sooo amazing!! I loved that last verse especially, this poem is truly... no words compare to this work
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On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, etarnally damnd
(61) wrote:
this is one of the best things i have read in a long time and is truly moving-michael
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A former member wrote:
I'm so lovin' this!
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On Friday, April 8, 2005, rondant
(58) wrote:
beautifully written....Ronda
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A former member wrote:
INCREDIBLE!
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A former member wrote:
I really like this, and I know I've read it in an email. I constantly come back to it, because it's just amazing!
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A former member wrote:
Dude, I love like almost all of you're poems. You're stuff is the shit guy! Just like it's touching. Keep it up
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On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, suicideseason
(1636) wrote:
Dude...you called her 'Dude'...she's no dude.
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On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, suicideseason
(1636) wrote:
Oh...and not just a girl,a babe...a royal babe.
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On Wednesday, February 2, 2005, Twilight
(1782) wrote:
im gonna have to agree with tim...i dont like confrontation...but cre is a girl:)
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A former member wrote:
I have read this poem over and over again, each time it seems to have more and more meaning to me. This is one of my favorite poems :) --beautiful
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A former member wrote:
omg so true. i know this feeling very well. you said it perfectly. amazing write!
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A former member wrote:
baked to poetic perfection. such a story wrapped in relatively few words. i add myself to the vast list of accolades.
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On Monday, November 15, 2004, Butterfly
(99) wrote:
Wow this is absolutely stunning. Almost brought a tear to my eye. I love this. Going into my fave list now.
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A former member wrote:
this poem is now one of my favs.nice work
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A former member wrote:
honestly my favorite poem on the site, has been ever since you posted it. i have no idea why i have no comment here yet
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On Friday, October 15, 2004, Nesfurata
(58) wrote:
A wonderful message. It really gives a lot of insight and things to think about. Great job -Elizabeth
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On Saturday, October 2, 2004, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
GOd, I've missed reading this over and over again, I just felt inclined to reread all my favorites again tonight to just see how it makes me feel....still loved this just as strongly...>Raven
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A former member wrote:
I do not pity the girl. However this poem is smooth like silk and I do like the measage
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On Monday, June 28, 2004, Lucia
(5) wrote:
I read this once long ago, and have now since returned tonight to find it again... Simply breathtaking, and so true... I love your style, and this piece strikes me especially. / Lucia /
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A former member wrote:
I've always admired this work. It's been months since I last read it. But I've found it at last.
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A former member wrote:
makes me feel like shit inside but understand at the same time
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On Sunday, May 23, 2004, Savannah
(218) wrote:
I will remember this poem next time someone tells me that and I will smile inside.
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On Thursday, April 29, 2004, aXe FactoR
(333) wrote:
really very very true... a lot of things in life could really be much worse..but can be better... great awesome write...no wonder its a finalist poem... life transforming poem...makes me reaccess life and its complexities... powerful!
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, girlafraid
(479) wrote:
this is so sad...made me think of my mother, it pretty much described her life...if only people would realize this
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Daegonna
(27) wrote:
yes it should have been better... (her life i mean) GREAT WRITE! ~Daegonna~
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On Wednesday, April 21, 2004, Beautiful Scars
(175) wrote:
Oh wow...this reminds me of my own life...This poem gave such A feeling of sadness.....this is so beatifully written...-fairy-
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On Tuesday, March 16, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
I remember reading this when you posted it, back before I was a member and I liked it then. It has been one of those poems that sticks with you. I looked it up again on the search option so I could make it a favorite.
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A former member wrote:
agreed. I read it before I was a member, and now its on my favorite!!!
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A former member wrote:
Your comments go on and on so I am just another fan. I hope you realize how much you do by doing what you do.
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A former member wrote:
this is amazing....i think you could possibly be one of the best writers on the site....you have so much talent and you show it well
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On Wednesday, January 21, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
I really related to this - can't stand the phrase "it could be worse"...and I love the last line, so true, vey powerful. FF
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A former member wrote:
I loved the ending.....its so very true in the sense of how "friends" can be so blind staring through you.....very good....loved it
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On Friday, January 2, 2004, Cwn Annwn
(89) wrote:
I could read this one over and over and over and over and over...I LOVE IT SO MUCH! ~GoNe~
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On Wednesday, December 24, 2003, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
*Shivers*. I feel honoured to have been allowed to read this. I won't praise it with exclamation marks and such. All I will say is that this is one of the best. Ever. And i'm not merely referring to dp.com, either.
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A former member wrote:
Ooohhhhh *Cries* It's s-s-so SAAAAAAD!! I LOVE the last Line!! It' just makes it all so TRUE!!
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A former member wrote:
Where is my comment? I know I've commented on this before. I had to of! It's one of my favorites on this whole friggin site! Oh geez...well anyway, this is amazing Cre. The message is so very powerful.
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A former member wrote:
I know I've told you this a million times but your works just blow my mind...you are so talented.
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A former member wrote:
Damn right it should have been better!