By elisa

i am drowning
in punctuation's

a mere
textile voice
screaming through the screen -longing to be naked
do my words even make a sound.....as you read them -?-

trace my silhouette
and make me tangible
in your reality

your touch -my air
and i need to breathe
so desperately
don't let me die
this way.

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Copyright 2011 elisa
Published on Friday, February 10, 2006.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • TWiiSTEDAnGeL On Tuesday, February 5, 2013, TWiiSTEDAnGeL (428)By person wrote:

    This is a marvelous piece.. I love it.. wow.. 10/10

  • Dreaming in Stanzas On Tuesday, September 18, 2012, Dreaming in Stanzas (332)By person wrote:

    Brutal, painful, beautiful. Much like yourself.

  • Devilish On Wednesday, November 30, 2011, Devilish (3797)By person wrote:

    Wow!!! I'm addicted... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Bows to you, as you painted a vived picture of your pain, so elegant laced in silk... "Applause" as you moved my soul dramatically... Scholar

  • A former member wrote: if only there were a way to make tangible those meanings that move us the most...... hmmm. so many deaths haunting these halls. *bows before the altar of elisa* Scholar

  • eyeeatthesky On Wednesday, June 9, 2010, eyeeatthesky (30)By person wrote:

    I love the way you brought me into it. The you becomes less of some vague person and more of a personal "me" when you say "as you read them." I fuckin loved it!

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, November 8, 2009, carlosjackal (2481)By person wrote:

    Yes! :0)

  • urbanhumility On Monday, November 20, 2006, urbanhumility (1207)By person wrote:

    concise and darkly intelligent

  • AniDayz On Sunday, November 19, 2006, AniDayz (822)By person wrote:

    ''screaming through the screen-longing to be naked.do my words even make a sound.....as you read them-?-trace my silhouette...'(there is *so*much spoken with.in this...

  • AniDayz On Sunday, November 19, 2006, AniDayz (822)By person wrote:

    such potent; yet vulnerable unmasking...the first part of this...how it bleeds into the rest...flows through such (e)motion...deeply.moving,much felt...:.

  • Bluegirl On Saturday, September 16, 2006, Bluegirl (181)By person wrote:

    Beautiflly written. It feels so sad.. Good job!

  • xserratedsoulx On Monday, February 20, 2006, xserratedsoulx (214)By person wrote:

    you have really outdone yourself with this one...maybe we are destined to drown in our own poetry... ~lauren~

  • A former member wrote: "do my words even make a sound.....as you read them -?-" Yes. Yes they do.

  • elisa On Monday, February 13, 2006, elisa (1643)By person wrote:


  • BlackBear On Friday, February 10, 2006, BlackBear (12)By person wrote:

    I hear you through the ether, see the shadow of your scream; the air you grasp in vacuum is not a dying dream. I hear you. Lift your head and see the sun, and share your passionate song with us.

  • TaintedButterfly On Friday, February 10, 2006, TaintedButterfly (675)By person wrote:

    Elisa this gave me tears! Broke my heart and left it in "pieces." It will be okay, you will see. *hugs you tightly* Julia~

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