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By knightmirror

sifting and wilting
in patterns abroad
shifting and tilting
description of God
written
d
o
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n

upon pages in metallic blue
veins lies answers and phrases
spoken in telepathic riddles
with foreign tounges double-dipped
in deciet

waking and shaking
in puddles of sweat
making and breaking
strides that are set
d
o
w
n

inside vaults of ignorance
locked behind cold heartattacks
beating rhythyms off time
in times meant to waste away
in deciet

lay
d
o
w
n

in my grave

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Copyright 2004 knightmirror
Published on Sunday, July 25, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: very very good. gave me chills.

  • NikesRain On Saturday, August 14, 2004, NikesRain (1298)By person wrote:

    damn...this hit hard..and all that runs through my head is the need to say I'm sorry and offer a shoulder or a hug... Damn effecting write Chris.

  • OLd SouL On Friday, August 13, 2004, OLd SouL (734)By person wrote:

    so many great lines in this.. 'with foreign tounges double-dipped in deciet' 'inside vaults of ignorance locked behind cold heartattacks'... great freaking write man... :::OLd

  • Lord Kalgalath On Monday, August 9, 2004, Lord Kalgalath (182)By person wrote:

    greta write dude. i like this.

  • DoctorAsh On Monday, August 9, 2004, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    nice - haven't read any of your work in quite a while table cloth: shall-bin-quasta : Wonderful script. [D&A]

  • sixsixnine On Sunday, July 25, 2004, sixsixnine (477)By person wrote:

    reading thanx to you! i don't have a favriot line the whole thing i loved my mind came to find* this is flawless! *669*

  • sixsixnine On Sunday, July 25, 2004, sixsixnine (477)By person wrote:

    fuck this is so real .. i feel it coming thru me... how you feel is portrayed with the way your emotions play in here... so much nothing to fear you're so beautiful emotinal & phisical ooopsdidisaythat this is extreamly well written & i'm loving what i am

  • Anth On Sunday, July 25, 2004, Anth (1133)By person wrote:

    this is really imaginative,i echo what glass says,loved this one

  • glasshouse On Sunday, July 25, 2004, glasshouse (548)By person wrote:

    " foreign tounges double-dipped in deciet" as I've told you many times... your works never cease to amaze me. This is no exception. Your style is fluid and flawless. You have a gift, you really do. I enjoyed this piece a lot. -Glass

  • elisa On Sunday, July 25, 2004, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    This is a great piece of work! I'm impressed:)

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