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By knightmirror

sifting and wilting
in patterns abroad
shifting and tilting
description of God
written
d
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upon pages in metallic blue
veins lies answers and phrases
spoken in telepathic riddles
with foreign tounges double-dipped
in deciet

waking and shaking
in puddles of sweat
making and breaking
strides that are set
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inside vaults of ignorance
locked behind cold heartattacks
beating rhythyms off time
in times meant to waste away
in deciet

lay
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n

in my grave

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Published on Sunday, July 25, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "down"

A former member wrote: very very good. gave me chills.
On Saturday, August 14, 2004, NikesRain (1240) wrote:

damn...this hit hard..and all that runs through my head is the need to say I'm sorry and offer a shoulder or a hug... Damn effecting write Chris.
On Friday, August 13, 2004, OLd SouL (717) wrote:

so many great lines in this.. 'with foreign tounges double-dipped in deciet' 'inside vaults of ignorance locked behind cold heartattacks'... great freaking write man... :::OLd
On Monday, August 9, 2004, Lord Kalgalath (182) wrote:

greta write dude. i like this.
On Monday, August 9, 2004, DoctorAsh (371) wrote:

nice - haven't read any of your work in quite a while table cloth: shall-bin-quasta : Wonderful script. [D&A]
On Sunday, July 25, 2004, sixsixnine (476) wrote:

reading thanx to you! i don't have a favriot line the whole thing i loved my mind came to find* this is flawless! *669*
On Sunday, July 25, 2004, sixsixnine (476) wrote:

fuck this is so real .. i feel it coming thru me... how you feel is portrayed with the way your emotions play in here... so much nothing to fear you're so beautiful emotinal & phisical ooopsdidisaythat this is extreamly well written & i'm loving what i am
On Sunday, July 25, 2004, Anth (1126) wrote:

this is really imaginative,i echo what glass says,loved this one
On Sunday, July 25, 2004, glasshouse (530) wrote:

" foreign tounges double-dipped in deciet" as I've told you many times... your works never cease to amaze me. This is no exception. Your style is fluid and flawless. You have a gift, you really do. I enjoyed this piece a lot. -Glass
On Sunday, July 25, 2004, elisa (1595) wrote:

This is a great piece of work! I'm impressed:)