while listening to an old man's song

By Jonas

the death in the old man's voice did not
try to hide itself
but exemplified the sadness and longing
of a young man tangled in the elements of life
that youth so easisly calls mystery

as if to attempt to escape a host of glaring and obvious
ends
that experience may show
to be not that but
a
single
perfect
word
that we can hear god whispering
over and over and over
as each individual beat of the heart is one that is
unique
and is never to come again

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Published on Wednesday, January 31, 2007. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "while listening to an old man's song"

On Sunday, April 14, 2013, knightmirror (426) wrote:

with as long as I've been on this site... I apologize for never reading one of your creations... the reason for the apology... is that this is amazing... I can't even begin to express my thanks to you for being able to read this... and I can't explain why this piece touches me strongly... all I know is that I have a tear forming in the corner of my left eye... only one thing left to do since I can't comment on this properly and effectively...*faves*... thank you...-knight
A former member wrote: #22....'if you are willing to be lived by it, you will see it everywhere, even in the most ordinary things.'.....you wept where i cannot the beauty of miraculous nuance and gifted intangibles that, for the world, we swear we ARE and feel and move into and absorb.....a song, a word, a rhythm, a life, a hope...all coursing and living/dying:symbiosis.....i'm done for the night. i need a prayer............
A former member wrote: hmmm interesting... a tad bit of occasionalism thrown in here, I'm guessing in the 17th century, maybe, Malbraunch (sp) maybe, the idea that each basic element of the universe was recreated repeatedly and instantaneously by god gained popularity in philo
A former member wrote: philosophical circles, I think... something like that. In the beginning there was the word... if 'the word' a metaphor for the means by which creation occurred ... pensive write, perturbing even
On Sunday, February 4, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

This is definitely one of your best..and those last 3 lines were incredible..keep it going!!
On Sunday, February 18, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

The great poetry! You don't post enough..too busy hitting those midgets, I suppose :)
On Monday, February 5, 2007, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

hitting midgets, bitch.
On Tuesday, February 6, 2007, Jonas (715) wrote:

ah, yes
On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Bella Butchery (696) wrote:

applauds
On Thursday, February 1, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

I like this piece very much, very profound, sad and beautiful all at once. Ciao, T/S
On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Mylissa (825) wrote:

"as each individual beat of the heart is one that is unique.." profound statement. I like this a lot.