Pen and Drink

By purr_verse

The room is spinning and the wine is sweet
Little bubbles dance-dancing to my blast-heart-beat
With your words on the wall
and Perignon on my lips
Fermented gold apocalypse
My man of the hour
is always 3am
as the music throbs a pounding pulse of what-why-when
I might have had a point
but I forget
I bet
this won't make sense but nevertheless
with intoxicated rhythms
and syllabic distress
I immerse in borrowed glories and my drunkenness
I really think that I should think
a little bit less
of you
This world should have come with a warning.

I shout! I scream!
I die! I dream!
I want! I think!
I'll have! Another drink!
The sun's coming up on my mourning.

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Published on Saturday, December 20, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

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On Wednesday, February 5, 2014, BloodyMercy (64) wrote:

I have no idea what makes me enjoy this one so much, but it is a fantastic read - I can't say I relate... but since this one popped up I haven't been able to let it go!!! Great writing!!
A former member wrote: this write makes my head spin..just the way it flows, forces me to read it rather quickly..then i feel a bit dizzy at the end, euphoric but aware at the same time. i just..love this. i keep coming back to it today, just to read and read over and over.
A former member wrote: today isn't my first time reading this..but i guess it's the first time reading this coherently enough to form a comment that semi makes sense..heh..theres just so much i adore in this. it's like..whimsical with a touch of sadness..
A former member wrote: the last line kinda makes me think sadness..and "this world should have come with a warning". but then the exclamation parts just make me sort of happy for some reason. like, i just want to go around yelling "I'll have! Another drink!"
A former member wrote: i kinda want to sing this in my head..and maybe i will..it just seems like this has to be made into a song. i just can't stop repeating those last few lines in my head. just..perfect. completely. ~bethany
A former member wrote: the last line grabs the whole poem by the balls. gina
A former member wrote: "The sun's coming up on my mourning." Fabulous line. Another awesome poem, Purr.
On Wednesday, April 14, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

This was quickly done with... and it left a pulse, familiar... *looks around thinking* nice one purr.. your absolutly gifted.
On Saturday, April 3, 2004, girlafraid (479) wrote:

for some reason the end made me smile...and i liked it...*afraid*
On Thursday, March 11, 2004, sulkylime (191) wrote:

this is GREAT- i really like how you structured this and your rhyme scheme, and about your drunken genius contents.. well, i'm just about intoxicated only by reading this. lovely! --lime
On Thursday, February 26, 2004, Solace (1065) wrote:

I might have had a point but i forget...story of my life...
On Thursday, December 25, 2003, Tracer (99) wrote:

I agree, this does give the image of a drunken, depressed stupor (if that word isn't getting old yet)...^vTracerv^
A former member wrote: My man of the hour is always 3am... a greats poets line... I immerse in borrowed glories and my drunkenness...and this
A former member wrote: my choice would be a nice pinot chardonnay
On Wednesday, December 24, 2003, Spiritus_Frumenti (340) wrote:

beautiful piece...accurately depicts a drunken and depressed stupor, which makes you feel intoxicated by the time the poem ends......once again, i bow to you....
A former member wrote: 'this won't make sense but nevertheless with intoxicated rhythms' I now feel like i'm coming down the mountain...just because it's what the apocalypse ferments...SPlendid poem AGAIN!, the moon is falling down on my grace.
A former member wrote: Yep...so I'm another fan of "this world should come with a warning" Excellent line. I love drunken stupor poems :)
On Sunday, December 21, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358) wrote:

I really can describe how this resembles my thinkin'....."this world should have come with a warning"....this absolutely one favorite from you.
On Sunday, December 21, 2003, Jadednoir (28) wrote:

Wow! you remind me soooo fucking much of what it is like to write while intoxicated....lovely doll. "Fermented gold apocalypse...this won't make sense but nevertheless" great lines
On Saturday, December 20, 2003, Armand (54) wrote:

this new year's eve, Robert Burns should be forgotten and we should raise a cup of kindness yet and recite your closing lines... what an amazing talent you are, purr.
On Friday, January 23, 2004, shadowsinthelight (146) wrote:

Armand has replaced me! I humbly prostrate myself at your feet, my crimson Queen of quintessential prose. Damn, you are good! S. ;)
On Saturday, December 20, 2003, Drifter (265) wrote:

i love writing drunk... but i always fall asleeeeeeeeeee
On Saturday, December 20, 2003, Drea (1388) wrote:

"This world should have come with a warning." i love that line. this is a fantasic write and read. the last line nails it home.. ~Drea~
On Sunday, December 21, 2003, suicideseason (1636) wrote:

i agree with Drea.the ending really does the trick.awesome drunken-style!~season
A former member wrote: it has a slurred intensity, as in a dream and while reading it i began to hear the roaring sound of an ocean of voices and i got the image of blurred ballroom dancing, all very surreal. i esp liked this part: "I immerse in borrowed glories and my drunkenn
A former member wrote: ...ess" lol didn't quite make it there ^_^