Self: Sufficient

By purr_verse



i was a shy kid but i had
such self-confidence.
riding a carousel horse,
i was told to hold on
and i bypassed the reins
and the pole and instead
i gripped my jacket
as tight as i could
and held on,
just like daddy said to.

i mislaid bits and pieces of
that confidence in later years,
and clutched at so many
unstable poles and
broken reins;

but i had never fallen
from that carousel.


Grip your jacket.
Hold on tight.

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© 2007 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Thursday, May 10, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: This poem truely is self sufficient. I love the reitteration.

  • A former member wrote: As long as there's a jacket...innocent tone, very sweet words. "I had never fallen from that carousel." Somehow quite inspiring, through the mix of reflection and childhood memories.

  • Reefer_rave On Wednesday, October 10, 2007, Reefer_rave (139)By person wrote:

    I always hung on as a child but anymore i tend to let go of anything that would help stop the free fall. Sometimes i think i was right before.. this is very thought provoking but leaves me feeling torn between placidity and angst

  • Dancing_Monkey On Wednesday, September 19, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    This poem grows on me and changes shape into pure innocense. I love returning here

  • glasshouse On Wednesday, June 27, 2007, glasshouse (530)By person wrote:

    Oh honey. I love to come back and read this. Its so inspiring. A beautiful analogy and image. Where are you? Write more! I must check your page a few times a week so... you've got some catching up to do. ;) --Jes

  • carlosjackal On Monday, October 8, 2007, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    Seconded!! New writes, pleeeaase :) -Carl

  • A former member wrote: Yes, I do listen to Skyclad. Most of my inspirations come from gothic music such as Theatre of Tragedy and Tristania. I didn't know how else to reply (damn newbie !)

  • A former member wrote: "hold on" Stunning... absolutely vivid, poignant, sad, real... A soul revealed and hope for others ("Grip your jacket") in this 'carousel' lifeRide... what else can anyone do? Simple yet complex="10".

  • flying_fox On Wednesday, May 16, 2007, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    This makes me smile because it is SO true. when the chips are down, you can always count on yourself. And me. You can hang on to my jacket any time you want. xxx

  • Sepulcrawl On Friday, May 11, 2007, Sepulcrawl (78)By person wrote:

    some of yours ideas seem a bit disjointed, but interest sprawls across your scrawlings.

  • A former member wrote: Some of the best poetry are disjointed scrawls... puzzles, enigmas, layers, Hughes, e. e.; we are all teeth to our pens from the simplest something to the most complex nothing.

  • birdwell On Friday, May 11, 2007, birdwell (138)By person wrote:

    i somehow feel better now, thanks for sharing a little of your light ~db~

  • unspeakable truth On Thursday, May 10, 2007, unspeakable truth (94)By person wrote:

    Powerful.... I loved this it so works perfectly in my head.... Scholar

  • blue On Thursday, May 10, 2007, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    ~b

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, May 10, 2007, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    @:) The simplicity of this disguises just how wonderful and clever it really is. As ever, you're bloomin' brilliant, Natalie! -Carl

  • stormtalk On Thursday, May 10, 2007, stormtalk (727)By person wrote:

    a real poet

  • glasshouse On Thursday, May 10, 2007, glasshouse (530)By person wrote:

    Great message. Great images. Well done. -Glass

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, May 10, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    That could match your creative art. I simply love this one of yours as much as the others you have written over time. An honour indeed to be one of those you share these soul pieces with. Much love and all. Peter

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, May 10, 2007, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    It might just be me, but the whole part about a woman holding on to unstable poles screams falos to me! Apart from the fear of that beeing true, I have to say that this reminds me of a Simpsons Eppisode and the fact that there is not one poet on this site

  • Anth On Thursday, May 10, 2007, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    i knew from the title it was you, this is an ingeniosuly well thought out work, i love the cutingness of it, the ending, reminds me slightly of ulvers music.

  • A former member wrote: "Ulver's music" Anth, you just gained major kudos from Purr... nice.

  • Anth On Thursday, May 10, 2007, Anth (1126)By person wrote:

    this is another of yours that demands reading over and over, until memorised

  • Bella Butchery On Thursday, May 10, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    i love how your work seems to warp me to moments in my life, ether abstract or circumstantial, i always seem to relate to your work, kudos girl with the ink tongue.

  • A former member wrote: wow. this poem took me for a ride in which i had to hold on tight. great job. ~Tamara

  • Sepulcrawl On Friday, May 11, 2007, Sepulcrawl (78)By person wrote:

    stfu

  • flying_fox On Wednesday, May 16, 2007, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    ummm... who exactly are you directing this at and why?


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