InAnimate

By purr_verse



No mere arena
can suppress the F1 multiracecar roar -
a circular crescendo
that pierces the city,
twists and shrieks
down avenues and alleyways,
reflects from crevasses,
echoes from incorrect corners
and belies its true source,
omnipresent as it screams
from officeblock wall
to wail to wall to wail to wall,
passes around up and over the skyscraper streets,
the caterwaul cry of speed
as everywhere as the faded graffiti
that quietly chokes an aging, bent factory;
and the ferocious octane banshee
charges through that longdead scrawl,
suffuses those forgotten bricks,
bringing to the dying structure
velocity's strength
and the factory leans over
just a little further,
breathing the power,
dreaming of triumph.


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© 2007 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Sunday, March 18, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Nimue44 On Thursday, March 3, 2016, Nimue44 (289)By person wrote:

    You brought to life the race of F1 I went to last year... a concise, aesthetic, colorful description of the experience. Makes me want to go see races again!

  • Void Vortex On Thursday, March 3, 2016, Void Vortex (298)By person wrote:

    Astounding perception. this piece could relating to a number of things (my mind never left the gutter ;) Nice write!

  • Phalanx On Sunday, February 28, 2016, Phalanx (628)By person wrote:

    The first half was words reaching through banging steal. The last half was much more the perfect picture.

  • A former member wrote: "omnipresent as it screams from officeblock wall to wail to wall to wail to wall;" Love this gasolene fueled pocket of engine-pulse; "and the ferocious octane banshee!" Someone should buy you a Ferrari! This fast-paced poem scrawls w/ sound. Nice!

  • A former member wrote: Your writing is always a kind of adjective from the complex vocabulry of what is your pace/place/prose; it changes like refrActed light, the density of the sounds you create; your arena. I can feel those "forgotten bricks" breathing in the crescendo...

  • A former member wrote: ...and roar of the F1s 'cross "the skyscraper streets"; inAnimate, alive, aware. "velocity's strength."

  • johntaiyu On Monday, March 19, 2007, johntaiyu (14)By person wrote:

    very cool...leaning breathing buildings!

  • birdwell On Monday, March 19, 2007, birdwell (138)By person wrote:

    what wonderful words bring to life in my mind these streaking images... ~db~

  • A former member wrote: '...the ferocious octane banshee..' -what an interesting and amusing metaphor -loved it!

  • blue On Sunday, March 18, 2007, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    What the.. hell? haha! This was so fantastic; you've completely caught me off guard with this one. "echoes from incorrect corners" ... "from officeblock wall to wail to wall to wail to wall" =)=)=)

  • blue On Sunday, March 18, 2007, blue (1409)By person wrote:

    It kinda reminds me of that feeling you get from something or someone that just comes along at the right time, in that right way, unlocking buried strength and will. It worked. Lady. She keeps rocking!! rawr. ~b


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