my precious soldier
By Sin
my precious soldier
head held high
all broken inside
as you bare the burden
of the world on your back
your smiles
never reach your haunted eyes
and you lay
all your scars out like medals
before me
each one holding a memory
of a battle won and lost
you see yourself as damaged
all tainted and unclean
but with those
war weathered hands
you hold
my bleeding heart so tenderly
while all those
cracks in your armor
are held together by pride
only the night sees your tears
and all those ghosts
you try to hide
you payed your pennance
in full
with all your pain
so ill wash your bloody hands clean
and caress all your old wounds
that still bleed
my eyes will only hold love
as they look upon you
because your own lonely sentence
is all the judgement you need
ill pray salvation finds you
because all the battles youve fought
arent half as brutal
as the wars you wage against yourself
so my precious soldier
when you grow weary of fighting
come seek the shelter of my arms
and lay your head upon my breast
ill whisper to you of love
and lay all your demons to rest
Comments on "my precious soldier"
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A former member wrote:
I love the second stanza. It makes the poem.
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On Sunday, February 7, 2016, Lab Rat
(124) wrote:
still gets me...
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On Thursday, November 15, 2012, Deviated09
(90) wrote:
Wow.. just wow... Very excellent write. I know these curses and how they can affect one. Very beautifully wrote!
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On Thursday, October 2, 2008, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
*bows* Truly a magnification work of art. If only every solider who came home had someone to hold them and care for them like this.
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On Monday, February 11, 2008, Circe Avalon
(115) wrote:
This poem is the best by far of soldier poems. Truly a masterpiece. Hold your head up high, you nailed the nail on the head.
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On Monday, February 11, 2008, totaltrip
(36) wrote:
nice. very nice. i like this a lot.
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On Friday, December 28, 2007, italianbella
(183) wrote:
your words touch the heart and soul this was beautiful
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On Sunday, July 22, 2007, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
You. Just you. You radiate such a sensual tenderness.... so expressively beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
this hurt me to read, and yet felt so good. wonderful words I wish someone would say to me...
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A former member wrote:
a triumphant tribute, tender and so classically expressed... your rhyme polishes your reason, and both lift my spirits and grant hope in humanity... gorgeous, love!
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On Sunday, July 30, 2006, veingo
(526) wrote:
Inhale.... hold.... And.... Ahhhhhh! What a wonderful feeling it must be, to have these things said to you. ^V^
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A former member wrote:
This is a beautiful poem, I have a friend who you perfectly just described.
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On Saturday, October 22, 2005, Army Barbie
(316) wrote:
Gracious. This is so...painfully lovely. It hurt to read this, and will hurt again when I re-read it.
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A former member wrote:
.... this still does it...
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A former member wrote:
As men, we've two choices of death! Either on our feet and screaming, or in her arms while dreaming! Hmmm...tough choice? Armour's so futile from the inside..annit just!
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On Sunday, May 22, 2005, Mr King
(547) wrote:
honorary, beautiful, and heartfelt dedication... you acknowledge their struggle and pain as lovingly and clearly as anyone who loves a soldier can in this piece... 1, Seth
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On Sunday, May 22, 2005, serotonin lost
(140) wrote:
i loved this although i can't find the words to expess how much.
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On Saturday, May 21, 2005, Leigh
(14) wrote:
knowing 1st hand how brutal those memories are to the soldier & their loved ones...truly beautiful & giving
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On Saturday, May 21, 2005, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
beautiful is not stong enough of a word for this...it goes beyond that into something all encompassing in truth beauty sincerity and compassion wrapped in perfection...breathless
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On Saturday, May 21, 2005, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
soldier of time unkown be it ancient or present the heart weeps for...wonderful.....O
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On Saturday, May 21, 2005, DarkDruidess
(313) wrote:
beautiful...utterly...
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A former member wrote:
i've never shed tears to poetry before now.
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On Saturday, May 21, 2005, manunkind
(64) wrote:
wow, i was totally prepared to be dissapointed! dark poetry is really dissapointing me lately. YOU, however, DO NOT!! wonderful write!
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On Friday, May 20, 2005, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
Good piece - I especially like the lines "all the battles youve fought arent half as brutal as the wars you wage against yourself" Ciao, T/S
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A former member wrote:
This was haunting and sweet at the same time. Very sad but very nicely written. ~Ryan
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On Friday, May 20, 2005, Serenity
(469) wrote:
Agreed! :)