I Was Never That Beautiful
By Mylissa
The morning mist kissed the
green pasture, as it spoke of autumn dew.
Dripping a coat of frozen foot-prints,
leaking memories of only you.
I decided the sun was use-less that day. A point-less
picture of misplaced energies. It left me stranded.
abandoned, with frost bitten emotions, a hypothermic
ache.
And I remembered he romanced me blind with
a thorn not a rose. Reciting verses of you’s and I’s.
labeled poetry but not a poem. only virtue(al)
reality. A linear brutality of a love spoken upon deaf ears.
A heart home-less, hope-less.
a melancholy space. a trace
of Venus and spun sugar. He
still evolves. Revolving around the sun.
though “we” no longer have “that” gravitation(al) pull.
He told me I never was that beautiful.
So I engraved a picture of a sand-dollar
against the crease of his forehead. Today
I would find the shell whole. A beautiful score
of an oceans floor. Artistry that would last forever.
Then I realized my imagination got the best of me…
Sadly, so did he.
Comments on "I Was Never That Beautiful"
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On Friday, February 15, 2019, Jonas Robinson
(848) wrote:
You are beautiful. :)
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On Tuesday, October 9, 2018, Lux
(280) wrote:
That last line.... Speechless.
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On Tuesday, April 29, 2014, openureyes
(55) wrote:
Come back, beautiful I miss your work!
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A former member wrote:
deep, very intense and very well written!
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A former member wrote:
This piece is truly intense and gorgeous! The imagery and atmosphere swallows me! I was wondering if it isn't a bother would you check out my poetry, and give me your honest opinion? Positive or Negative I can take it either way!
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On Tuesday, June 2, 2009, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
amazing...this was cleverly written and the imagery was astounding...
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On Wednesday, January 7, 2009, Spiritus_Frumenti
(340) wrote:
my god this was great...it was so fluid and deep...like getting drowned in the deepest ocean...-l-
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On Wednesday, November 21, 2007, xserratedsoulx
(212) wrote:
great title.
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On Thursday, July 19, 2007, ArtemisticSin
(17) wrote:
Wow, very meaningful...the first lines made me feel the cold
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On Thursday, June 28, 2007, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
and thats how you rhyme... nicely done
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On Thursday, June 28, 2007, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
the thorn idea is also top-notch
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A former member wrote:
awesome closing line. "and I remembered... not a rose" is crazy, beautiful and sad.
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A former member wrote:
You just sandblasted me with that entire ocean floor. And the flavor was oh so perfect. -END
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A former member wrote:
Wow, really enjoyed this. Such stunning imagery!
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On Saturday, February 3, 2007, jack paper
(121) wrote:
abandoned with frost bitten emotions.. oh my gosh.. you evoke such feeling.. thank you for another great write
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On Friday, February 2, 2007, Armor for your life
(9) wrote:
Holy crap that was so good. This is what I look for when I read a poem. The shining example of passion, feeling, and thought. Time may press on and leave many things behind, but this will always be perfect.
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On Friday, February 2, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
Fantastic! The casual concluding verse was the perfect closing line for this - it really makes it. Ciao, T/S
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On Friday, February 2, 2007, Philla
(95) wrote:
Never had I read something that made more sense in both poetry and life. So beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
"A linear brutality of a love spoken upon deaf ears." Pure beauty; enchanting elegance. Many moments of a clever poet: "virtue(al) reality/gravitation(al)/evolves. Revolving". If you were never that beautiful, you must've been just a shade away as the ...
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A former member wrote:
.. "morning mist". Beautiful is a word, & the word is beautiful.
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On Thursday, February 1, 2007, Tonights Decision
(132) wrote:
damn... and.. damn.perfect.
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A former member wrote:
Heartwrenching. This is one of the most beautiful poems I've ever had the pleasure of reading. You are absolutely stunning.
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On Thursday, February 1, 2007, carlosjackal
(2787) wrote:
Achingly gorgeous write..the words were spun fantastic. Write on..
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A former member wrote:
Awwww... Well done. -Marlena
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A former member wrote:
*eats some of the brownies* hey! this is classically, timelessly, intensely gorgeous... the internal rhyme and meter caresses the reader like swollen lips breathing above aching skin... an awaiting passionate embrace... the "less"s mimic the implied loss.
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
Be careful they are "magic" brownies..lol ;)
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A former member wrote:
Hey, where can I get some of those verses? eh? I'm thinkin' I could use a few ;) captivating, enchanting work!
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, LOKI
(161) wrote:
This is beautiful as are you.Only a fool would think other wise.I'll probably read this again in a bit.Amazing.:)Muaaah
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
no matter what, from what i have seen and read, you are beautiful on the inside, so reflects in your writing. your writing is evolving as you write more, trully stunning
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, GraveFlower
(240) wrote:
amazing, you took all words from my mind and filled it with......wow......beautiful ~*dani*~
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Sealed Identity
(31) wrote:
I just read this again.. I love you poetically.
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
That was beautiful...thank you.
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A former member wrote:
Very good write..
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A former member wrote:
Well this little bit of lyrical spice was pleasantly unexpected. Very, very nicely done. Great example of personification in the first stanza and the last lines wrapped it up beautifully with a black bow. I'll be keeping my eye on you.
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Army Barbie
(316) wrote:
Oh wow...this is lovely. I'm glad I took the time to read ya.
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Sin
(1135) wrote:
im not sure which is more beautiful the poem or the poet..but this was marvelous ~kristy
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On Monday, July 9, 2012, Sin
(1135) wrote:
I still love this. miss you and your words ~k
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On Friday, October 13, 2017, Sin
(1135) wrote:
By God this is still devastating perfection!
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
"A linear brutality of a love spoken upon deaf ears". the pain within this was horrendous, but so addictively atunning.. every line had me engrossed. Fuck whoever said you were never that beautiful. Gorgeous work.
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On Wednesday, January 31, 2007, Sealed Identity
(31) wrote:
this was a wonderful write! one of my fav's.. ~Ken