monochrome dreams.

By verablue



And I don’t remember her name when she stood near you
When she wore your skin in the cold blood of December

I only remember the monochrome song of our saturated history
Weaving a disaster
Like vultures tearing apart warm flesh under the desert sun

And I don’t see glory through your eyes
When I look back into her cold steel heart
Just rust and tarnished brass
Bones tangled around stories of fairytales gone wrong


But we’re more sophisticated than that now.

With our nano-machines running programs
Of pure cut language.
Words rolling around on your tongue
Scattering into the cracks of the wooden floor


And I don’t remember her name
When she cut you into tiny pieces with sterling silver cutlery
Her Victorian eyes burning holes through your overcoat
Revealing cold, un-oiled machinery

Do you dream them too?


But I like pretending we’re more sophisticated than that now.

Our technology has become more intricate
Our emotions, more complex

But that raw feeling I get in my gut when you're inside her,
Inside me.

That horrible taste in my mouth when her words reach your ears
Makes me crumble

Makes me wish it weren’t too late to be someone else

“I love you” feels hollow when spoken through her poison lips

That haunting memory that I was someone before I was her
Is just out of my peripheral vision
I can almost reach out and touch it in my dreams….

Almost.


Do you dream them too?


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Copyright 2010 verablue
Published on Saturday, August 18, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: this was so beautiful

  • Bella Butchery On Wednesday, August 22, 2007, Bella Butchery (696)By person wrote:

    will come back and post a insightfull comment when the 'this is not quite finished' heading is dropped. to be continued

  • A former member wrote: So awesome. Im glad to see you posting something. You are truly amazing

  • Mylissa On Sunday, August 19, 2007, Mylissa (825)By person wrote:

    I personally think it ends with a ache, with the question of pounding thought. It is perfectly done...lovely. I have to say a fav. So wonderfully done!!

  • A former member wrote: the ending is left dangling well. reiterates the slight tilt for this piece. ..an underlying that you arent alone in your swirling, not completely isolated in the paint.. microcosms of memory linked together quietly, incoherently in places is beautiful---

  • A former member wrote: i like the disyncopated feel; just as most dreams are. .and the dreams of us..who we are/were--- someone else's all together, we are not our own i think. ..great to see you post again --ness

  • Alanarchy On Saturday, August 18, 2007, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    I have to disagree with hatter san on this one. Feels to me like it very well COULD be finished. I loved the way it ends the most. Can't wait to see where it goes when it gets to where your going.

  • The Zebra Warrior On Sunday, August 19, 2007, The Zebra Warrior (1495)By person wrote:

    welllllllllll.....I'm disagreeing with you....I say it captures a dream-esque feel which needs no definitive start or end...so there ya sasquatch hairy lipped goobster...hahaha *runs*

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, August 19, 2007, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Ooh! That be fightin' talk!

  • Alanarchy On Saturday, August 18, 2007, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    My one complaint is that the text is hard to read on a black background. Had to squint a bit.

  • verablue On Saturday, August 18, 2007, verablue (106)By person wrote:

    really? the text is white....at least on my computer it is.

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, August 18, 2007, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    Your note is white but the poem is in blue. I found it fine to read.

  • verablue On Saturday, August 18, 2007, verablue (106)By person wrote:

    did that fix it? i tried to make it a pale grey, but it didn't show up on my computer so i figured i must have gotten the color code wrong and didn't bother taking it out. perhaps it has something to do with the browser i'm using.

  • carlosjackal On Saturday, August 18, 2007, carlosjackal (2788)By person wrote:

    This stands out without any revisions and flows with great detail and confessional narrative. Thumbs up from me :)

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