upon a cross of dreams [with a crown of metaphors]

By Six-Out




this pen.
is my rusty nail.
leaving scars in my palm
in the wake of this
daily.crucifixion.

and I'd like to state- that I am nothing original
wisping overused words that mean little.
when I'm counting star-drops
and playing connect-the-dots with
my fa(u)ltered breathing. existing.
is all one can do- when...

and I'm no- broken record.
that's so retro. it just seems as if
my finger is lingering. on the repeat.button
maybe this time.
I can mean what I bleed.

bleeding. is as overrated as breathing.
and I like to scream at the moments
I'll never forget- as if time cares.
because it's the only father figure. I have.

and so. I'm speaking/ in broken fragments.
because anything more fractured than me
-obviously. makes me look better in comparison.
and who wouldn't want to look
into a shattered mirror. and see a saint.
cracked facial features. and a lopsided smile.
picasso would be proud.


so this burnt heart
is the only reminder now.
of this daily.crucifix(a)tion. bury me.
because being born was a big enough burden.
the first time.

and they tell me- this is art.
I say this is perversion of perception.
look closer.



you.cant.see[me]

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© 2007 Jon Rodgers
Published on Sunday, January 21, 2007.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Qurious On Saturday, November 7, 2009, Qurious (40)By person wrote:

    beautiful. really.

  • Jaded Jezzabelle On Monday, March 16, 2009, Jaded Jezzabelle (328)By person wrote:

    interesting way to end it....personally i think a piece of us can be seen in any thing artistic we create...good write

  • A former member wrote: absolutely love it

  • xserratedsoulx On Tuesday, February 12, 2008, xserratedsoulx (212)By person wrote:

    LOVE it.

  • Reefer_rave On Tuesday, August 14, 2007, Reefer_rave (146)By person wrote:

    So many parts of this are flawless, nothing could be added.

  • zanewill On Sunday, January 28, 2007, zanewill (84)By person wrote:

    edgar allen poe wrote:"...it has not yet been settled whether madness is or is not the loftiest form of intelligence...whether disease of thought creates or destroys..." that is the opening line of his 1st published work, "elenora"

  • Aunty Depressant On Friday, January 26, 2007, Aunty Depressant (434)By person wrote:

    For so many cliches...very interesting,...though painful subject, not painful to read. Gestalt of the overused, fashioned nicely.

  • lstdarkness On Friday, January 26, 2007, lstdarkness (26)By person wrote:

    i hope that one day my writing can achieve the level that this does. amazing write.

  • carlosjackal On Thursday, January 25, 2007, carlosjackal (3011)By person wrote:

    All I can say is this is yet another fantastic piece from your rusty nail. Write the hell on..

  • elisa On Tuesday, January 23, 2007, elisa (1616)By person wrote:

    i love this piece and everything it stands for.....those last four lines ..feel so right;)

  • Arianna On Monday, January 22, 2007, Arianna (105)By person wrote:

    fuck, jon...this is a masterpiece. ~Amy

  • Alanarchy On Monday, January 22, 2007, Alanarchy (1200)By person wrote:

    Those last two sections, and that last fractured line- fucking hammers, man. Great work!

  • Cattarax On Sunday, January 21, 2007, Cattarax (215)By person wrote:

    Six ... this .. I dont even know where to begin .. I search for the words to descibe how wonderful this is ... and there isnt .. beautifully put together .. but the meaning so dark ..

  • Cattarax On Sunday, January 21, 2007, Cattarax (215)By person wrote:

    " I am nothing original" Jon you are as most unique as they come .. but I guess this is deeper in then you chose to let any one see most of the time .. ~T~

  • PoeticHellion On Sunday, January 21, 2007, PoeticHellion (191)By person wrote:

    I never have anything intelligent to say. This is no exeception.

  • Drifter On Sunday, January 21, 2007, Drifter (268)By person wrote:

    and who wouldn't want to look into a shattered mirror. and see a saint. - that really caught me. awesome.

  • DowngradeBeauty On Sunday, January 21, 2007, DowngradeBeauty (29)By person wrote:

    WOnderfuls. I likey this one dollface!! MWAHZZ

  • A former member wrote: I love this poem. period.

  • BeautifullyRuined On Sunday, January 21, 2007, BeautifullyRuined (94)By person wrote:

    Stunning.

  • Drea On Sunday, January 21, 2007, Drea (1443)By person wrote:

    "bleeding. is as overrated as breathing./and I like to scream at the moments/I'll never forget- as if time cares./because it's the only father figure. I have." This made me so proud of you, Jon.

  • Mylissa On Sunday, January 21, 2007, Mylissa (845)By person wrote:

    Lovely.

  • verablue On Sunday, January 21, 2007, verablue (111)By person wrote:

    so happy to read new material by you...its always a pleasure. that third verse really hit....took my breath for a moment. i love that feeling....when words can do that.

  • Sin On Sunday, January 21, 2007, Sin (1168)By person wrote:

    you have a fucking beautiful mind! no matter your flaws your words always suit you...display some deep meaning that leaves a sweet taste lingering on the tongue, as always this was nothing short of spectacular ~kristy


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