minus eloquence

By red_haze

i write you in ink,
stain my hands with your name,
callus my fingers
with the effort to unburden.

and sometimes,
i just sit quietly,
wishing i had the words...

but my muse laughs,
and tells me: 'it's but a dream'.

and my hands begin to shake...

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Published on Wednesday, February 4, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "minus eloquence"

On Monday, April 30, 2018, Alchemist (679) wrote:

Dreams of a muse. Somber and precise.
On Monday, April 30, 2018, Smiles (55) wrote:

So much conveyed in a few short lines. Fantastic writing
On Sunday, February 26, 2006, Sin (1135) wrote:

captivating from the title to the end.. wonderful write ~kristy
On Monday, April 27, 2009, Sin (1135) wrote:

i still love this
On Friday, August 12, 2005, blue (1409) wrote:

I've nothing of worth to say to this.. truly remarkable! hmm, is that a contradiction? er well, most enjoyed all the same :) ~b
On Friday, August 12, 2005, not an addict (45) wrote:

it can be a thin line, at times, to differentiate between dream and reality (more so, even, when it is just the dream we would have as our reality).
On Friday, August 12, 2005, not an addict (45) wrote:

still, reality is only relative... and it could be argued that, in affecting the creation of such poetry as this, said dreams take on a reality all their own.
On Friday, August 12, 2005, not an addict (45) wrote:

-hence, i assume, the shaking of the hands... the uncertainty associated with such passions, and the cruel accompanying idea that our reality may also be dream.
A former member wrote: sometimes i feel the same way, and u jus express it so well with so much talent.
On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, stormtalk (727) wrote:

Gotta love when the title makes the poem. I like the part about the muse calling it a dream, too. Overall, and as always, excellent work. Feed me more!
On Friday, February 27, 2004, red_haze (52) wrote:

you are always too nice to me.
On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, flying_fox (571) wrote:

fabulous - conveys so much with so few words. FF
On Friday, February 27, 2004, red_haze (52) wrote:

your kindness is very much appreciated.
On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

marvellous, with a beautifully powerful conclusive line. i love it. purr
On Friday, February 27, 2004, red_haze (52) wrote:

thanks. and i thought this felt.. incomplete.
A former member wrote: Second line first verse...well done. +T.P.U+
On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, red_haze (52) wrote:

thank you. :)
On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, manicheism (43) wrote:

i really love you work and style, although i can't find the words to properly commend it. keep it up.
On Thursday, February 5, 2004, yslehc (334) wrote:

oo cool.. i like your style very much too.. it's .. weird in a way
On Wednesday, February 4, 2004, red_haze (52) wrote:

i'm quite inarticulate, so again... thank you for your wonderful comments.
On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, stormtalk (727) wrote:

While I'm on the compliment rampage, I should mention that you're as about inarticulate as the child of a dictionary and encyclopedia.