Raking Rain

By knightmirror

earthshattering winds conjure
brainstorm's clouds
filling minds with whisperhaps
this is the calling
invading indecisive decisions
harboring walls built
to eventually spill onto pages
written to release
sight that has become a blur
listening to sounds
popping like a gun full of caps
sparking angst hauling
emotions to fulfillittle missions
destroying all guilt
from begining to end in stages
that eventually decrease
chances

of failing des/tiny sprinkling
faith that tries
bulking up strength that's inside
waiting to fight
for you
for me

bonesplitting shards reveal
the souls marrow
milkyway of eternal roadsanity
swoops and glides
be/foreshadowing lighted hearts
closing doubts eyes
opening windows quickly withinsight
one can truely see
without even having to steal
patches of narrow
moonbeams showering glows infinitely
taking short strides
immeasureable by any of man's charts,
or tears he cries
thinking

of failing des/tiny sprinkling
faith that tries
bulking up strength that's inside
waiting to fight

for us

without losing hope

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Published on Saturday, May 1, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Raking Rain"

A former member wrote: 'sight that has become a blur listening to sounds...be/foreshadowing lighted hearts' this is most excellent and the style is splendid... well done; bravo!
On Monday, May 3, 2004, Lynaes (854) wrote:

This is truly magnificent work, and so strong. I feel like I can particularly relate to the first stanza. The whole piece is so greatly gripping and inspiring. I love you the words you use, so imaginative. Gorgeous work, I love it. ~L
On Monday, May 3, 2004, WinterGrave (258) wrote:

nicely done, loved it.~~~GRave
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405) wrote:

Wow...thats was astonishing...very well detailed. -Morb
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, OLd SouL (717) wrote:

I'm with purr... 'filling minds with whisperhaps' my fav line in this... Wonderful from beginning to end. Its nice to see the pen write outside of the page. :::OLd
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

dammit, i wish i'd come up with 'whisperhaps' first. >:) great stuff. "be/foreshadowing lighted hearts": lovely... and i like the way this one concludes... gently powerful... very nice indeed. :) ...and i can kind of see the caterpillarness Monkey mention
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

..mentions. lol. (goddamn truncation!)
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

coolness. I agree with anth. And I must say, this looks like a catapillar..
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, DoctorAsh (371) wrote:

hrm . i like this you hay pail. interesting structure, and interesting vocabulary configurations/bricks. I like the following line the bestess [bulking up strength that's inside, waiting to fight, for you, for me] Excellent. [D&A]
A former member wrote: it seems somewhat frantic in the beginning..and then slows into an evening pace. wonderful work, darling.
On Sunday, May 2, 2004, Anth (1126) wrote:

superlative work once more, i always anticipate the new words you invent, they style here is electric, one of my faves of yours, everyline is just so cool and inspiring