Withering

By knightmirror

whimpering flows on waves
of wind
causing my eyes to tear up
with dirt
turning to mud,blinding me
in pity
kind/nestles
in my sight like a thorn in
my side
inside this wilted rose that's
dying from
lack of compassion i accept
from noone
not even myself

how am i to grow if i don't allow
myslef to?
how am i to allow myself if i
am you?

put two and two together

screaming skims sining seas
of sorrow
drowning me withinspite of
waking smiles
that hide be/hindsight 20/20
ways go
forward
travelling back in/tonight
as beams
stream down from the heavens
clouds that
rain bitterness upon souls of
mischief
not helping

it's said beauty is in the eye of the beholder
then who's eye is this?

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Published on Thursday, April 29, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Withering"

On Monday, May 3, 2004, WinterGrave (258) wrote:

damn, im glad i decided to read your work after all this time you been here, i think ill read some more.~~~GRave
A former member wrote: "screaming skims sining seas of sorrow" This is my favourite line. Knightmirror you truly are talented and the last line leaves me in deep thought. Well done. =-MO-=
On Saturday, May 1, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405) wrote:

Wow...beats me whose eyes it is...but it's great either way, lol. -Morb
On Friday, April 30, 2004, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

"be/hindsight": that's awesome! please accept my petty envy. *smiles* ..and i agree with everyone who's already remarked on the excellence of the ending.
On Friday, April 30, 2004, Lynaes (854) wrote:

This made my heart ache, yet I can't fully explain why.feelings you hate effect the way you see things, and it stays with you niggling indeed like a thorn in your side.the last two lines were devastating. Beautiful, refined work I love it. -L
On Friday, April 30, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

hel yea.. I dig the flow and structurte.. I belive that this is the way that I also write ocationly.. And to see this work is awsome. thanks man for a good read :O. Monkey
A former member wrote: i'm not too sure what to make of this; again, i begin to feel im sick with simple-mindedness (it's a passing phase). Most certainly deep, almost immeasurably......
A former member wrote: The wells from which you pull your talent possess a water of intellect, rich with the taste of intellect. Detached from your emotions, describing them in vivid detail. .... too bad i can't break your code, lol. ;)
On Friday, April 30, 2004, DoctorAsh (371) wrote:

very impressive .. structure i give an A+ .. for it didnt slip one time . and for the questions that lay beneath the words ... beautiful write. [D&A]
On Thursday, April 29, 2004, A Velvet Tongue (434) wrote:

Before we can find truith in others, we must find it in ourselves, it can be a lifelong process and it seems you are well on you way...beautiful and insightful write! Bravo! *Vel*
A former member wrote: hMmMmmm. We likes it...+T.P.U+
A former member wrote: I love how you ended this...as if it weren't exquisite enough already...but that was just the greatest conclusion I've seen in a while. "Rain bitterness upon souls of mischief"...Magnificent.
On Saturday, May 1, 2004, Anth (1126) wrote:

just totally excellent,everyline screams cool and imaginative, the structure and feel, the wording its all so knightmirrorish and that is the highest compliment ..superb