7 Words Save Me

By knightmirror

numbed
walking this road
falling
apart behind me with
every
step i continue to
take
it's like day'send
while
i consistenly burn
away
troubles i've created
since
this whole thing started

where is the finishline

just as i ask this odd question to myself
an entity swoops down ripping my unseen
wings off my human shoulders i was saving
for a rainy day

peeling open my stitched eyes
bleeding lashes
that were self inflicted before
my inanimate
birth destined to consu/me
withinsecurities
hailing tears through this
undeserved halo

protecting
nothing
smothering
suffering
bringing
screaming
begging

save me

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Published on Sunday, April 25, 2004. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "7 Words Save Me"

On Thursday, July 22, 2004, NikesRain (1240) wrote:

..I liked the structure of this. Each section in it's own form yet each one flowing into the next. The ending was so hard hitting in it's pleading and quiet request. Astounding.
On Tuesday, May 25, 2004, aXe FactoR (333) wrote:

"peeling open my stitched eyes bleeding lashes" wow... painful indeed. gripping write and powerful words. :)
On Monday, April 26, 2004, murder_in_clubland (384) wrote:

I love this. . . ~ss
On Monday, April 26, 2004, Lynaes (854) wrote:

Such a wonderfully delicate piece, the last line, "save me" really hit hard and ended it perfectly. Amazing work. -L
On Monday, April 26, 2004, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

i'm afraid i have to offer you the banality of "wow" for the triad of lines beginning with "an entity" - that is just simply wonderful, powerful wording. "withinsecurities": fab wordmeld. :)
On Sunday, April 25, 2004, manywalks (747) wrote:

My hat off to you; amazing write, full of emotion and perfected grace. ~ mw
On Sunday, April 25, 2004, maddin foxxxy (358) wrote:

I have to agree . .so much emotion and elegance.. . it's so well done I forgot it had sad words in it .. delightful all way through.