Hey Baby (Don't ask - I'm pissed)

By cre

I know this is a little nutty, I'm all kinds of pissed.

hey baby

give me a smile

want to beg me

while

i make my choice

between your death

or drawing out your breath

i might like to watch you scream

i think i could get used

to watching you cry

while you die

wanna whine a little bit?

tell me 'bout the pain?

oh, im sorry,

did you think i was sane?

after all the hell

you dealt

baby you just better pray

you die sometime today

cause i've no plans

for tomorrow

and i just might enjoy

dragging out your sorrow.

what's that?

you're sorry?

you never meant to hurt me?

excuse me, please

while I laugh a little bit.

You think I still buy that shit?

baby, your blood is mine

don't think i dont remember

the times

you cracked my bones

and left me alone

you thought the glint in my eye

meant i was sad and might cry

sorry baby

that glint was madness breaking loose

now that madness . . .

is visited on you.

poetic justice, baby

aint it grand?

I kinda think it is

and . . .

oops, were you trying to speak?

kinda hard when you can't breathe.

it's ok baby

I'll be sure to craft your epitaph

maybe some words to make me laugh

cause i'll be breathing precious air

and you'll have worms

in your hair.

regretful much?

bye bye baby, i'm off to lunch.

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Published on Sunday, August 17, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "Hey Baby (Don't ask - I'm pissed)"

On Thursday, June 27, 2019, Just Dave (448) wrote:

Wow. I hope this was purging. Great write. JD
A former member wrote: Revenge can be very sweet.. I like very much the style of this piece.. It's a good mixture of sarcasm, darkness and rage! Very well penned.. :)
On Saturday, March 2, 2013, Star (879) wrote:

utterly perfect!
On Wednesday, November 16, 2011, Poe Etiquette (124) wrote:

so insightful and well crafted. i love the use of imagery and alliteration. you really must know what youre doing
A former member wrote: wow this made me laugh with insanity...thoughts similar to these have been going through my mind the past few days
On Friday, May 12, 2006, Kinkypoptart (555) wrote:

This write has always been enjoyable for me. I just keep coming back and reading it over and over. Great job ~*~Tart~*~
On Sunday, September 4, 2005, precarious pixie (11) wrote:

hell ya.Right On Girl.way to describe the madness in all of us.but chicks are especially precarious.and once we let loose theres no turning back.
A former member wrote: NICE!!! I LOVE THIS
A former member wrote: that so kicks ass! frickin ya it rocks i luv your writting
On Monday, April 5, 2004, BoldSolitude (214) wrote:

"Oh, i'm sorry, did you think I was sane" I liked that, :) Oh, and the glint of madness too.
On Friday, January 9, 2004, Methos (121) wrote:

So much underlying within the depths of this one..a truly great write..-Methos
A former member wrote: Woah... I like the sarcasm in it!! REALLY Great!!
On Saturday, October 25, 2003, Cinn (152) wrote:

wow just wow, what else can i say really?
On Friday, October 24, 2003, SilentStalker (1047) wrote:

...I'm very surprised to see you write like this...though I like it, I agree with Fawn...whoever made you feel this way...I hope they got what was coming to them...
On Friday, October 24, 2003, SilentStalker (1047) wrote:

...honestly, though, I prefer your lighter works...but nice work, anyway... -Darun
On Thursday, October 9, 2003, Sky Singer (153) wrote:

no, i don't find it "nutty" at all :) very well said, as meesed up as it may be. bravo!
On Saturday, September 20, 2003, Blinded_Tiger (518) wrote:

To be ripped of air by a choking soul. Tiger
On Wednesday, September 3, 2003, Demosthenes (155) wrote:

QUIT BEING SO BLOODY TALENTED! or not. actually, no. dont. EVER. stay this good. -B
On Wednesday, September 3, 2003, HeLlSeND (40) wrote:

Fuckin beautiful.....rip his still beating heart out and allow him to watch it stop.....i love it..
On Monday, August 25, 2003, angelunderneath (60) wrote:

I know you were pissed but this one made me laugh a little. Oh, the things we think!!!!!! Nice write
On Thursday, August 21, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509) wrote:

I be a bit scared now...no critique I promise! Mmmm... so fun to see this fun demonic side come out. It was like a childs ring around the rosie...only darkend.
On Thursday, August 21, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509) wrote:

I enjoyed it. It sounds very, very releasing too. Like it was a true bit of therapy...did you type it fast?...hehe...wondyful!JM
On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, GreekPhilosopher (156) wrote:

Alcohol Often Induces People To See Clearly... Clearer Than When Sober... Clearer That Ever Before. Great Write. GPhD.
On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

I'm frightened... : ) I like the ending about going to lunch - that adds levity to the piece. Love it! Ciao, T/S
On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, OLd SouL (717) wrote:

Let it out. Seriously, let some more out. I like it.
On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, _Andrew_ (245) wrote:

lol, obviously someone pissed you off and it seems they deserve to die :P, excellent way to put how you felt down on paper, you could feel the anger through the lines, loved it *~*aNDReW*~*
A former member wrote: I think that who ever the hell is inspiring you to write this should burn in hell. I have some serious anger issues with this person now. By the way, congratulations...not many poems make me extremely pissed at who they're writing it for. You're emotio
A former member wrote: emotion is astonishing. And flows perfectly together. Kick his fucking ass.
A former member wrote: I like everything you have written, but lately the anger and emotion you have put into your poems has been a welcomed change. this is very good. i truely enjoyed the way you put this one together.U.P.
A former member wrote: kill...I think it's best you and me get that drive on paper. I've felt the rage that deep and sadistic: it's the nastiest part of being human. Words hurt the way you want, without actually leaving a physical mark: powerful things, words like those.
On Sunday, August 17, 2003, Six-Out (1423) wrote:

I agree with Kitty. It's about damn time you get a little angry. Well, more than a little. This is full of rage. Much power in your words. Now to be myself...Kick his goddammed ass!
On Sunday, August 17, 2003, KittyStryker (710) wrote:

damn right! kick his ass cre! it's time for a little angry revolution from you, darling.... there are people and things that deserve it. ::hugs::
A former member wrote: Wow I really, _really_ like this one a lot. I have enjoyed everything of yours I have read so far and so far I think this one is my favorite. Great job ~Urban Shipwreck~
A former member wrote: I especially like the stanza beginning with "you thought the glint in my eye" and ending with "is visited on you." Very well done.
On Sunday, August 17, 2003, Dancing_Monkey (1228) wrote:

nice.. like the anger put to words.. Monkey