Armorless Knight

By Gray Vision

There was once a man
Who roamed the lands,
And every soul encountered
Feared his hands,
For he was known by many
Throughout the lands,
For his wrath unleashed
Upon the damned.

As legend foretold
About such a man,
Who would one day
Yield at hand,
Before a goddess
Or so he deemed,
One the likes of which
He had never seen.

But he was fooled
Upon being unarmed,
Like the damned before him
Befell this harm,
Now a victim
The pain slowly seeps,
Reality sets in
And he softly weeps,
His armor is shattered
Torn and mangled.

His ego diminished
His will,
Strangled,
Despite his efforts
To salvage the shambles,
He finds it impossible
To repair his mantle,
From his once perfect image
Now reduced to rubble.

He now roams the lands
Everyday a struggle,
Souls encountered
Point and chuckle,
To the man
They once thought
A God,
Immortal.

Now exposed
Nude and humble,
He’s learnt his lesson
A bearer of sorrow,
Hauling his broken armor
For today and tomorrow,
Now an example for those
Of what not to follow.

Heed this advice
Or roam the lands alone,
A land
Barren and hollow,
A road
Paved, with stone.

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Published on Tuesday, May 18, 2010. Filed under: "Personal" and "Poetry"

Author's Note:

Feel free to comment or pitch advice, ty.

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November 25th, 2010

Comments on "Armorless Knight"

On Saturday, March 16, 2013, soul_versing (882) wrote:

I am blown away.. Absolutely love the flow and vivd picture lingering in my head. 10..
On Friday, March 15, 2013, Manperson96 (23) wrote:

This is the best one I've seen I'm a while. It could've been a little longer but it is absolutely great.
On Sunday, April 1, 2012, Osha Red (50) wrote:

you did really well. its very good but in my mind i think it should be longer. very well done!
On Sunday, April 1, 2012, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Thank you and I feel that way to sometimes, but this was all that came to mind when I initially wrote it. Thank you for dropping by =)
On Friday, March 16, 2012, sTr8-jAcKeT (735) wrote:

Well done my friend; deep & enriching. A lot here that conjures up emotion & imagery; while keeping the two separate & tied together. Keep it up, kudos.
On Friday, March 16, 2012, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Thanks man, it's always nice to reflect on past works and also share it with other members on here vice-versa. I'm glad you liked it and thank you for dropping by =)
On Tuesday, August 16, 2011, Devilish (2658) wrote:

Wow a beautiful write and it made poem of the day! Sweeet! I can't imagine that Any of mine would make it especially Ok DaDdy I WiLL!!! Lol... But this is an accomplishment for real and I'm proud of you!
On Tuesday, August 16, 2011, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

You'll get yours I'm sure of that, heh as for DaDdy that very well might be the first you never know Dev, I thought you might have liked it and I'm glad you did, hmm we can probably collaborate sometime and make one of our own. Alright well thank you again for dropping by and leaving such wonderful comments, take care =)
A former member wrote: I Love how you wrote this. I like it alot. It was a very interesting read. Write on! :D
On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

I will Julie as soon as I have a topic that triggers some sort of emotion or interest, I'll get right to it, thank you for commenting =)
A former member wrote: Oh and " Now exposed Nude and humble, He?s learnt his lesson A bearer of sorrow, Hauling his broken armor For today and tomorrow, Now an example for those Of what not to follow." God I just love that.
On Saturday, May 29, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Thank you so much Megann, I'm happy that this peice intriged you and the many others who have read and commented on it. I'll post some more here soon, I just need to find some topics to write on. Email me if you have any ideas, every and any bit helps. Thanks again =)
A former member wrote: This piece was profoundly beautiful " His ego diminished His will, Strangled, Despite his efforts To salvage the shambles, He finds it impossible To repair his mantle, From his once perfect image Now reduced to rubble." I loved that part. Something about "his ego was diminished"...just intense.
On Friday, May 21, 2010, Qurious (40) wrote:

very nice write. I enjoyed it a lot.
On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Thank you very much Qurious, I'll write on =)
On Tuesday, May 18, 2010, lupus tenebrae (872) wrote:

Very neat write, I just imagined this poor soul walking a lone stretch of road with his shattered armor, and it had a great message of following those that are doomed, well done, it turned out a lot better than mine did lol.
On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

The broken armor that he's hauling is his heart, which has been damaged behond repair, like his victims before him. Thanks again wolfy for yet another insightful comment =)
On Tuesday, May 18, 2010, Dilated View (583) wrote:

Maybe it's not enough to try but perhaps inaction would be a worse scenario. Learn from the mistakes of others but tread the path either way. A sorrowful but interesting. Nicely done.
On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

That's very true but also another persons actions can be a foundation for anothers route. Thanks for the advice DV, I'll keep writing =)
On Tuesday, May 18, 2010, Malcholm Dark (810) wrote:

very cool write... I love the 1st verse, perfect.... it drew me into the piece... a well written poem, thanks
On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Oh the pleasure was all mine MD, I'm glad you enjoyed this piece. Thanks alot =)
A former member wrote: Top Notch Write. There was a good flow and story behind it. Keep up the gr8 work :)
On Saturday, May 29, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Oh I promise i'll keep it coming, just gota find topics to write on patients hehe.
A former member wrote: gr8 write .. excellent rhyme ... gr8 pic .. i enjoyed this
On Saturday, May 29, 2010, Gray Vision (425) wrote:

Thank you very much and i'll keep writing =)