A ticket, please...

By diavolessa

the night falls silent over this city
over letters of a widow looking for love
“A ticket, please – one way, please,”
On the platform a stranger will waive

“A ticket, please for the first train,”
for the one that parts with dreams
when the sun opens his unwashed eyes
after last nights orgy with a bunch of moons

“A ticket, please for whoknowswhere,”
where desire turns into a slut
with short skirts and showing skin
where passion dies in icy flames


This is it, I’ll leave, don’t try to stop me
won’t keep me up at night thinking
close your eyes, sleep peaceful
over the raped silence of time

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Copyright 2003 diavolessa
Published on Monday, May 12, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • Deviated09 On Sunday, March 4, 2012, Deviated09 (91)By person wrote:

    I very much like this one. Very intense.. Great write, very great write

  • aXe FactoR On Friday, May 14, 2004, aXe FactoR (335)By person wrote:

    your style of writing really astounds me. hope i have half your talent. great write on this, by the way. :)

  • urbanhumility On Friday, May 23, 2003, urbanhumility (1172)By person wrote:

    i dig this poem, internal meaning, outward appeal, wonderful feel.........urban

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Saturday, May 17, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1755)By person wrote:

    I like the flow and imagry of this one - my favourite lines are "“A ticket, please for the first train,” for the one that parts with dreams when the sun opens his unwashed eyes". Very nice! Scholar

  • A former member wrote: Very beautiful, your words flow well! Scholar

  • IceDragoness On Tuesday, May 13, 2003, IceDragoness (195)By person wrote:

    I think this is so pretty... good job~Dawn

  • Delphoid-Q On Tuesday, May 13, 2003, Delphoid-Q (213)By person wrote:

    Awesomely written. I liked this a lot.

  • DoctorAsh On Monday, May 12, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    Clever wording . i didnt directly see the subliminal shield that you hung over this poem ... but im sure tonite while im sleeping, it will crawl up into my conscience an scare me .. Beautiful work

  • Stranger On Monday, May 12, 2003, Stranger (265)By person wrote:

    This was a welcome surprise. I will look forward to reading more of your work. Excellent.

  • KittyStryker On Monday, May 12, 2003, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    very good! will enjoy reading some of your other work...

  • A former member wrote: third stanza made me double take. "where passion dies in icy flames" like it alot


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