Halo's Roots
By knightmirror
cilia stands on the back
of my neck,
a tingling sesation of fear
having it's way,
sparatically the mangled wreck
twists/pulls
the glassy bluewhite moonbeam
stares down
upon a freshly revealed halo
sent first class
by the eye in the sky looking
upon me
silence rings bells in my ears,
highpitch
fork impales sight unseen by me
untilnow
i could only limp,dragging my
shadow along
weighing in this corner with the
intention
to erode the darkness at highnoon,
is light,
shining it's goodness throughout
the arena
suddenly it's opponent strikes,
unannounced,
by anyone,including his own poisonous,
unclean mouth,
liesextending from years of rot
from deciet
at first hit andonlyone comes
a malicious,
merge of manicdepressive senses,
lashing out
against the beautiful mind harboring
lights halo
just before the total eclipse
Comments on "Halo's Roots"
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On Sunday, April 25, 2004, nell
(270) wrote:
mmm this was chalk full of wicked images... "i could only limp,dragging my shadow along".. it does read a little funny... but the vocabulary you use and the atmosphere you created are excellent
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I love the wording, if I do give any criticism though, it would have to be the structure. While it is wonderful, I'm an oddball, just the look of it makes me thing "Eh" I dunno, maybe align it all to the left, or right? I like how some of the words are me
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
*merged together. Gives it a quick read feel. Then the last line summed it up wonderfully. One more thing, the title...I dunno, it fits, but not the right way. Ya know what I mean?
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, girlafraid
(479) wrote:
i'm too dumbfounded to comment...but it makes me think of some kind of spiritual battle within yourself..
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On Friday, April 23, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
rotting inside out....wow... -Morb
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On Friday, April 23, 2004, murder_in_clubland
(384) wrote:
love your vocab...simply irrestiable ~ss