neoprene.

By Six-Out




and in the end
it won't be about an abundance of happiness.
but merely a single strand of hope.
because you're caught in a landslide.
and it's tumbling. as you tremble.
it's safe to say the long way home- is lost.

and I'm walking in a fast pace.
treading birthmarks and breathing inconsistencies.
it's safe to say.
simply put.

I'm lost.

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© 2009 Jon Rodgers
Published on Saturday, May 23, 2009.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: A well deserved honor i might add. Brevity with impact!

  • blue angel On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, blue angel (866)By person wrote:

    Brilliantly and simply put ;)~ Bravo !!

  • Alchemist On Thursday, March 1, 2012, Alchemist (679)By person wrote:

    Simply put your a painter with words my friend. And yes those first three lines are as real as it gets. Bravo

  • lovechild On Thursday, June 4, 2009, lovechild (43)By person wrote:

    i wish a star would be out in the sky tomrrow right after dusk when the sky is all cerulean; and i wish you would see that star and know that the best things in all creation are still in store for you... we are all lost on this planet. soon we will be found by what we have always believed in, no matter how far we have strayed from it. lots of lovenergy xxxooo++++

  • The Zebra Warrior On Thursday, June 4, 2009, The Zebra Warrior (1495)By person wrote:

    this comment gave me goosebumps!

  • A former member wrote: I read this the day you posted,...its safe to say it stayed with me,..im not sure how you consider your self man but this is beautiful.

  • A former member wrote: Your only lost when you have place in mind you should be. If yu dont care which direction you travel, you'll never lose your way. So the question is,hun, where is it you want to be? Beautiful, sad and lovely--but im glad to obsorb your words again

  • A former member wrote: lost; exactly the time to be found. gorgeous and though[provoking]ful piece.

  • Ophelia On Saturday, May 23, 2009, Ophelia (221)By person wrote:

    Your words still make that place in my heart beat just a little faster and a little harder because of the truth behind them and the feelings with which you write them.........

  • Alanarchy On Saturday, May 23, 2009, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    Jesus fucking christ, those first three lines... That's exactly where I be.

  • Narcissa On Saturday, May 23, 2009, Narcissa (391)By person wrote:

    Agreed...

  • Rachel On Saturday, May 23, 2009, Rachel (210)By person wrote:

    Every single time, without fail. For just a moment, I'm 19 again.

  • A former member wrote: Find your way before I find it for you. *makes fist*

  • Velvet_Raventon On Monday, May 25, 2009, Velvet_Raventon (446)By person wrote:

    I second that! *hugs*

  • carlosjackal On Sunday, May 24, 2009, carlosjackal (2787)By person wrote:

    Do as she says, Jon.

  • NikesRain On Saturday, May 23, 2009, NikesRain (1240)By person wrote:

    *hugs*


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