The Writes of Spring (villanelle)
By dwells
Each spring I clean that closet in my head
Old fashions, as some friends, go out with style
Emancipate the living from the dead
I have the gift to turn gold into lead
My shortcuts all become the longest mile
Each spring I clean that closet in my head
My skeletons have all been interbred
I keep my demons simple; lacking guile
Emancipate the living from the dead
Forgiveness flees when all is painted red
Reunions cancelled for a little while
My decency remains a single shred
The hungry years demanding to be fed
The budding Spring suggests another trial
My leeches plagued by ticks as I am bled
The upper crust removed from all my bread
Another tome to grace the compost pile
Each spring I clean that closet in my head
Emancipate the living from the dead
Author's Note:
took a few liberties with the formComments on "The Writes of Spring (villanelle)"
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On Monday, March 25, 2019, sTr8-jAcKeT
(697) wrote:
I think I observed the subtlety within this poem. The leeches and the ticks, both competing for ample life force. Eternal conflict much as the Nephilim between Angels & Demons; both representations of forces inside yourself competing to either write or stifle that writing. Maybe? Idk, just what occurred in my head. The message here regardless is very truth, thanks.
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A former member wrote:
I love the words u use to describe what's in your head. Too many awesome lines to pick out a favourite here. Excellent ink
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On Wednesday, April 6, 2016, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
Man, you nailed this one! This is chock full of awesome turns of phrases like "Each spring I clean that closet in my head" and "I have the gift to turn gold into lead". Great piece! Ciao, T/S
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On Monday, April 4, 2016, Dimensions
(94) wrote:
"My skeletons have all been interbred" Very interesting choice of words. Awesome read!
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On Sunday, April 3, 2016, lupus tenebrae
(860) wrote:
I've always enjoyed your interpretation of villanelle, Dan, it merges the traditional form with one of my favourite adaptations, the terzanelle, doing so, you've managed to make it your own; really lends well to the subject matter, I've been evicting my own skeletons, too. Good to see you around these parts, again.
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On Sunday, April 3, 2016, tmanzano
(207) wrote:
I love a good old fashion as I do this awaking of spring. It made me feel as though I was coming out from under heavy blankets and go look for that shortcut you had mentioned here. Bravo sir...
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On Sunday, April 3, 2016, Phalanx
(628) wrote:
This I have to keep. I hope you don't mind. This is quite truly an amazing work.
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On Saturday, April 2, 2016, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
A much needing reading, subdue those inner skeletons indeed. Great piece... love your face. -Bows