Carpenter.
By xZombie Poptartzx
Broken beyond repair...
Cracked, and tarnished.
Like a piece
of furniture,
no longer varnished.
Laying helpless, scared.
Worrying about things
in which we could
never be prepared...
Am I heartless, or cold?
Because I don't
react well when you
try to remold.
You're not meant
to feel humble.
So please just sit back
and watch my pieces crumble...
.... Because I never asked you
to
be my carpenter.
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Copyright 2013 xZombie Poptartzx
Author's Note:
Just a quick vent...Comments on "Carpenter."
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On Saturday, August 3, 2013, Nehema
(958) wrote:
Some things that are broken n tarnished are the most beautiful. However it can be painful to those that love you to not be able to 'mend' some of your 'scratches'. Jadie used to tell me all the time I couldn't fix people, he hated when other's tried to fix him. I knew, but he helped me understand n accept it. He inspired one of my best pieces because of that, lol - XXOO
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On Sunday, August 4, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Jadie is the one who ruined me sadly lol and i fear he may be un-fixable... I gave up long ago. Sometimes people are just meant to stay broken i guess. xoxo
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A former member wrote:
I agree with all below, very endearing, nicely done..
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A former member wrote:
this is just perfect poetry..oh my gosh..the beginning is beautiful..one hell of a piece of poetry... **bows ma'am**
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On Sunday, August 4, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it ^.^
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On Friday, August 2, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
This is wonderful, one of my new favorites.. "because I never asked you to be my carpenter" that line is brilliant.. Love it:)
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On Sunday, August 4, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Awe thanks :)
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On Wednesday, July 31, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Sounds pretty normal to me and it is an acquired skill, not to worry about stuff we can't control, cheers ZPT!
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A former member wrote:
And someone can't fix you, all someone else can do is hand you the glue. you must fix yourself, but support from others helps.
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On Monday, July 29, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Thanks. Your comments are always appreciated :)
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A former member wrote:
You aren't heartless, if you were heartless you would not ask yourself if you were, and you would not worry. you poetic skill is marvellous and flows with great emotion. keep it up :)
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A former member wrote:
that last line is a wrecking ball. beautiful and deeply personal. i read this when you posted and felt the same, and it's still just as effective. i've read quite a few of your other poems, and this is your best to date, i think. you've really honed in on your craft, not a word misplaced. xo
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On Monday, July 29, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Thank you :) I've been trying a few new things lately and just writing my feelings...seems to be working better. xoxo
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A former member wrote:
I always thought reupholstering furniture was such a tacky way to fix the damage, great write though, can totally relate
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On Saturday, July 27, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Thank you :) and I agree... definitely tacky heh
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A former member wrote:
The feelings of being broken and down trod, yet knowing its deserved and 'fitting' a sensation surprisingly few people understand. Then there are always those people who see that and think they have found themselves a wonderful project to mend.
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On Saturday, July 27, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Yeah... I get that when someone cares they want to 'help" you.... but there's a difference between helping, and fixing.
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On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, blue angel
(866) wrote:
I really like this, so often hands try to mold us,,, let our distortions be... Awesome write !! :)~ ~^_^~
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On Saturday, July 27, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Thank you ^.^
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A former member wrote:
I understand this completely. I have felt like I just wanted to crumble, and I didn't want anyone to help. This is really good! I love it.
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On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, silentninja
(26) wrote:
Totally feel the passion behind your voice on that one - the amount of times I have fallen apart, and wanted to be left like that - i miss being broken. This was a great write and I cannot offer any improvements. A perfect 10 from me :)
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On Friday, July 26, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Awe thanks :) That means a lot... I kinda just threw this together in 5 mins tbh. xoxo
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On Wednesday, July 24, 2013, Star
(879) wrote:
"I never asked you to be my carpenter", well said, chels.
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On Friday, July 26, 2013, xZombie Poptartzx
(332) wrote:
Thanks Brandi ♥