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surrender in 5.7.5.
By purr_verse
My words fell asleep
so I wandered in search of
glades of new brilliance
I quested for form;
seeking sonnets and wildsong
in wordforests but
cinquain and quatrain
teased elusive and wilful;
I could not dance and
on my poetry
expedition I just sank
into mere hike ooze.
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© 2007 Natalie Lyndon
Published on Saturday, October 13, 2007.
Filed under: "Structured" and
"Poetry"
Comments on "surrender in 5.7.5."
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On Tuesday, September 12, 2017, Just Dave
(457)
wrote:
Very eloquent. Love it. JD
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On Wednesday, May 11, 2016, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
I still adore the genius of this...And that pun to kill things off at the end..Leaves even a heart of stone smiling.
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A former member wrote:
a blissful disaster. I love the journey into your mind.
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On Sunday, March 1, 2009, lovechild
(43) wrote:
very clever...
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On Saturday, March 1, 2008, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
New writes!! Please**\O/**
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On Tuesday, November 27, 2007, glasshouse
(548) wrote:
Very clever indeed. the idea of "seeking sonnets and wildsong in wordforests" is the most amazing thing i've ever heard to describe how i feel on far too few occasions but certainly HAVE felt. I love it. Most definitely. --Jes
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A former member wrote:
"cinquain and quatrain" Love the jazz, & the "hike ooze" Haiku. Lovely wordwonderment, as always. Very clever. Love the 5.7.5 syllable/meter (even w/ the ending 4)... well crafted. If only there were "wordforests" we could write & wander in... Well done.
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On Sunday, October 21, 2007, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
"...he ending 4" ARGH! Bugger! I can't add. *sob* Dammit, I have to fix that. I'll come back when I've grown a clue. Thank you, though - now THAT is constructive criticism, lol.
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On Wednesday, October 24, 2007, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
No! No! Keep it..you could say that the very last line is there to be ironic ;)
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On Wednesday, October 24, 2007, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
Hey, yeah! Let's go with that until I, um...get it right. ;D
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On Wednesday, December 12, 2007, purr_verse
(1059) wrote:
Okay, I can count now. ;) Sorted.
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On Saturday, December 15, 2007, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
=D -Carl
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On Sunday, October 14, 2007, flying_fox
(573) wrote:
SO great! The lilt, the pun... ah just love it love it love it.
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On Saturday, October 13, 2007, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
Yay! New purr_post! Fantabulous as ever, Natalie. P.S. You watching the Rugby World Cup Semi-Final tonight :P -Carl
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On Saturday, October 20, 2007, carlosjackal
(3011) wrote:
P.P.S. You watching the Final tonight ;)
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A former member wrote:
a tangibly expressive and liliing piece; an irony of peotry within vs without in all tis myriad meanings. .
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A former member wrote:
egads, i cannot even spell correctly :{
"lilting" and "poetry".....[damns my brain in the a.m.]
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