surrender in 5.7.5.

By purr_verse

My words fell asleep
so I wandered in search of
glades of new brilliance

I quested for form;
seeking sonnets and wildsong
in wordforests but

cinquain and quatrain
teased elusive and wilful;
I could not dance and

on my poetry
expedition I just sank
into mere hike ooze.

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Published on Saturday, October 13, 2007. Filed under: "Structured" and "Poetry"

Comments on "surrender in 5.7.5."

On Tuesday, September 12, 2017, Just Dave (448) wrote:

Very eloquent. Love it. JD
On Wednesday, May 11, 2016, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

I still adore the genius of this...And that pun to kill things off at the end..Leaves even a heart of stone smiling.
A former member wrote: a blissful disaster. I love the journey into your mind.
On Sunday, March 1, 2009, lovechild (43) wrote:

very clever...
On Saturday, March 1, 2008, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

New writes!! Please**\O/**
On Tuesday, November 27, 2007, glasshouse (530) wrote:

Very clever indeed. the idea of "seeking sonnets and wildsong in wordforests" is the most amazing thing i've ever heard to describe how i feel on far too few occasions but certainly HAVE felt. I love it. Most definitely. --Jes
A former member wrote: "cinquain and quatrain" Love the jazz, & the "hike ooze" Haiku. Lovely wordwonderment, as always. Very clever. Love the 5.7.5 syllable/meter (even w/ the ending 4)... well crafted. If only there were "wordforests" we could write & wander in... Well done.
On Sunday, October 21, 2007, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

"...he ending 4" ARGH! Bugger! I can't add. *sob* Dammit, I have to fix that. I'll come back when I've grown a clue. Thank you, though - now THAT is constructive criticism, lol.
On Wednesday, October 24, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

No! No! Keep it..you could say that the very last line is there to be ironic ;)
On Wednesday, October 24, 2007, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

Hey, yeah! Let's go with that until I, um...get it right. ;D
On Wednesday, December 12, 2007, purr_verse (1052) wrote:

Okay, I can count now. ;) Sorted.
On Saturday, December 15, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

=D -Carl
On Sunday, October 14, 2007, flying_fox (571) wrote:

SO great! The lilt, the pun... ah just love it love it love it.
On Saturday, October 13, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

Yay! New purr_post! Fantabulous as ever, Natalie. P.S. You watching the Rugby World Cup Semi-Final tonight :P -Carl
On Saturday, October 20, 2007, carlosjackal (2788) wrote:

P.P.S. You watching the Final tonight ;)
A former member wrote: a tangibly expressive and liliing piece; an irony of peotry within vs without in all tis myriad meanings. .
A former member wrote: egads, i cannot even spell correctly :{ "lilting" and "poetry".....[damns my brain in the a.m.]