Comments by lupus tenebrae
- "I do have the bad habit of abusing enjambment, I guess, and it took a criticism like this to make me realize it. I make no excuses, I'll do well to use it more effectively in the future, I appreciate your feedback...it's always on point. I genuinely feel that, if I could no longer learn or grow, there would be no point to living, I love knowing I still have room to improve."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Vase of Tempered Blue" by lupus tenebrae
- "The sad truth is, everyone has dissenters, no matter how seasoned their craft, and it falls on you to filter them out then see what remains. I used to dread the idea of people reading my work before I found DP...I was pleasantly surprised at the wealth of good criticism I received, a lot of which shaped me into the poet I am today. You'll never know until you take that first leap, and put yourself out there for everyone to see."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Writers Block" by WitheredRoses
- "It's a form I came across while researching minimalist styles, this is only my second attempt at one. It's definitely a huge departure from the haiku and all its variants."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "War" by lupus tenebrae
- "Like I said, I really enjoy your choice of verbiage, here, lends well to the grandiose format of an epic, even being unfinished, it's a solid, standalone piece in its own right and had I the room, this would easily inhabit my favorites list. As for an idea as to where this epic should go, I'm still trying to find that answer in regards to my own projects...I'm sure you'll find a muse of some sort, until then, just keep this piece at the back of your mind."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Palmistry (Unfinished)" by rwb35
- "I for one am glad you're still here, Beth, I've no doubt told you all of this, before, but know that you've become one of my closest friends. Just keep writing, and I trust that you'll make it through this dark time."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "I'm fine. (but I'm really not)" by ColorMeToxic
- "Not necessarily a seizure, like I said in the Author's Note, this piece came off the heels of a pretty substantial breakdown, where the subsequent tremors had left me drained, to the point where I was fading in and out of consciousness and the line between delusion and reality began to blur...so, what I perceived as stars could have very easily been a candle or a light bulb at ready to burn out. I just remember being terrified, I couldn't stand up without the overwhelming urge to keel over, it's a miracle I still had the wherewithal to move, let alone write. But yeah, not a seizure, thankfully. "
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Madman, Butchering Verse" by lupus tenebrae
- ""I've never felt so alive, until I was dying", that line on its own is just so poignant, even without the context of the piece as a whole, but the body lends well to the overall impact it has. It's unfortunate, that people find this to be the case, I've come to the crossroads of suicide with many of the same troubled thoughts...only I had the good fortune of making it back alive, if my life hadn't been touched in just the right way, I wouldn't be here leaving this comment. Thank you for bringing light to this sad reality."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "In the end" by Steven86175
- "It's good to see you frequenting these parts, again, and returning with a piece like this makes it all the more serendipitous; a piece that can't help but exude an air of triumph upon its recital. Hopefully, this is a sign of more pieces to come."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Iron Rising" by HeadpatSlut
- "I was excited at the mere prospect of having you enter this contest, because I knew the end result would be something worth waiting for. Summer's piece was amazing in its own right, but yours was the closest to what I had in mind. You took this foreign (sometimes irritating) style of mine and made it your own, I expected no less. To be honest, I knew from the start that there wouldn't be many entrants, but to see that my contest had yielded the artistry that it did more than makes up for my previous disappointment. So, congratulations, you've certainly earned the accolades."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Sunday afternoons at 20 Maresfield Gardens" by TropicalSnowstorm
- "I'm digging the delicate mysticism of this work and though it may not have fit the criteria, this is still a quality piece and I thank you for bringing it to my attention, I will now promptly bookmark it to re-read at my leisure. PotD well deserved."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Hope" by carlosjackal
- "Again, drawing a lot of parallels between the two of us, love can be a fickle thing...feelings are dynamic to a fault, the love of today can be the loathing of tomorrow and yet: we take that chance, time and again, because love can somehow validate us, make us feel whole after running on empty for longer than we care to admit. It's no wonder some would choose to write it off, and say it simply doesn't exist: the real thing is just so difficult to find. To inspire that kind of musing from me is a hallmark of the underlying gift you seem to possess, as I said before, nurture that gift."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Love is Non-Exisistent" by Shikiryu
- "I'm drawing a lot of parallels to my past self, I too had a sort of kinship with the dark, I felt untouchable there, I suppose. I liked some of the diction used in this piece, something about it simply struck all the right chords. Nurture your talent, and stay awhile. "
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Inner Truth" by Shikiryu
- "It's not necessarily the most interesting story, more personal if anything, but I'll tell it anyway: Back when I still lived with my abusive father, he kept the thermostat at 40 and below during the winter (often nailing it in place), I was never able to accurately surmise why he did this...perhaps it was out of spite, to save money or it was a show of his power over me, couldn't say. It got to the point where my bed was ice cold, and I would simply shiver until I ultimately exerted enough energy to fall asleep. One night, I'd found myself in the bathroom while the furnace was on, it's as if I was experiencing genuine warmth for the first time in eternity...I felt so comfortable there, and the carpet was plush beneath my rising chest, I just kind of dosed off lying next to the register.
Ever since then, it's been a sort of habitual thing, I still do it regularly (most of the time it's involuntary), even more so when I'm depressed...there's just this sense of safety, I suppose, like I'm in my own little pocket-sized dimension and nothing can possibly harm me.
It's one of my least detrimental quirks, and I don't see it stopping for awhile, nor do I have the desire to put a stop to it myself. I'm glad you enjoyed this piece, and hopefully, the story behind it wasn't all that underwhelming."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Ice Quake Poltergeists" by lupus tenebrae
- "Usually I'm pretty anal about rhythm, but I was a bit more lax with this piece, in retrospect, it honestly seems unwieldly, and as such...I almost hadn't posted it here at all. Luckily, it's only a one-off experiment, but I'm glad you enjoyed it."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Friday Night Silver" by lupus tenebrae
- "This piece has an almost "epic" feel to it, or perhaps life is simply the greatest epic ever written: it reads like infinity, condensed and made tangible for all the world to see. You're clearly quite the competent poet. "
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Five Shades of Autumn" by quantummysticist18
- "How much of oneself can be lost before it's no longer worth one more immediate fix? This piece reads like the downfall of a close friend: it's obvious they're sinking at a faster rate, but there's nothing you can do to slow their descent. Clearly, the verse of a skilled hand. "
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "Glass Mercedes" by Numbers Peppelini
- "Funny you should say that, Dan, it was "marrow" originally. I was trying to tie the last stanza to "skeleton key", but I slept on it, and realized that was a terrible idea. Thanks for the read."
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "A Prism in Cosplay" by lupus tenebrae
- "The central theme seemed to be regret, even Death regrets having to silence such a "gifted mind". Parroting the previous comment, the rhythm had an almost classical flow, fine for your first step into these shallow waters. "
Posted by lupus tenebrae on "MyDeath" by Dirtylizard
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