Reality
By cre
Descending into deep confusion
What I see is my illusion
Shrouded tales as gospel posed
Reality has been transposed
Mirrors casting odd reflections
Odder still upon inspection
Grasping shadows, balance slides
In this dimension solace hides
Playing games of cat and mouse
Lost inside this conjured house
Elusion is the master plan
The only way to win this hand
Maddening maze of persecution
Trapped inside my own delusion
Slick thick black and chambered gloom
Shades of darkness cloaking doom
Familiar feel of trepidation
With no hope of consolation
Most other feelings lost by now
Would lose this too if I knew how
Hazy views and half perceptions
Is this real or mere deception
Cobwebs strangle struggling thoughts
For far too long this fight we've fought
Giving in to this intrusion
As they say, I'm disillusioned
Sinking slowly to the floor
Far too tired for any more
This game and lost mentality
Has done me in, at last I see
Nothing is as it should seem
It's merely dreamt reality.
Comments on "Reality"
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A former member wrote:
Okay, have to tell you I really love this! The way you used all rhymes is totally amazing.
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On Thursday, May 14, 2009, Blood Saga
(78) wrote:
Have I told you this is wonderful today? Because it is.
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On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, Emptyness Inside Me
(171) wrote:
"This game and lost mentality Has done me in, at last I see Nothing is as it should seem It's merely dreamt reality." very impressive line here, such powerful words and wonderful form, great job ~Emptyness~
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On Thursday, April 8, 2004, steuss
(92) wrote:
Such great thoughts, and the blur of what is real is such a vivid almost dreamlike illusion. Very well done!
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On Wednesday, April 7, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
reading your work sometimes makes me want to write better and then other times makes me want to stop writing, because I feel it'll never be as good as yours.
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On Sunday, December 7, 2003, unusual_blood
(74) wrote:
talent away .. excellent is such a proper word ... super excellent .. more like it .. yes this poem was SUPER excellent. there. :)
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On Sunday, December 7, 2003, unusual_blood
(74) wrote:
Another excellent poem, "Cobwebs strangle struggling thoughts" i loved that line. Gave the place a hint of ancientness ... lonliness perhaps? ur ryhming ability is amazing, never give the ingredients to ur
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A former member wrote:
That poem flowed so smoothly. I just read through it without one pause and I didn't really want to stop at the end.
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A former member wrote:
*cant cope with janes awesomeness and passes out** great as always
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A former member wrote:
you could probably rap very well if you were into that sort of thing. who knows maybe you are and or do. heh. :)
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On Wednesday, March 5, 2003, liquid_emotion
(323) wrote:
you flow girl !!! *laugh*
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A former member wrote:
Mercy Rain, my thoughts exactly. Great stuff...
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On Tuesday, March 4, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
okay, first so people don't need to keep asking cre like I did :P - elusion - the act of evading ... from the author herself :)
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On Tuesday, March 4, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
that said, though... i wish i could rhyme like this... i'm jealous. the only snag i see, when I read it i get snagged on the rhythm on line 4, otherwise everything seems to flow good.
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On Tuesday, March 4, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
re: subject matter, the idea that arises then, if it is all just a dream, then it really is what we make it
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On Tuesday, March 4, 2003, MercyRain
(105) wrote:
man, 256 characters ain't very long....
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On Wednesday, June 25, 2003, Rebel_Angel
(321) wrote:
lol... they need to make it more....