penitence

By cre

folded hands
bended knee
if there's a god
forgive me please

sharpened knife
muscles tense
my own brand
of penitence

blood for blood
sin for sin
let me hurt
once again

may i feel
what i deserve
unbridled pain
without reserve

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hands are bound
i'm on my knees
you know i want
what i need

singing whip
cry my pain
otherwise
it's all in vain

make me shudder
make me scream
it's even better
if i bleed

cause only blood
can make it right
i must atone
for all those nights

for all the hell
and evils done
i'm so sorry
i won't run

i'll face the chains
i'll be your slave
make me happy
be depraved

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folded hands
and body broken
i pray to god
accept this token

i've given pain
for innocence
my special brand
of penitence

my blood for theirs
my sins forgive
let me die
or let me live

folded hands
and bended knee
if there's a god
forgive me please

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Published on Sunday, February 16, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

Comments on "penitence"

On Wednesday, October 2, 2019, flawofthepoet (52) wrote:

I still remember this from my very first encounter with DarkPoetry. They're the kind of words that stay with you.
A former member wrote: This poem, like all of your other work, is beautiful. I was a member here back in 2004 and when I looked up the site again, I knew I had to read some of the old poems I remembered.
A former member wrote: I loved it, very moving and powerful.
On Tuesday, November 7, 2006, darth ren (30) wrote:

very very powerful
On Tuesday, May 10, 2005, Kinkypoptart (555) wrote:

*picks up jaw from floor* You are so amazing ~*~Tart~*~
On Tuesday, January 4, 2005, Emptyness Inside Me (171) wrote:

Wow, very impressive piece here, the reader can almost feel whats going on as they read your words, excellent job ~Emptyness~
A former member wrote: very impressive, I love all your work so it was no surprise that this one was good too.~Rachel~
On Tuesday, May 11, 2004, Liath (35) wrote:

Also, this sort of made me think of what jesus was thinking or feeling..or what they've led us all to believe he was thinking, or trying to accomplish/prove..not sure if you meant it to be that.
On Tuesday, May 11, 2004, Liath (35) wrote:

cre, the power behind each stanza is amazing. I love this format on your work because you know what to say and how to say it with few words. Awesome.
On Wednesday, April 7, 2004, BoldSolitude (214) wrote:

The first verse draws you in immediately, I like the repetiveness of it, helps drives the point home.
On Tuesday, January 6, 2004, subtle incandescence (3) wrote:

I am at a loss. This was moving, exciting, and intense. I adore your penitence.
A former member wrote: I didn't want it to end...it was just that good.
On Sunday, November 16, 2003, sole (93) wrote:

This poem just rocks, not a whole lot more I can add
A former member wrote: great job dude.
On Sunday, October 12, 2003, yslehc (334) wrote:

i love it.. had a nice flow, i read part of it before a little while ago but had to leave before i could finish .. good job
A former member wrote: comment is pointless now.
A former member wrote: wow. powerful with a fantastic rhyme and flow!
A former member wrote: what a poem full of emptyness....it leaves you so full but so empty,it's full of emotions but so empty in the same time... good work. ***
On Wednesday, August 20, 2003, Loneal (86) wrote:

... very nice rhythm, very honest description ... you say you write what you feel, without editing? ... you do this very well ... ~L
A former member wrote: kept me interested. well written, nice flow.~gothness~
A former member wrote: wow, thats really fuckin crazy, you and little nemo rock this site
On Tuesday, June 24, 2003, celestine_moon (46) wrote:

damn. that was powerful! i was so absorbed in it i nearly couldn't breathe. of course all of your work evokes such emotion in me. you have true talent. i am in awe. -kitty
A former member wrote: This is such an awesome work. You've obviously seen those words a lot already..but I mean it. I love the way you flowed with your words.
On Monday, May 26, 2003, CharlottesWeb (509) wrote:

Wholey...!!! Tragic and lonely peice. Very severe in compunction. So very singular in you...well done.~DW~
On Saturday, May 17, 2003, The_Scavenger (30) wrote:

very powerful poem. great use of words. keep up the great work.
On Saturday, May 17, 2003, Johny_D_Lewis (467) wrote:

damn....you take responsibility for your actions and persue justice for the sins you commit....pretty good
On Friday, May 16, 2003, FallenSky (42) wrote:

this has very nice rythm to it, the short lines create an interesting flow to the words ~CFS
A former member wrote: wow! i love it!
A former member wrote: Just got finished reading your whole portfolio, as of 4-11-03. You could seriously publish your works and spread your art around for the world to enjoy. You're so talented. Never stop writing. :)
A former member wrote: I don't know if I Told you, but I absolutely love this poem. Excellent work.. ;)
A former member wrote: hell yeah! i got a good trip out of your kick ass shit! this is the first one i read gonna check out the rest>>
A former member wrote: MY 100th comment! hehe i LOVE this poem i read it every day at least once Jane :) you are so pretty and so talented and smart and funny and fun to be around, some guy is gonna be really lucky someday when he finds you :)
A former member wrote: awesome work. i love how you just essentially express yourself in this. i'll look for more like this from you, keep it up!
On Wednesday, March 19, 2003, Ravenblade (307) wrote:

This is an awesome work, as usual I love the way you flow the words together. I wish I had your talent of putting words together to portray such powerful emotions, plus I love the title too, I wish I would've read it earlier in time, keep up the awesome
A former member wrote: good work, i applaud you
On Wednesday, March 12, 2003, KittyStryker (710) wrote:

Mmmm... really like how this poem flows, reading it. Reminds me of Madonna's "only the one who hurts you can make you feel better... only the one who inflicts the pain can take it away". I know the feelings well that you've conveyed.
A former member wrote: I loved reading this and I will come back to read it over and over again X) Thanks for the makin this great poem public XD
On Friday, March 7, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

That is pretty intense, but well put together - you conveyed the guilt and emotion quit well. By the by, love your latest pic! Ciao, T/S
On Friday, March 7, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1580) wrote:

**"quite well"...bloody keyboard...
On Wednesday, February 19, 2003, liquid_emotion (323) wrote:

hmm interesting. are harshest critics ourselves
On Tuesday, February 18, 2003, Jonas (715) wrote:

intense. good read. i hope to see more poems posted in the soon to come! welcome to DP (this is assuming of course that you're new... i haven't seen ya around so i'm just gonna run w/ that assumption) - jonas
On Sunday, February 16, 2003, nell (270) wrote:

wow.... excellent read, it flows well and has a god tune to it, i know what you meant by your own penitance felt this way many times
A former member wrote: nice poem man, look for more of my post, i predict youll be a goo dpoet =o) -PoP RoXx n KoKe-