Nothing Left For Me
By cre
I've gathered sand . . .
I let it fly
Every time
The stillness dies . . .
To see the grains
In the grasp of a wind
Tossed with no meaning
I understand then . .
My tears are as dry
As the sun-swept dunes
A little less than nothing left
To win or to lose . .
I've gathered years
I let them fail
Penned by another
Someone else's tale
A rising torrent
Of a drowning flood
Water's more deadly
But blood is blood
My hope is as broken
As the world that I live in
Days into years
But nothing's a given
I've gathered tears
From a once laughing heart
Every piece
Has been smashed all apart
A dying religion
And faded out eyes
These are the relics
Of a childhood's demise
My breath is as torn
As an unfulfilled dream
In this nightmare life's tainted
There's nothing left for me.
Comments on "Nothing Left For Me"
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On Sunday, May 6, 2012, Dominic
(53) wrote:
I really like your work. Sorrow is so often ill-described. You seem to nail it more than most. Thanks for the inspiration to keep writing.
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On Monday, May 14, 2007, Eric
(77) wrote:
This is really well written, great job!
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On Monday, April 5, 2004, BoldSolitude
(214) wrote:
"My hope is as broken as the world that I live in" definately my favorite line from this. Very vivid imagery and effective use of oxymorons.
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On Saturday, August 16, 2003, Ravenblade
(307) wrote:
I don't know what to say about this write...its just so beautiful...great write.
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Blood of Winter
(296) wrote:
I was impressed at the first stanza...hung on a cliff through the middle... then pushed off at the end, a depressing impresion left on me
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
Saddly beautiful, if something can be thoughs two things at once then this was..................O.
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
"My breath is as torn As an unfulfilled dream"...you made your words flow with such delicacy..it's easy to be swept in...lovely all the way.
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Stranger
(263) wrote:
I have felt like I was drifting on the winds of despair while I read this. Lonely and haunting. One of my favorites from you.
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, DarkAyla
(51) wrote:
Thsi is really good, Literally as I was reading this, it took my breath away, Great Write
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A former member wrote:
Very powerful, I really enjoyed this one. The feeling of losing everything without having had anything to lose. Great poem. ~Urban Shipwreck~
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Blinded_Tiger
(518) wrote:
I read a couple of times. I wanted to get a real feel of it. You are indeed talented to write like this. I will read more of you works, that is for sure.
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
So much sorrow....so much despair. I can feel this one. I've read it about 4 times over now, and it gets stronger every time. I can see what you write. Weather you think it's one of your best or not, this is a favorite of mine. I hope things get better, I
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Six-Out
(1423) wrote:
I really do. You deserve more than pain and sorrow. Much more.
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A former member wrote:
I love this.....not to mention u used my favorite word ( tainted) but this is simply wonderful ...¤Alley¤ a job well done