Across the Empty Sky

By Scarrzz

A Void … of Blackness
Deeper and Darker than ink from the finest pen

I’m sailing through this Blackness
I have no sense of Where or When

And I’m oh so very cold here
Down to this tainted heart of ice
So far out in the distance…
A thousand points of light

Always straining just to feel you,
Your warmth would give me sight
I would give myself unto you,
End the darkness of this flight

There never comes a day here,
Even though I hurry through
‘Till the hours turn to lifetimes
Still I reach for only you

And then from out of nowhere
I see your light come shining in
You are drawing me unto you
Creating life where frost had been

Nearer, ever nearer
Toward that hope I flew
Translucent wisps of joy
As I give this heart to you

Then my heart explodes
A fiery trail across the sky
In the reflection of your presence
I have found my reason why

All who gaze upon me
See the passion flowing through
That it even fills the Night-Sky
Showing proof that Love is True

But that smile of purest sunshine,
You take and hide it from my face
And my silver world of glitter
From your mem’ry you erase

So I retreat into the Blackness
For this one chance I paid the toll
But I’m fading now from view
Having given all my soul

And I’m oh so very cold here
Down to this broken heart of pain
For my life was but a vapour
And my death will be in vain









________________________________________
For Esther
My Happiness was a reflection of your presence.

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© 2008 Scarrzz
Published on Monday, June 30, 2008.     Filed under: "Love" and "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Aside from the specific interpretation of the premise for the poem, I'd say the structure is impeccable, the rhyme is clearly well poised, and the images are vivid... the message of a near connection, the loss of a love that never had a chance of loving, is hard to miss. If a comet recurs... has an orbit that a meteor does not, then the end kinda suggests, insofar as it lends itself to the interpretation of death/a one time event, another type of interstellar object. Doesn't it?

  • Scarrzz On Friday, July 18, 2008, Scarrzz (235)By person wrote:

    Some comets ( called single-apparition ) only pass through the inner solar system once and then leave it completely, never to be warmed again. That is the case here, and the pass was so close that all the volatile materials ( soul ) were vapourized anyway. All that remains is a rocky shell that will never even reflect light again. Dead comets are among the blackest objects in the universe, reflecting about one fourth as much light as asphalt. * * * No extra charge for the astronomy lesson. I'm a geek, but I prefer to say stargazer. Scholar

  • A former member wrote: I cannot say any longer because I read your comment before I read the post. I see the coldness, the black of space, I see the fiery trail... all definitely develop the metaphor, but why not a meteor... I'm not sure, but maybe if you referred to another comet, like Halley's or something, then the suggestion might be harder for the reader to mistake/skip. As we discussed the other night, often times we see what we would like to be rather than what is... and when what is, is a matter of interpretation, mere words, then the likelihood of reading in terms of one's own experience rather than the experience that is being developed by the words, is all the greater. But then, is that not the essence of poetry and metaphor... to allow a multiplicity of interpretations within some circumscribed semantic domain? Scholar

  • A former member wrote: you know thats a kickass way to describe the ilfe of a comet. but yeah, it is kinda hard to see. i likes it though, so damned true ^_^ Scholar

  • Scarrzz On Sunday, July 6, 2008, Scarrzz (235)By person wrote:

    A couple of people I showed this to didn't realize I was describing the flight of a comet on a one-way trip around the sun as a metaphor for finding and then losing one's soul-mate. My question: How many of you recognized this as the flight of a comet? Scholar


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