I think I broke you.
By Iwas
I have seen it when you look at me.
The deep seeded hatred shining
brilliantly behind those eyes.
As you smile.
That wicked tacky,
forced wide, toothy grin that you hide behind.
While you speak.
Soft soothing tones intertwined with kind words shadowing hidden agendas
and lies.
When you laugh.
Loud and happy totally contagious
outbursts obstructing the view of a vengeful mind.
You used
to be so damn beautiful.
As you look at me do you see?
The
fire that fueled the anger that now lies dormant within my gaze?
As
I smile?
quick slight and a little crooked covering up addictions
i had derived?
While I speak?
low and quite jaded ramblings contorting
sadness within a heavy haze?
When I laugh?
A whispered giggle
turning to long low rolls signaling when insanity had arrived?
I'm not as ugly as I used to be.
Comments on "I think I broke you."
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On Tuesday, August 13, 2013, Scarrzz
(235) wrote:
I am deeply impressed with the relevance of this poem to my hidden psyche. It calls to mind the old song, "You're so vein, I bet you think this song is about you." IT IS about me, even though I'm sure your story must parallel mine for you to have written it. I wonder how often our masks show a little wear at the edges and let the true emptiness show through. Why do we bother with wearing them even? Perhaps the creeping insanity has done its work too well. Terrific write.
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On Monday, May 20, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
I adore this poem. It is very relateable to me.
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A former member wrote:
This is AMAZING, very well written and marvelous piece! Thanks for sharing!
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On Tuesday, February 5, 2013, BetaWolfinVA
(791) wrote:
Interesting, trying to figure out the situation... Well executed
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On Saturday, September 29, 2012, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
the last line in this always gets me ... this is so amazing, and, you're never ugly....
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On Wednesday, May 2, 2012, Undertaker
(32) wrote:
Oh evil grins, the smiles to hide, Especially under deep dark eyes. I love this writing, I love the visioning for giggling crazy smiles. Awesome poem!
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On Thursday, March 8, 2012, Clydes_Bonnie
(53) wrote:
Beautiful And so very relatable for me. The last line speaks volumes, loved it. Thank you
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On Sunday, March 4, 2012, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...I read this & hear Mick Jagger singing 'Under My Thumb'...
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On Sunday, March 4, 2012, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
HOT DAMN!! Loud and happy totally contagious outburts obstructing the view of a vengeful mind.... Fucking brilliant....