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!!blow me!!
By denver nitze
my
...head...
is
like a balloon at the edge of
..destruction..
...
..
.
balloon
balloonbal
loonbaloonb
alloonballoon
balloonballoon
balloonballoon
balloonballoo
nballoonball
oonballoon
balloonba
loonball
oonba
loon
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full to its very thinnest membrane
my brain functions .not.
stretching.tearing.pulling
dizzy.ness prevails
while nostrils flowing
my nose screams
!!blow me!!
my head floats away
while crushing my shoulders
its eating my throat and swelling
my glands
nyquil illusions of a grand nite.stand band
with the uppers the downers
orange juice
chicken noodle soup
hot tea
i snuck a shot of whiskey
((but it didn't help me))
i'm begging and pleading
to a god not believed
i plea the
"i don't want to be sick no more"
..plea..
of
all
.pleas.
while tossing and turning
the only sleep
found in a turquoise bottle
i drink more of it than i ought
while dripping and wheezing
*cough*
*cough*
*sneeze*
*sneeze*
*cough*
snuggle in frozen wet blankets
i think i'll try again
.to...
...sleep it off.
*cough*
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© 2008 denver nitze
Published on Friday, March 28, 2008.
Filed under:
"Poetry"
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On Friday, June 20, 2008, DIATRICUS
(64)
wrote:
"nyquil illusions of a grand nite.stand band" -- this and the last line just resonate so well with me... ouch. Great read. Thanks!
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On Tuesday, April 1, 2008, Sketso
(435) wrote:
Quite creative, with an amusing look at the anguish of your ailment! If I didn't know better, I'd say it was the codeine in the cough syrup, but we all know you're just "dripping" in talent. ;)
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On Sunday, March 30, 2008, Narcissa
(404) wrote:
Awesome piece...hmmm the shot of whiskey usually helps me...perhaps another one?
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On Sunday, March 30, 2008, freudian-slip
(239) wrote:
and all the while I'm thinking... well that sure is a strange looking penis??? I am such a dork and I hope you feel better:)
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On Saturday, March 29, 2008, NikesRain
(1298) wrote:
i feel for you hun, i don't know what was worse when i had something like it for 2 weeks, the horrible antibiotics that didn't seem to do a hell of a lot or the constant balloon head... hope you feel better soon
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A former member wrote:
yeah..raging sinus infection, right now. totally relating to this. only my nose doesn't run anymore because my sinus cavity is deformed and I have scarring on my mucusoidal tissue from the years of allergies and untreated sinus infections..so it all goes down my throat...yummy....I'm hoping I'm cleared up enough to go out tomorrow, but it's not likely...totally, totally loving this..
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, denver nitze
(256) wrote:
thanks. i can totally relate to the down the throat, mine's half and half, it sucks. so i'll make you a deal, i'll get better, if you do. its a shame you live so far we could go out together tomorrow nite and not have to worry about gettin each other sick. :) thanks for the comment, hope you feel better soon too. ~ta~
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, Sparrow
(89) wrote:
I wanna pop the balloon....
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, blue
(1454) wrote:
can i pop the balloon?
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, denver nitze
(256) wrote:
no no!! thats my head. ow.
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A former member wrote:
*clutches thermometer tightly and eyes her ass.....drools a little*
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, denver nitze
(256) wrote:
*wipes drool* naughty boy. ;)
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, Alanarchy
(1200) wrote:
Very entertaining. Ugh, that's a nasty feeling. But the imagery, though unflattering :D was great. Dig it, hardcore. Hey stylet, feel better.
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A former member wrote:
mmm....nyquil is one of my best friends.....try some honey and lemon tea too....and some blackberry brandy....and some weed.....and.....what were we talking about again ??
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, Echoes of Orpheus
(359) wrote:
I knew who wrote it just from the title :) I agree with Ainsof, very fun. Becoming somewhat of a trademark of your new pieces, well done yet again TA
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, unspeakable truth
(100) wrote:
As I sneeze in sympathy, maybe symphony … Cute poem, did so capture the yucky’s, watch your balloon doesn’t pop.
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A former member wrote:
hahaha...this was a fun read; you capture sickness sooooo well lol (or did it capture you) love the irony of the floating head crushing shoulders... and nice ballooon! fun stuff very creative
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A former member wrote:
lovey as always. ~ hdb.
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A former member wrote:
lol...loved it. The upside is if you were in australia it would be friday night, and that would be a disaster,... you still have time....nice title, I went for the tissues but little did I realise..haaa
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On Friday, March 28, 2008, denver nitze
(256) wrote:
its friday nite now, and my weekend is shot i think. :( this blows... thanks for the comment. :)
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