Symphony In The Sky

By maddin foxxxy

The symphony she hears
is that of his heart,
'what a perfect moment to live,'
she thought...
the moon can't beat
the brightness of his eyes
and the sea can't win
over his wildest side.
He plays her hair
as if he painted a masterpiece
no Da Vinci could top
and certainly no Picasso
could mess up.
"Magnificat", he said at loud,
"is that musical piece Bach wrote,"
'that's the way i see her,'
he thought...
sensual in her esence,
beauty in her trait,
winds as they touch her
cannot help but shake.
'How can agony be so bittersweet?'
They both meet the thought...
the melody now is
a distant one,
as rain from the sky
screams back at a rising sun.
This is how it must be,
they conclude...
this love that
deliciously pours
throughout,
also drowns us whole
inside and out.
As violins and cellos
stop
the sky aswell slumbers...
as each of all its stars just
drop.

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Published on Sunday, May 4, 2003. Filed under: "Poetry"

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Comments on "Symphony In The Sky"

A former member wrote: speaking of thoughts that aren't often spoken. Great write.
On Saturday, May 8, 2010, A Life Without You (146) wrote:

Excellent write, very passionate
On Friday, December 9, 2005, Sin (1168) wrote:

there is nothing i can say that hasnt already been said...thank you for sharing this utterly lovely piece ~kristy
On Friday, October 1, 2004, GreekPhilosopher (156) wrote:

Yes. "What A Perfect Moment To Live". Thats A Great Line That Just Leads To The Rest Of A Great Write. Nice. GPhD.
On Friday, June 4, 2004, Railway_Butterfly (354) wrote:

I've read this piece before and I fell in love with it,Im suprised I haven't commented already...just...wow..this piece is so magnificantly crafted..I could almost hear the music as I read this...im truly awed by it.Amazing work..Butterfly..xxx...
On Wednesday, December 3, 2003, Exodus (172) wrote:

Extremely Beautiful...i really like it...Great Work!
On Monday, October 27, 2003, Drea (1443) wrote:

"the moon can't beat the brightness of his eyes and the sea can't win over his wildest side." Vel told me about this poem and i had to check it out. and i'm floored. truely heart warming, and romantic. you have made my heart smile ~Drea~
On Monday, October 27, 2003, A Velvet Tongue (436) wrote:

" The symphony she hears is that of his heart"...I have not read many pieces here that have touched me as this has...it beckoned and awoke the deep romantic inside of me..and pulled me to life with a silken fist..this is indeed a masterpiece...*applauds
On Sunday, September 28, 2003, OLd SouL (734) wrote:

very romantic, this poem carried me away and lulled me into an euphoric state. you are fantastic.
On Sunday, June 8, 2003, Aurora_Light (472) wrote:

wow this is awesome! i love it
On Saturday, June 7, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1703) wrote:

Beautiful imagry in this piece - I enjoyed it very much. I love your first two lines, "The symphony she hears is that of his heart" - very romantic. Ciao, T/S
On Tuesday, May 20, 2003, manywalks (750) wrote:

Simple, understated, beauty and art.
On Monday, May 12, 2003, Stranger (264) wrote:

Love the last five lines. Great image and feeling!
On Monday, May 12, 2003, Midnight Phoenix (240) wrote:

Your comparisons are greater than any words of praise I could ever offer. Absolutely beatiful. You're definately on my favorites list.
On Monday, May 12, 2003, diavolessa (208) wrote:

This is truly beautiful! perfect I would dare say!
A former member wrote: As violins and cellos stop the sky aswell slumbers... as each of all its stars just drop. THIS IS TRUELY A MASTERPIECE! It is a symphonic opera; your words created the music; BRAVO! BRAVO! BRAVO!
On Wednesday, May 7, 2003, maddin foxxxy (358) wrote:

thank u...your comments are profound and touching.
A former member wrote: "This is how it must be, they conclude... this love that deliciously pours throughout, also drowns us whole inside and out." Tears swell from my eyes, and I can hear the distant echo of a soft cello reverberate the sadness...
A former member wrote: They both meet the thought... the melody now is a distant one, as rain from the sky screams back at a rising sun. "I can hear soft piano notes dripping like rain after a storm!"
A former member wrote: 'How can agony be so bittersweet?' So true, and such a bohemian rhapsody if I may borrow from Freddie Mercury, that the bittersweet can be agony? This is profound, and the symphony is now at the height of Mt. Olympus.
A former member wrote: "Magnificat"...is that musical piece Bach wrote," Magnificat in D Major - Masses and Magnificat Settings... Magnificat anima mea Dominum...Et exsultavit spiritus meus in Deo salutari meo....EXCELLENT!
A former member wrote: "Magnificat", he said at loud, "Magnificat", I say at loud!"
A former member wrote: the moon can't beat the brightness of his eyes and the sea can't win over his wildest side. "this does paint the the illustration of tragic love; faraway, so close...as the moon pulls for the desire of the sea"
A former member wrote: The symphony she hears is that of his heart, 'what a perfect moment to live,' she thought... this does make my heart feel the symphony of the perfect moments to live and to hear...
A former member wrote: this piece was seriously fucking cool!
A former member wrote: Haha I agree- fuckin' cool! Awesome write.
On Sunday, May 4, 2003, DoctorAsh (373) wrote:

wow, wonderful write`
On Sunday, May 4, 2003, shadowsinthelight (146) wrote:

My answer is D, all the above. Enjoyed this, well done, S.
On Sunday, May 4, 2003, FallenSky (42) wrote:

the subject of the poem must be truly beautiful for you to write about them this way ...keep writing ~CFS
On Sunday, May 4, 2003, cre (411) wrote:

Really beautiful.
A former member wrote: lovely, finished this off well.. It really gives the piece a sense of closure.
A former member wrote: That last 5 lines are really beautiful. Good writing.