Every Sky In My Mind

By cre

I thought the sky only came in that color
When the greatest of tragedies weaved
Into the tapestry of life
And left her soul bereaved

When the winter of some deadly end
Snowed its cremation down
And ashes painted dead trees white
And gathered in silent piles on a muted ground

Times we all watched the redness of the sun
As it bled away into the sky
And its washing paleness seemed to speak of things
Oddities that crept and leaked into our minds

In the stillness of moments halted
Leaving space for only a breeze to chill your skin
The frozen fear that claimed your eyes
Urging us all to seek the sky again

For some message hidden in bleakly withered mist
A cloudy dawning upon our minds we prayed
Fumbling numbness against a blank backdrop
Some bodies left and some in grey death stayed

Every sky in my mind fades to that distant color
And winds like angels laden with tales of grief
Whisper my world into that past existence
As though I were no more than autumn's forgotten leaf.

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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Wednesday, April 9, 2003.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • A former member wrote: Need to add punctuation to accentuate the words. Otherwise, I liked the imagery your words projected and conveyed your message well.

  • steuss On Thursday, April 8, 2004, steuss (93)By person wrote:

    The last stanza is just beautifully written. This made me think, and then fill with a melancholic joy.

  • BoldSolitude On Tuesday, April 6, 2004, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    Speaking of weaving, you weave the most beautiful of stories so seemingly effortlessly.

  • A former member wrote: Awesome...look what happens when I forget to read your page for a couple weeks. Please, keep writing, it only gets better and the words stronger and imagery more breathtaking.

  • liquid_emotion On Monday, April 21, 2003, liquid_emotion (323)By person wrote:

    awe. So quiet and so strong.

  • KittyStryker On Tuesday, April 15, 2003, KittyStryker (711)By person wrote:

    Intensely beautiful...

  • DoctorAsh On Tuesday, April 15, 2003, DoctorAsh (373)By person wrote:

    just for the hell of it .... like many other pieces of yours .... i think i'll just add another comment to make it look that much bigger and better .... kinda like ... inflation

  • Six-Out On Saturday, April 12, 2003, Six-Out (1439)By person wrote:

    What can I say? Everyone has already said what this one is, beautiful.

  • diavolessa On Friday, April 11, 2003, diavolessa (208)By person wrote:

    you have done it once again! its a wonderful piece, very powerful. "ashes painted dead trees white" that verse hit me. As always i LOVE it! trully great! :)

  • A former member wrote: And winds like angels laden with tales of grief Whisper my world into that past existence As though I were no more than autumn's forgotten leaf...... i really like that stanza its very good.. and Cre i love your work--- Thanks for yoru comments on min

  • A former member wrote: at first glance, too structured for my taste... but i read on, and the imagery pulled me in. thank you, especially for the last stanza which lingers in my mind

  • A former member wrote: oh, wow man; that was immense. An incredible piece, I humbly applaud you.

  • A former member wrote: oh, wow. this one made my eyes well up. i cant explain the emotions and memories this brought up in me. amazing. :)

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Thursday, April 10, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm (1751)By person wrote:

    Great piece! Especially love the picture you create with the lines "When the winter of some deadly end Snowed its cremation down And ashes painted dead trees white". Very creative way to express that scene! Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • GreekPhilosopher On Thursday, April 10, 2003, GreekPhilosopher (156)By person wrote:

    Well Cre, What Can I Say... You Have Talent, Plenty Of Talent. And In More Ways Than One! Great Peice Of Work.

  • Midnight Phoenix On Wednesday, April 9, 2003, Midnight Phoenix (240)By person wrote:

    Seasonal change is always a staple in writing. Your descriptors gave the rest of the words a nice abstract feel to it.

  • Jonas On Wednesday, April 9, 2003, Jonas (720)By person wrote:

    absolutely beautiful in its icy blue green melancholy...

  • A former member wrote: very nice! puts me in some deep thoughts

  • A former member wrote: enjoyed this very much cre, well done


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