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If I Were
By cre
If I were the ocean
not another wave would crash
or if I were a star
my light would no more flash
If I were the wind
the air would be deadly still
or if I were the rain
the lakes would no more fill
If I were the sun
the day would grow cold and grey
or if I were the moon
the dark of night would never fade
If I were a tree
my branches would hang so low
or if I were a seed
the plant would cease to grow
If I were an island
I would sink into the waters deep
and if I were a person
I would fold into eternal sleep
If I were anything
I would slowly cease to be
I would slip into forever
if I were anything but me
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Copyright 2003 cre
Published on Monday, March 24, 2003.
Filed under:
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On Sunday, May 6, 2012, Dominic
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wrote:
I know how this site works. But until I discovered your poetry I was confused. This, as usual is simple and to the point and brilliant. In other words, nothing like my work at all. Who would you say I should explore in initially, I haven't been here for long and it's a massive site. I don't believe those who post the most are necessarily any good, at least some of the time, and staying buoyant here is proving a challenge for me. Any poems or poets you could recommend would be cool. Good work as always :)
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A former member wrote:
Wow. I love LOVE this.
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On Monday, April 23, 2007, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
indeed we would all cease to be if we were anything but ourselves, for some of us we just have to figure out who we are
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A former member wrote:
even before i became a member, i had read your work and i loved it and i still do...this was just beautiful, amazing
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On Thursday, June 23, 2005, Linwe
(25) wrote:
you are magic with words!
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A former member wrote:
It sounds lazy .dp
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On Sunday, June 27, 2004, cre
(411) wrote:
then you completely missed the point.
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On Tuesday, April 20, 2004, OLd SouL
(734) wrote:
my heart began to sink with this, then the end hit me with a smile... like bungee jumping.. falling then snapping right back.. weeeeeeeeeeeeee.... :::OLd
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A former member wrote:
lol I'm with Oldie...the ending took me for a loop in a good direction.
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On Friday, March 5, 2004, Mistress Morbid
(405) wrote:
I love it, you couldnt be anything else, if you werent just you.
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On Sunday, November 16, 2003, Emptyness Inside Me
(171) wrote:
This is beautifully put togehter, you have extreme talent, never let it fade, great write, I enjoyed every second of reading this ~Emptyness~
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On Sunday, June 8, 2003, hate_doll
(265) wrote:
This is so incredibly amazing...the beauty within these 6 stanzas just blows me away...and I am left truly speachless...
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On Tuesday, April 8, 2003, DoctorAsh
(373) wrote:
wow ... i really like this one, again, this is absolutely beautiful, much respect MF
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A former member wrote:
haha, wow. i love how it was solemn all the way up until the end, and the theme was brilliant. Love it. :)
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On Thursday, April 3, 2003, maddin foxxxy
(358) wrote:
definetly one of ur best...great ending!
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On Wednesday, April 2, 2003, liquid_emotion
(323) wrote:
chilling is the word that came to me although it doesn't seem fitting. Awesome and such a ending, I did not forsee. I loved the simplisity and perfection of ideas.
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A former member wrote:
Incredible poeticness, beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
you are such a talented writer, i get drunk on your words, then go home and beat my children, then they die, and i blame it on the coffee machine and sue the coffee company, and make millions, so i love it
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A former member wrote:
great job, cre
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On Thursday, March 27, 2003, GreekPhilosopher
(156) wrote:
Very Very Impressed With This Work... Its Sad But It Rings True... Well Done.
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On Wednesday, March 26, 2003, Jonas
(720) wrote:
the shadows slip away into a moonless autumn evening... feels kinda like a summer night but the bite in the wind is just a bit too much to bear.
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A former member wrote:
i have to agree with everyone here...beautiful
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On Monday, March 24, 2003, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
Jane, you suck majorly, but damn, can you write or what. lol. Great job.
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On Monday, March 24, 2003, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
beautiful my friend, beautiful,...uh
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On Monday, March 24, 2003, CorruptedLittleGirl
(253) wrote:
yes, beautiful indeed
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