real men admit to their tears.
By Six-Out
inhale.
feel that breath jump. not quite a gasp. not quite not.
and your hands twitch a little. jumping key to key.
fingers speaking symphonies in words.
and this house is far too quiet to be a home.
and I'd beat myself to death if my fists wouldn't shatter
it's almost like I'm throwing glass stones at a steel mansion
scared to take a step. because this ice is so thin.
and I'd swear that these fractures resembeled my veins
stomping loud enough to make my arms go numb.
yet still suprised- when my heart freezes.
and I'd do a drunken dance on the tip of a crescent moon.
if it would illuminate this void.
offering a plea bargain to the stars- maybe there's still some magic left
sending words in the shape of smoke-rings.
listening for the truth when the sky starts breaking to pieces
that I ripped it into with the shards left of those shattered stones
I threw at the night.
and there are no words left to pray.
and there is no answer to the questions of time.
and we are all so useless
and this house is far too fucking quiet to call a home...
I'd exhale. but my breath has left me.
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Comments on "real men admit to their tears."
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A former member wrote:
This is probably the best "Poem of the Day" since I've been a member.
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A former member wrote:
This is probably the most awesome "Poem of the Day" since I've been a member.
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A former member wrote:
This is probably the most awesome "Poem of the Day" since I've been a member.
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On Monday, June 6, 2011, HeadpatSlut
(257) wrote:
It's perfectly alright to cry from emotional pain, just not physical pain. That's the Men Don't Cry rule. Good write, Six
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On Tuesday, October 27, 2009, Emma Tenebrae
(13) wrote:
'Glass stones on steel mansions' .... Well put! Words from the darkness - how they ignite our souls and cry our frustations.
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On Sunday, October 30, 2005, coly
(54) wrote:
you know how to right thats for damn sure
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A former member wrote:
much respect, so i figured i'd leave it here, the reasons for this respect...take a look around you and see what you've created
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On Thursday, October 6, 2005, mysticventures
(527) wrote:
and my breath has left me as well - after reading this...
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On Wednesday, October 5, 2005, vaultgrl
(185) wrote:
wow, i wish i could share how i feel about this but my mind has become jealous and refused to come up with any good comments.....great write!!!!! I love it....:)
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On Tuesday, October 4, 2005, Dr Benway
(48) wrote:
writing it again, different words same content." Wonderful Jon, and like always, I can relate.
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On Tuesday, October 4, 2005, Dr Benway
(48) wrote:
When i read this i saw you sitting in this small room clanking away on an old type writer. One dead tree branch in view out the window right in front of you. For some reason i almost hear you laughing when i read this, as if to say "I can't believe I am
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A former member wrote:
This summed up the exact feelings in my heart at this very moment. Heh. Not sure what to say man. I'm right there with you. ~Ryan
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On Thursday, September 29, 2005, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
"I'd exhale. but my breath has left me." I'm not even sure what to say Jon.. Just think about what I've always said about your writing, because I feel exactly the same. You amaze me in so many ways.
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A former member wrote:
Oh I love it! Your words make me want to keep reading, and I must confess to nearly wanting to cry while reading it. Fucking awesome, sweetie. Please, by all means, let it out! I'd love to read more!
-Storm
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A former member wrote:
fucken awsome
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A former member wrote:
"feel that breath jump. not quite a gasp. not quite not". i like that line. i think i had to catch my breath after reading that line, and that was just the beginning!
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On Saturday, September 17, 2005, Mahakala
(207) wrote:
OHH dearest six....i am amazed by ur talent...i would luv to know what goes on in that brain of urs :P Kiersten
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On Saturday, September 17, 2005, glasshouse
(530) wrote:
Subtle at times and then a slap in the face, this piece was positively heart-wrenching. I can feel your sorrow in every single word. Nicely done, though I am sorry you felt so inspired. -Glass
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A former member wrote:
The second last line is a standout. Loved it.
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On Saturday, September 17, 2005, stormtalk
(727) wrote:
REAL MEN DON'T CRY IN THE FIRST PLACE, LITTLE GIRL!
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On Saturday, September 17, 2005, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
ah, these words have a lulling effect.... just drifting in sweet melancholy and then suddenly that last line. just bam - paradoxically it forced the air from my lungs leaving me winded. thank you.
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On Saturday, September 17, 2005, sIo
(898) wrote:
so sad...
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A former member wrote:
whats to say but you are the man. unlucky yet still the man. your work is constructed so well i want to screw your images
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A former member wrote:
..yes, that last line. Exactly.
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On Saturday, September 17, 2005, Dei
(663) wrote:
"throwing glass rocks at a steel house" Oh I love it!