[empty words] you break my heart.
By Six-Out
[youdisgustme]
with my tongue dripping of your deciet-
leaving trails of my conviction. down your chest
your sweat tastes of contempt
-and I hate you for your beauty.
your lips- taste of poison. and a hint of those late night tears
that you so -very- deservingly cry.
brushing the hair out of your eyes. you make me sick
whispering your desires into my ear
as if I could care about you.
a slight kiss- on back of your neck. sending a chill down your spine
breathing my lied loves into your skin.
dragging. my hands up your thighs. I detest your moans.
you fall [so easily] for every empty word I throw at you
leaving your heart on this cutting table.
under the knife I hold so high- trusting me not to destroy you
you were always so gullible
mouth the three words that you so long to hear-
watch my lips- and
'i love you' : has never been so hollow
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Comments on "[empty words] you break my heart."
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On Saturday, January 30, 2010, maggot death
(60) wrote:
wow.....This is an amazing write.....hits me deep....probably hits your girlfriend deep, too:)
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On Wednesday, March 11, 2009, Jaded Jezzabelle
(328) wrote:
I DON'T KNOW WHAT TO SAY.....LEAVES ME A LOSS FOR WORDS
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On Friday, January 19, 2007, Bella Butchery
(696) wrote:
ditto samone
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A former member wrote:
Irony can be such a doule edged sword. This was vivid and intense. ....-samone
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A former member wrote:
*double
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On Monday, November 6, 2006, verablue
(106) wrote:
brutal. i felt torn while reading this....not knowing weather i wanted to reach through the computer screen and strangle you or sit back with a sadistic grin on my face and laugh with you.
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A former member wrote:
You have insight, you have wit, you have a view of the world few have, and thankfully, for the rest of us, you have a way with words and you take everything you see and hear and you lump it together, stir it all up until it seems like one big mess
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A former member wrote:
and from that mess you draw out the words letter by letter, period by period, coma by coma, because there is a reason for every letter and every marking and every space between, and you place them with precision, with style, until we finally see what you
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A former member wrote:
until we finally see what you see, and it is brilliant.
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On Friday, August 12, 2005, heart broken suicide
(18) wrote:
this is really good you are really talented with words
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A former member wrote:
Hey abot the comment you left on my thing. I didn't know him for a few weaks I knew him for months, more than a year and if you knew what happened you would understand. Oh and I really like your poem.Good choice of words
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On Sunday, July 24, 2005, BeautifulCalamity
(428) wrote:
damn, this is fuckin intense. amazing and full of this raw, empty thing I'd hate anywhere else. however, something I wish I could capture in words.. something you've written in a very beautiful way.
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On Saturday, July 23, 2005, Sin
(1135) wrote:
damn Jon...brutal yet appealing in a very disturbing way
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A former member wrote:
ouch. this stung. this is the "hate-sex" poem of the century. nicely done.
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On Thursday, July 21, 2005, manywalks
(747) wrote:
Well my little taco bean, this is going to the top of my list.
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On Thursday, July 21, 2005, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
Jon, this is great! Now take back what you said on the IM the other day and do not ever repeat those words again! S.
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A former member wrote:
Christ man, this is the line that we cross sometimes, just beware the consequences: sometimes the truth of our actions matches the truth of our wisdom matches the truth of our downfall. Cool write all the same. ~Ryan
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On Thursday, July 21, 2005, Lotophagi
(333) wrote:
this is superb... I love the concept, it's something that I'm familiar with and you portray the emotions, and events perfectly. awesome. thank you.
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On Wednesday, July 20, 2005, Dei
(663) wrote:
Wow.. I don't know whether to hate you or love you for this.
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On Wednesday, July 20, 2005, Just a Rose
(25) wrote:
grins, this is awesome
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A former member wrote:
ha ha ha.....This is a grand.....Oh I love when people admit they are human
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On Wednesday, July 20, 2005, no one at all
(8) wrote:
wow. beautiful.
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A former member wrote:
makes me light up at the oncoming destruction. like watching broken glass wish it were a pane
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On Tuesday, July 19, 2005, Malice In Wonderland
(976) wrote:
Razor sharp, very thick with contempt, but you out it so well.
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On Tuesday, July 19, 2005, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
biting, softsinister and altogether excellent. compelling and powerful from beginning to end.
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A former member wrote:
fuck man. that was a hammer to the head. smashed me out of the ballpark and through some poor fool's windscreen.
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On Tuesday, July 19, 2005, Sticky Kitty
(241) wrote:
breath taking. This enchanted me. I was hooked onto every word. You're not a failed poet after all. -kitty
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On Tuesday, July 19, 2005, Mahakala
(207) wrote:
Wow...great write...kinda makes me feel guilty and I don't know why...intence...totally loving it...
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On Tuesday, July 19, 2005, sIo
(898) wrote:
i could easily slice the skin from my lips and beg with swift whispers for the same hands that cut my heart to soothe my aching kiss. this was shattering. simply shattering.
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On Wednesday, July 20, 2005, thornyrose
(23) wrote:
intense and well written...how some get so much pleasure out of anothers pain...