Red All Over

By flying_fox

Lying in a fragile night
warmed by a fantasy glow
the red beaded candle shade
illuminating such subtle motion

skin so pale, inviting
upon red satin sheets
soft focus vaseline lens
raven hair, dark eyes, red lips

long lithe luscious limbs
red nails tipping graceful fingers
caressing delicate breasts
pink nipples pinched red

plump lips parting to
embrace a red-nailed finger
moistened soft flesh reaching
and stroking below

back arching and sliding
drowning red silken sinking
as the pulsing starts to quicken
staining red the white snow

now the candle burns lower
dancing fire in its shelter
singing red for the last time
a fleeting fancy red real

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Copyright 2004 flying_fox
Published on Monday, March 15, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • verablue On Saturday, October 28, 2006, verablue (106)By person wrote:

    this flows beautifly. so many great lines, i'd be hard pressed to pick a favorite part.

  • Mute Serenade On Monday, May 10, 2004, Mute Serenade (389)By person wrote:

    I...uh....bu.... fabulous dahlink, simply mahvelous. I want to ravish someone now... erotically fantabulous, love you foxy-Sue

  • Midnight Phoenix On Monday, May 10, 2004, Midnight Phoenix (240)By person wrote:

    Very elegant and professional. Erotic and tasteful. The imagery is vivid and the red hue intensified every word.

  • TropicalSnowstorm On Thursday, May 6, 2004, TropicalSnowstorm (1580)By person wrote:

    Very descriptive...I think I need some ice water... : ) Ciao, T/S Scholar

  • Guttercat On Tuesday, May 4, 2004, Guttercat (30)By person wrote:

    though I'm a scarlet kitten, I've been struck dumb by the intense eroticism of this piece... but the colour triggers my lust. *snarlz* ;p in jest, for I'm but an emasculated kitten...

  • murder_in_clubland On Monday, April 26, 2004, murder_in_clubland (384)By person wrote:

    ohhhh wow ~ss

  • A former member wrote: 'staining red the white snow' ... wow; evocative/sensual/beautiful... and your rhymeMeter is wonderful...tempting...red...

  • WinterGrave On Monday, April 12, 2004, WinterGrave (258)By person wrote:

    oh this is wonderful, most enjoyable excperiance to read.~~~Grave

  • Delphoid-Q On Sunday, April 11, 2004, Delphoid-Q (213)By person wrote:

    Wonderfully sensual yet balanced at the same time... A beautiful expression.

  • A former member wrote: oh.. goodness! this piece drew me in eagerly, promising infatuation, but the pervasive abstraction into use of the colour... a tasteful and tantalizing balance struck. delectable and delicious!

  • knightmirror On Wednesday, March 31, 2004, knightmirror (426)By person wrote:

    beautiful imagery.i'm speechless.**** my dear fox.knight

  • Mistress Morbid On Tuesday, March 30, 2004, Mistress Morbid (405)By person wrote:

    Oh my ::blushes and hides:: Good poem! -Morb

  • BoldSolitude On Monday, March 29, 2004, BoldSolitude (214)By person wrote:

    The first stanza set the mood perfectly, I love the way you capture the essence of a moment in words.

  • A former member wrote: I've got a dirty mind. Muahaha. This was great and extremely clever. You took one of the simple pleasures in life and framed it in a very timeless way. Awsome. ~Ryan

  • maddin foxxxy On Tuesday, March 16, 2004, maddin foxxxy (358)By person wrote:

    Classy and blissful .. I felt like red...tasted red and soaked in red by reading this ..absolutely stunning!

  • OLd SouL On Tuesday, March 16, 2004, OLd SouL (717)By person wrote:

    I want to bathe in red :) what a wonderfully sensual write. :::OLd

  • birdwell On Tuesday, March 16, 2004, birdwell (138)By person wrote:

    red visions swirl, and illuminate the lines so gracefully... so glamorous ~db~

  • A former member wrote: wonderful.

  • capt_funguy On Monday, March 15, 2004, capt_funguy (777)By person wrote:

    illuminating such subtle motion .... ends up as quite an understatement - you kept it red ... you kept it vivid .... think the magic word may be ... sensuous ... yeah that works ... funguy

  • A former member wrote: "dancing fire in it's shelter" was such a pleasure to read.

  • K_Love On Monday, March 15, 2004, K_Love (525)By person wrote:

    Your indeed talented, I love your work. This is passionate and beauty and spectacular! Kirsten`

  • girlafraid On Monday, March 15, 2004, girlafraid (479)By person wrote:

    very passionate...i like how the repetition of the color red invites you to read the next stanza...eager to see how it will appear...*afraid*

  • Six-Out On Monday, March 15, 2004, Six-Out (1423)By person wrote:

    Yummy. This piece made me think of a turtle I used to have...LONG story. But, good nonetheless. Very good Foxy Lady.

  • purr_verse On Monday, March 15, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    gorgeous!! i especially love the closing stanza - so evocative and beautiful; and such a lovely sensuality throughout. :)

  • Lynaes On Monday, March 15, 2004, Lynaes (854)By person wrote:

    Wow, I LOVE the style of description in this. Gorgeous and vivid, strong and you've used the theme of red supremely. Excellent piece I love it. ~L

  • A former member wrote: Ooh so beautiful, loved the way each verse had an element of the color red... Lovely. ~Wish Upon A Star


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