errors in compassion
By capt_funguy
burned dust smell from a glue fixed television
distance daring glance focalocity
ruffle feathers in a pillow once foresaken
ashtray overflows to the tune of fire engines -
crashing through a food run -
sirens blare - but you're hardly alerted
mumbling words about a government that's
lost it's train of benevolence , impoverity ,
compassionalism
dead lip lingo turns to a tight lid weep -
and the ferocity of the matchsticks crackling in
another's kitchen drawer -
consumption small within the consumating
supernova - count the campfires in the bedrooms
the toilet paper burning before the shower
curtain drools and turns against it's master
the fumes pick the lock -
then insinuate themselves into a
poison fluid , adrift and disloyal
tears fall spastic - sucked into the
carpet stained by your other unheard eulegies
can't kick contempt for the saviors - can't
call them human without gagging on
the resemblance
missionettes cut out oaktag angels -
they love ponies , and unicorns , and
sharing love -
maternal instincts in children harnassed to churn
and turn the crank of jeuvenile
sweatshop mournography
- our rituals are flawed -
- our saviors are flawed -
last screams with fault and echoes are consuming you
horror waits in line - drip - drip -- agony overload
it's opportunity a flash -
windows ... tight , tight -- music blaring
the undertones like anvil fists
and the subtle din from locations indescernable
the everywhere screach fills the bones in your ears
shaking , slamming - vibro staccato
your eyes' insides - pitted and scalded by
the images the world window throws at you -
smash the T.V. again .... make it go awry
you 're reborn to you're exalted damnation
wishy want got you here
bit off far more than you'd have chosen to chew
you stopped your everyday for a second's misfire -
pompous alloy of concern and thoughtfulness
you thought you'd gather the world's pain in a teardrop ...
but there was so much more ...
so much more
you freethought yourself into an unopposed election -
and you won
so sexy serious , now - so sentry sorrowfilled
look what you've done to your mother's baby boy
the relentless holocaust that's everyday somewhere
is your's - first to see and hear - the guardian of
everyone's last gasp .... the unknown target of
all final pleas -------
the position was vacant -
you couldn't have known
you dared to seek pain -
that wasn't your own
you requested mistakenly -
what you reveared ....
humanity's nomination
to be god's eyes and ears
Comments on "errors in compassion"
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On Wednesday, April 10, 2013, aquiouss
(21) wrote:
so sexy serious , now - so sentry sorrowfilled.. mmmmm love it
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On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
powerful ending...wonderful piece.
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On Tuesday, February 13, 2007, Disassembly Boy
(59) wrote:
I love the lengthiness of your poems and how you don't lose focus of the subject.. Very nice..
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On Friday, February 9, 2007, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
What a fantastic piece...the last three stanzas sew this one up perfectly! Your pieces have such a great flow with insight as sharp as a razor. I wish I could see some new productions from that beautiful mind of yours. : ) Ciao, T/S
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On Thursday, October 5, 2006, i tremble
(29) wrote:
i am literally speechless
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A former member wrote:
can't kick contempt for the saviors - can't
call them human without gagging on
the resemblance. So true, and so beautiful...I don't know how you do it.
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On Friday, July 16, 2004, elisa
(1595) wrote:
You speak beautifully for your eyes. You communicate as a witness to your own life. The last 8 lines descibes how I got here too:) compassion is a lonely pain reliever for others...
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On Tuesday, June 22, 2004, Mute Serenade
(389) wrote:
your talent exceeds anywords i could fathom.... so sexy/sorrowfilled line.. that was peach. The dead lip lingo stanza was screaming. if i could only formulate the sentences... Sue Zen
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
scared in the sense that theres so much that i dont understand, so much i want to know and so little time...Thank you for stealing this moment and making it worthwhile
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Your discourse is insanely poingnant painting thousands of painstaking images of ordinary day things in order to give forth a profound inner meaning...the words reach out and drown me veritably leaving me breathless and scared
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On Saturday, April 24, 2004, Solace
(1065) wrote:
I had a grin the size of a faultline throughout this piece, a sort of maniacal grin you'd expect on a zealot. I read it aloud as if on a pulpit, with the religious fervor of a madmen...
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On Friday, March 26, 2004, sulkylime
(191) wrote:
my new favorite of yours!!!! i decided
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On Saturday, March 6, 2004, Lynaes
(854) wrote:
There's a certain degree of truth, raw-ness and intensity about your work. This piece is certainly all of those things. Excellent work. ~L
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On Thursday, February 12, 2004, whisperer
(166) wrote:
with that i pick up my gun and start down the path of social destruction....of everything...damn you're good.
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On Thursday, January 29, 2004, Jonas
(715) wrote:
wow. as purr said 'wordmotion' excellent... i get the sense of the monstrosity, gangling hugeness of sorrow, of the truths in the world... 'wishy want...etc' is exceptional; like a quarter in the jar of a junkie don't do much good... if you dig.
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On Thursday, January 29, 2004, Jonas
(715) wrote:
but you do cause you wrote this. this one read is all i need to put you on my fav's list.
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On Thursday, January 29, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
beautiful work with highly original and effective wordmotion... "you stopped your everyday for a second's misfire"... This piece verily rocks. :) purr
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On Thursday, January 29, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
Damn Capt'n. You've done it again...pure brilliance. "dead lip lingo turns to a tight lid weep"...magnificent rhythm, gorgeous imagery. Again you tackle things I can only dream of. FF
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On Thursday, January 29, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
purr ,... miss fox ... thankyou so much -- funguy
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On Monday, April 26, 2004, Anth
(1126) wrote:
abstract brilliance that put a smile on my face, and abstract with definite strong meaning and structure, just mindblowing lines one after the other, faves for sure