Ephedrine
By Mute Serenade
I sleep in gray cloudiness
That isn't sleep at all
where i indulge your inner saphires
and follow you down stair cases that wind endlessly
i awoke to being awake
to find day old coffee and cold linoleum
Just wishing
I could be clutched in your rivers of salt,
Following every curve to your cheek,
Every Eyelash washed together
Just Wishing
That i could look at you and taste warm sunrays
Or the sunrise, just to feel the wet dew on your clothes.
I awoke to find i had never slept
To sapphires and cold linoleum taunting me
Adorning velvet fingertips and curves
That memory binds me to in frantic tightness...
Your finger tips, your curves
You who would have made me drink that day old coffee
As i watched the cream colored smoke pour from your mouth.
Late AMs i breathe you in,
And Breathe you out,
Just to write your name on the glass...
Comments on "Ephedrine"
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On Thursday, June 7, 2018, man of decay
(58) wrote:
I love that line... " I awoke to being awake."
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On Saturday, September 16, 2017, carlosjackal
(2788) wrote:
Ooh, yes, that last line blew the whole thing up......Brilliant, passionate work..
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On Monday, August 28, 2017, Purposelessness
(143) wrote:
Ahrgg so good! You write so well, even your early stuff is excellent.
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On Friday, December 15, 2006, Dei
(663) wrote:
very well presented. The last lines were really fantastic and closed the poem perfectly.
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On Thursday, May 26, 2005, smearedXmakeup
(19) wrote:
Really great imagery
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On Wednesday, November 24, 2004, blue
(1409) wrote:
i love the last line! clever.
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On Saturday, May 22, 2004, sixsixnine
(476) wrote:
your just one brilliant fucking person* i'm @ work right now but once i get the chance i will READ SOMEMORE*669*
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On Thursday, March 25, 2004, hate_doll
(263) wrote:
this was, for lack of a better word, beautiful. Subtley charming and nothing missing. The poignancy of this piece is mind-shattering...I have indeed fallen in love ::swoons:: hehe
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A former member wrote:
'where i indulge your inner saphires
and follow you down stair cases that wind endlessly' i like the feeling of infinity... smooth coffee jazz rhythm; well done ...
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On Sunday, March 21, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
vrey nice indeed... I particularly like the coldness of "i awoke to being awake to find day old coffee and cold linoleum" and agree with purr - "inner sapphires" is indeed lovely. Fox
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On Monday, February 16, 2004, capt_funguy
(777) wrote:
this captured a moment that seems to represent a whole , vry nice work ... funguy
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On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, Stranger
(263) wrote:
Anyone who references Cohen has, at least, good taste. But this poem shows that you have talent as well. Hope you hang around. I really liked this.
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On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
very impressive; original and pointedly engrossing...and "inner sapphires" is a most excellent phrase. :) purr
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On Tuesday, February 10, 2004, slow.burn.star
(84) wrote:
just cold air on the outside, and warm air in the middle of my dream. xxxxxxx