once upon a time...
By ebonyamore
when I was eight and he was nine
we shared the sweetest of first kisses
i was the princess.
he wielded a sword better than any knight in any realm
known by man.
on the kind of balmy june afternoon that begs for adventure, bathed in
sunlight and
perfumed with lilac scented promise, he rescued me.
from a dragon-dog guarded tree castle where he promised to love me
for as long as a nine year old is able.
the next time we kissed was in that same treehouse, sold by the princess
to an alien tribe.
i was the alien commander. he was a human freedom fighter.
no love lost between those two but what can i say?
sometimes intergalactic passions run deep. and i learned that some kisses
are promises. others are exclamation points on the endcaps of frustration,
irritation and lust. they may not be as sweet but they're thrilling and
theytaste great in their own right. sorta like cinnamon and licorice and
cold late-spring eveningtime air.
for a summer we were kissing buddies, the best kind of young lovers. restless
souls who wandered the world in two big backyards, conjuring enemies to
fight and big loves to experience in each other. it was great.
until
the one battle that was his and not mine. the dark and unfair villain who
came and stole my knight away. one little tumor. and my prince was slain.
When I was eight. And he was nine.
Comments on "once upon a time..."
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On Monday, January 14, 2019, Jonas Robinson
(848) wrote:
I like the fantasy elements. This took imagination and deep thinking to write. Good stuff. :)
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A former member wrote:
I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem, and when I reached the ending I started crying.
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A former member wrote:
*sigh*....this is beautiful...I wish I had more adjectives at this point...but you've left me high and dry...this is beautiful.
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On Monday, November 25, 2013, soul_versing
(774) wrote:
I'm so deeply lost in words right now. Your heart and mind painted a breathtaking scene of young hopeless romantics. Your words cling tight to me and I shall cherish every bit of them, such a beautiful disaster. Bows-
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A former member wrote:
deeply and sadly beautiful...........
reading it felt like i was in a theatre and the world was a lesser stage
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A former member wrote:
that was beautiful the best prince of all
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On Friday, October 7, 2011, Alchemist
(679) wrote:
I think with this poem and your Dirty Girl work you are now my favorite poet on DP. This was beautiful!
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On Monday, September 26, 2011, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Wow!! How fucking beautiful is this... I love it!
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On Wednesday, August 3, 2011, Evil Ash
(53) wrote:
very sweet ...great piece
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A former member wrote:
Sometimes, it seems sullying an amazingly beautiful piece such as this with my humble and unprofessiona comments about the impression it had on me would be a crime. But, I can no longer resist sharing with you the visions these words created in my mind. I couldn't help but recall the novel "Bridge to Tarabithia' by Katherine Paterson and the movie My Girl. This piece definitely is on par with, even better than IMO, both of those emotional works of art as well.
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A former member wrote:
and of course you make this night seem hopeless
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On Thursday, April 8, 2010, boneplate
(56) wrote:
this is such a wonderful story....childhood innocence at its best...then...heartbeaking.
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On Friday, April 9, 2010, ebonyamore
(100) wrote:
thank you. its a true story and one that I've carried with me for a long time.
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A former member wrote:
This is a beautiful yet tragic story. The imagery was wonderful. To be 8 years old again...
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On Wednesday, April 7, 2010, A Life Without You
(146) wrote:
wow, this painted an amazing image in the mind... sad yet to reflect back brings happiness, ...nice piece here
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A former member wrote:
Still one of my favorites ever... good grief.
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On Tuesday, November 17, 2009, The Lipstick Factor
(287) wrote:
Heartbreaking piece. Much to deal with for an eight year old. Rather amazing you could find your way to this write from there. Excellent work.
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On Tuesday, November 3, 2009, Phalanx
(628) wrote:
This brings back some fond old memories of when love seemed genuine and forever wasn't so over-whelmingly frightening. You made me smile, I appreciate that.
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On Monday, May 11, 2009, Sketso
(416) wrote:
fairy tale tragedy... reminds me of the Bridge to Tarabithia. Amazingly well written and heartbreaking.
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On Thursday, May 7, 2009, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
Tragic and full of emotion. Well done.
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On Friday, April 24, 2009, Shortnlethal
(65) wrote:
an enjoyment to read..such a beautiful way you depict some thing so valued yet so sad ^^
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On Friday, April 10, 2009, CjPsychotic
(30) wrote:
I love that you didn't toss unneeded wordiness about it or over metaphoring it..I think the general straightforward simplistics add so much for this. It just ran straight and true; There isn't much I can say to critisize this. Bravo
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On Friday, April 10, 2009, whisperer
(166) wrote:
beautiful in tragedy, in romance in innocence and death wonderfully done
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A former member wrote:
again, i lvoe the aesthetical journey of words falling and unwinding themelves so palintively. . .. a crisp clean delivery of such poignant moment[ou]s. . . ..welcome.
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A former member wrote:
...lol..that should read plaintively. . .. jeeze woman.
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A former member wrote:
this is powerful. it draws us in to the sweet story and then ends abruptly, shocking us like it did you.
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On Wednesday, April 8, 2009, Leith Plunkett
(237) wrote:
The ìnnocence makes it hurt that much more...(and i learned that some kisses are promises) I love this image, it really does paint 1000 words. Look forward to reading more :-)
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A former member wrote:
Horribly tragic...I only wish beauty such as this lasted longer. Mere words do not seem quite adequate. I am deeply touched, and I hope to see more of you around here.
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A former member wrote:
this made me cry at the end...no lie. this is so sweet and innocent. i love it