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bleed for the angels
By denver nitze
stare into the emptyness
that is me
a black hole
to draw you in
voices screaming in the brain
only lost your only kin
lay them to rest
assume they are dead
four blue eyes
two sets of wings
now gone forever
a toast to them
i push the blade thru soft skin
i bleed for them
i bleed again
lost within this ever
winded
lost without this never
minded
lost eternal when
torn from my breast
the flesh i created
screams in the night
i couldn't answer
i'm a disaster
the world spins faster
i close the casket
as it pierces my soul
straight through my heart
turning it cold
cold as the blade
before blood warms its soul
gives it the power
a toast to them
and to that i bleed again...
and again...
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© 2007 denver nitze
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A former member wrote:
Such loss conveyed in this poem your anguish is brought to us all to realistically. A very poignant account.
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A former member wrote:
i am so sorry for your loss.. the emotions and choice of words are very vivid here. this is truly a beautiful poem.
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A former member wrote:
Beautiful poem.
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On Sunday, August 12, 2012, darknessrises909
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wrote:
I just read your comment that this poem is about losing your daughters. I am very deeply sorry for your loss, I can't imagine the pain it caused you. Though it is terrible pain, this poem is beautiful in such a twisted way. Your words are beautiful. The way they sound and the way the words just fit together and the poem is fast paced, you can practically imagine yourself in the same situation, bleeding. I can relate to it, bleeding for someone else, hurting yourself to feel okay. I hope you are doing alright. This is an amazing piece.
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On Monday, July 19, 2010, Riven Waker
(317) wrote:
your language is vivid & your meter brisk - like the exhileration & invigoration of bloodshed - brilliant piece
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A former member wrote:
I love the way this reads, definately a favorite of mine. It's the sadness and pain we must not forget, yet leave behind to become more.
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A former member wrote:
love it, your use of short sentances to build suspension works brilliantly, can relate~
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On Saturday, January 27, 2007, Mylissa
(825) wrote:
living can be suicide at times..I think I understand how you meant that. Great write.
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A former member wrote:
nicely done i like it. ~ red.
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A former member wrote:
ewwww. I hate Suicide Poems :-| What can you possibly gain by taking your own life. ][ ][
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On Saturday, January 27, 2007, denver nitze
(251) wrote:
definitly not a suicide poem. just a living nitemare. thanks for your comment anyhow.
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A former member wrote:
I think you should explain your reason behind this before you let them read the poem. Its quite beautiful when you think it and no the background to it. So Might I suggest you do that ][ ][
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On Wednesday, February 27, 2008, denver nitze
(251) wrote:
over a year later... here ya go this is a poem about losing my daughters and wishing i could bleed for them (sometimes i do) and take away the pain felt. thats all no suicide poem here, oh no but definitely a death poem. thank you for reading. ~tangel
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