myths need mystery [we're all liars]
By Six-Out
she whispered to me.
'myths need mystery.'
in the sense that we're senseless.
and it's hard pointing fingers at broken relics.
sometimes. it's a lie.
in her ear. i sang redemtion.
in the form of poetic restitution. or resolution.
depending on what point of view you choose to be your truth.
weave me. it's sincere.
'I stole your dreams-
and made them wishes.
like a birthday candelabra- burning.
we're ashes on a coffee table.
magazines of mistreaded promises.
with god in our eyes.
and everyone is a little broken.'
she's ambience.
and I'm one thousand miles too late.
too much ground to carry when I'm trying to cover.
myself- in the end.
sin.fully. delicious. it's ambiguous.
and I'm indecisive in these indescretions.
cat.a.ton.ic. breathescapes. in a metaphor for hope.
(less) than nothing. it's always better than something.
and if you give it away. it's worthless.
at least. that's what they said to me.
when I counted the stardrops singing tears
to repitition.
and the puzzle pieces don't always fit. when.
you're trying to piece together.
what you've ripped apart.
because destruction is far more beautiful.
than anything we could make.
and myths need mystery, or else they're just lies.
like the piece of the puzzle you kick.
under the couch.
because some things.
are better left in the shadows.
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Comments on "myths need mystery [we're all liars]"
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On Monday, May 13, 2013, TropicalSnowstorm
(1580) wrote:
" myths need mystery, or else they're just lies. like the piece of the puzzle you kick. under the couch." - love these lines! Great piece! Ciao, T/S
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On Friday, February 8, 2013, Dreaming in Stanzas
(293) wrote:
This breaks me.
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On Wednesday, November 28, 2012, Northstar
(374) wrote:
sighs...you are amazing. i love this piece. love it, love it, love it. it's tears me apart inside and makes me want to cry...but i absolutely love it. you know how talented you are...but oh, i will you again...this is so well done.
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On Friday, July 23, 2010, Karmadreams
(10) wrote:
i loved reading this... some of the lines are truly beautiful, and even within the context of the poem, which seemed a little bitter, they brought this ethereal feeling... "I stole your dreams and made them wishes" "I'm one thousand miles to late" :) loved it
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On Saturday, April 29, 2006, CharlottesWeb
(509) wrote:
I've found a smaller view, an undistinguished part in this whole...And it's wonderful. I want to frame this.
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On Wednesday, April 26, 2006, PoeticHellion
(191) wrote:
Oh man. Brilliant. "she's ambience. and I'm one thousand miles too late." I like that. It's... peaceful, yet longing...ful. It's fabulous.
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A former member wrote:
I love the association with mystery and ourselves, there is so much truth here, and you have left a part of us sacred, I am awed and humbled.
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On Sunday, April 23, 2006, Army Barbie
(316) wrote:
You have so many fans that you hardly need to see a comment by me. But I thought I'd let you know I'm amongst the crowd
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On Friday, April 21, 2006, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
I keep coming back to read this, I especially like the last ten lines. S.
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On Thursday, April 20, 2006, Spiritus_Frumenti
(340) wrote:
holy shit was a magnificient piece...you this style of elongated melancholy with pauses that give it more substance. the entire thing is quotable. damn good write...-l-
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On Tuesday, April 18, 2006, Vicious Pixie
(58) wrote:
...because destruction is far more beautiful. than anything we could make...." like i said...amazing
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On Tuesday, April 18, 2006, Vicious Pixie
(58) wrote:
please tell me this isn't the one that you said was lousy...this is amazing...especially liked "...and the puzzle pieces don't always fit. when. you're trying to piece together.what you've ripped apart. because destruction is far more beautiful. than an
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On Tuesday, April 18, 2006, Anth
(1126) wrote:
you always manage to keep that sense of melancholic grandeur in your poetry, however bitter or beautiful it is, and its always instantly recognizeable as yours, yet never predictable, always immense
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On Saturday, April 15, 2006, doll on the rag
(200) wrote:
"because destruction is far more beautiful./than anything we could make."
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On Saturday, April 15, 2006, doll on the rag
(200) wrote:
you can buy me that ring now. [or steal it, if that's your style.]
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A former member wrote:
3rd and 4th stanzas got rid of my hangover and for that I shall forever be grateful. Seriously though, those shined out the most for me but overall fantastic. ~Ryan
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A former member wrote:
I never comment on your works because there's never anything left to say.
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On Saturday, April 15, 2006, Solace
(1065) wrote:
Damn man, truth can come in the form of a lie, if so is it a lie or a truth...You've made interesting points in a beautiful piece of poetry, well done indeed
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On Saturday, April 15, 2006, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
o.O ... I just remembered why I was in awe of you for so long
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A former member wrote:
If I nod my head anymore I'm sueing. you slay as easily as ever. awesome man.
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On Saturday, April 15, 2006, Hello Dead Kitty
(29) wrote:
"Sinfully,delicious, it's ambiguous and I'm indecisive in these indescretions"... God, I absolutely LOVE these thoughts...you put them all together so gracefully :-)
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A former member wrote:
bah. and you say you can't write. you just keep getting better and better. this was just heartbreakingly beautiful..there's always a bit of longing, a bit of sorrow in your poetry. and you make it so lovely. *hugs*
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A former member wrote:
interesting escape.. . "destruction is far more beautiful..." and i find myself thinking of boo radley. .. whcih is always good
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A former member wrote:
Deep, very very deep. the puzzle metaphor really kicks ass... there's just too much there, so much meaning...