Here's My Guitar
By maddin foxxxy
Everything falls apart...
Everything but
the castle you built
for me to live
in your mind
Here's my guitar
in my arms
singing of you
so I can hear
where you hide
The years they all
accumulate
in the mishaps
that crash
in fate
The lies they all
pour in and show
along with
the hypocrisy
in which
people grow
They fake it
as they walk...
but you are real
and your words
are the only sounds
that talk
How can I grab
you as a whole
without your sand
escaping through
the hole?
I'd kiss you
for a taste
of the heaven
hidden here on earth
and going into
waste...
Everything's falling apart..
The ceiling's coming down..
Here's the melody
hung in a string
of your smile
Here's my guitar
in your silence
of the eternity
in a while..
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Copyright 2004 maddin foxxxy
Published on Wednesday, January 21, 2004.
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On Wednesday, October 4, 2006, ShardsofSilence
(219) wrote:
heart-felt and lovely.
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A former member wrote:
'The years they all
accumulate
in the mishaps
that crash
in fate' Lovely analogy expressed in music of your soul w/ splendid words & subtle arppeggiated aliterations...
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A former member wrote:
...lovely photograph...lovely smile...
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On Friday, January 30, 2004, frost bite
(43) wrote:
I really liked this and was drawn to read it again and again, because it has a soothing effect for some reason, I loved it.
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, shadowsinthelight
(146) wrote:
I believe you may be an incruable romantic. You make my heart yearn for the days when I was, but I guess that then would make me a curable romantic . S.
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
*chuckles* crap.. I have to come back to this... :) :::OLd
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On Friday, January 23, 2004, OLd SouL
(717) wrote:
you found the right chords to strum and you played them as if your fingers were made of the instrument. I couldn't say that one verse inparticular was my fav. Every bit flowed all too well through my mind. Love it, hun. :::OLd
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Alanarchy
(1168) wrote:
Wow. Very cool.
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Stranger
(263) wrote:
So beautiful. It drips with a slow pulse; the slow plucking of a metal string. Resonating through my bones like a cold wind thtough a net.
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Midnight Phoenix
(240) wrote:
I was excited about this after merely reading the title! I love the "I'd kiss you" stanza. Very strong intro as well. The piece feels so sad, but there's that glimmering peace hidden in there as well.
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Dancing_Monkey
(1228) wrote:
So capturing.. wow.. I love it. M :o)
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, flying_fox
(571) wrote:
This is just gorgeous. Really really beautiful stuff. FF
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On Thursday, January 22, 2004, purr_verse
(1052) wrote:
lovely, evocative and poignant... imagery very effective and neither under/or/overstated. :) purr
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A former member wrote:
There are too many great lines to quote just one. Just absolutely beautiful wording. And an excellent title to boot...
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On Wednesday, January 21, 2004, Drea
(1388) wrote:
"I'd kiss you for a taste of the heaven hidden here on earth and going into waste..." those lines just play in my head over and over. i loved this. wonderful ~Drea~
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A former member wrote:
this is great I really enjoyed reading it