Here's My Guitar

By maddin foxxxy

Everything falls apart...
Everything but
the castle you built
for me to live
in your mind

Here's my guitar
in my arms
singing of you
so I can hear
where you hide

The years they all
accumulate
in the mishaps
that crash
in fate

The lies they all
pour in and show
along with
the hypocrisy
in which
people grow

They fake it
as they walk...
but you are real
and your words
are the only sounds
that talk

How can I grab
you as a whole
without your sand
escaping through
the hole?

I'd kiss you
for a taste
of the heaven
hidden here on earth
and going into
waste...

Everything's falling apart..
The ceiling's coming down..
Here's the melody
hung in a string
of your smile

Here's my guitar
in your silence
of the eternity
in a while..


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Copyright 2004 maddin foxxxy
Published on Wednesday, January 21, 2004.     Filed under: "Poetry"
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  • ShardsofSilence On Wednesday, October 4, 2006, ShardsofSilence (219)By person wrote:

    heart-felt and lovely.

  • A former member wrote: 'The years they all accumulate in the mishaps that crash in fate' Lovely analogy expressed in music of your soul w/ splendid words & subtle arppeggiated aliterations...

  • A former member wrote: ...lovely photograph...lovely smile...

  • frost bite On Friday, January 30, 2004, frost bite (43)By person wrote:

    I really liked this and was drawn to read it again and again, because it has a soothing effect for some reason, I loved it.

  • shadowsinthelight On Thursday, January 22, 2004, shadowsinthelight (146)By person wrote:

    I believe you may be an incruable romantic. You make my heart yearn for the days when I was, but I guess that then would make me a curable romantic . S.

  • OLd SouL On Thursday, January 22, 2004, OLd SouL (717)By person wrote:

    *chuckles* crap.. I have to come back to this... :) :::OLd

  • OLd SouL On Friday, January 23, 2004, OLd SouL (717)By person wrote:

    you found the right chords to strum and you played them as if your fingers were made of the instrument. I couldn't say that one verse inparticular was my fav. Every bit flowed all too well through my mind. Love it, hun. :::OLd

  • Alanarchy On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Alanarchy (1168)By person wrote:

    Wow. Very cool.

  • Stranger On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Stranger (263)By person wrote:

    So beautiful. It drips with a slow pulse; the slow plucking of a metal string. Resonating through my bones like a cold wind thtough a net.

  • Midnight Phoenix On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Midnight Phoenix (240)By person wrote:

    I was excited about this after merely reading the title! I love the "I'd kiss you" stanza. Very strong intro as well. The piece feels so sad, but there's that glimmering peace hidden in there as well.

  • Dancing_Monkey On Thursday, January 22, 2004, Dancing_Monkey (1228)By person wrote:

    So capturing.. wow.. I love it. M :o)

  • flying_fox On Thursday, January 22, 2004, flying_fox (571)By person wrote:

    This is just gorgeous. Really really beautiful stuff. FF

  • purr_verse On Thursday, January 22, 2004, purr_verse (1052)By person wrote:

    lovely, evocative and poignant... imagery very effective and neither under/or/overstated. :) purr

  • A former member wrote: There are too many great lines to quote just one. Just absolutely beautiful wording. And an excellent title to boot...

  • Drea On Wednesday, January 21, 2004, Drea (1388)By person wrote:

    "I'd kiss you for a taste of the heaven hidden here on earth and going into waste..." those lines just play in my head over and over. i loved this. wonderful ~Drea~

  • A former member wrote: this is great I really enjoyed reading it

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