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As Yet Untitled
By GreekPhilosopher
My convulsing mind throbs to the thought
Of the downfall my pride has brought
And sorrow fills my being with fire
That burns so intensely without tire
When I think of the things I did wrong
I know that I did them not to be strong
But rather to pass the gruelling test
To finally attain status of being the best
In my shadows eye do I see
All the things handed to me
And none of this will truly do
Until the day I rise above you
I will last that little bit longer
I will grow infinitely stronger
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Copyright 2003 GreekPhilosopher
Published on Monday, August 11, 2003.
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A former member wrote:
this is a great poem definately adding it to my favorites
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On Sunday, September 21, 2003, Blinded_Tiger
(518)
wrote:
Shame on the shameless, Tears on a dying soul, Where shall tears fall? Shame is gone. Tiger
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On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, _Andrew_
(245) wrote:
awesome write, crazily good, especially at the end, jus sick as hell man *~*aNDReW*~*
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On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, urbanhumility
(1175) wrote:
i feel this one sleek, it is powerful, and flows well. we must look inward and bring forth that what will make us stronger.......well done.....urban
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On Tuesday, August 19, 2003, TropicalSnowstorm
(1703) wrote:
Wonderful flow - great one! Ciao, T/S
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On Saturday, August 16, 2003, manywalks
(750) wrote:
...In my shadow's eye I do see...damn, what a perfect line. Loved this piece, very nice texture to it, thanks. ~ mw
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On Saturday, August 16, 2003, Dancing_Monkey
(1246) wrote:
This is great, you are the master rimer.. Monkey
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On Thursday, August 14, 2003, Audrey_Star
(26) wrote:
"Of the downfall my pride has brought" a great line and a great piece. but it almost reads like it could use more.but the fact that it feels like it could use more only makes it better because it leaves the reader with the ability to conclude the thought
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On Tuesday, August 12, 2003, Delphoid-Q
(213) wrote:
Nice, Chris... I especially like the image of, 'my shadow's eye'. Original and meaningful. Well done.
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On Monday, August 11, 2003, Aurora_Light
(472) wrote:
very nice indeed, to keep going is the best thing we can do to raise up ur pride.
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On Monday, August 11, 2003, Ophelia
(221) wrote:
very nice the flow was beautiful................O.
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A former member wrote:
I'm diggin this. Invinsible. Lovin it. ^aura^
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A former member wrote:
cool stuff Greek. i was able to identify most with the first stanza. in the third stanza, i think you could drop " [DO] I see" it might flow better without that..
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On Monday, August 11, 2003, Six-Out
(1435) wrote:
I hate you.
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A former member wrote:
I love this. you really write good.. GrTz
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On Wednesday, October 15, 2003, Lydia Jade
(1350) wrote:
wow! just wow! ~ Blood~
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