Distorted Observance
By Intoxicating Delirium
As I'm laying here with you, head on your chest.
I can hear your
heart beating, it's one of the best.
I see my reflection in
your blue eyes.
My ugly image of which I despise.
How
can you love me I'm nothing, I'm worthless.
I don't understand
your distorted observance.
You tell me you love me, I'm
beautiful, I'm perfect.
You just see the surface, you need to dissect.
Cut me open, divide me up and analyze every shred.
You'll
be amazed on how much you've misread.
Can you not see, you
have been fooled.
I've kept you blind, your instincts overruled.
But the surface is cracking the truth will emerge.
When
you see whats underneath our love you will purge.
One day
you will understand my deceiving endeavor.
You'll finally see me
and I will have lost you forever.
Comments on "Distorted Observance"
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A former member wrote:
this flows quite well... and your up front nature in this piece is hard hitting... much enjoined.
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On Wednesday, October 16, 2013, Scorpio999
(52) wrote:
for some strange reason .. the dream poem keeps popping up .. damn dreams .. whats to do .. give in to the dreams i suppose .. surrender ..
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On Friday, September 6, 2013, Void Vortex
(298) wrote:
Nice write. You can never be sure, love really can blind.
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On Tuesday, August 13, 2013, FadedBlues
(2096) wrote:
...this is very good. it's a well crafted reversal of the idiom that 'beauty is on the inside'...
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On Monday, August 12, 2013, Deathkitten
(571) wrote:
Why in sam hell have I not been reading you?! Wtf! This is good stuff & it sounds alot like me. Definitely can relate & I love how devious, yet honest it's spread. Mwahahaha awesome!
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On Thursday, July 11, 2013, Iwas
(39) wrote:
A simply elegant look in to the mind of the beautiful deceiver. Funny how it seems we have already met. Almost anyone can relate to this which makes it awesome. well done.
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A former member wrote:
I find your honesty in this is something to love... how we try to talk ourselves out of being worthey of being loved, despite imperfections...
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On Sunday, April 28, 2013, Devilish
(2633) wrote:
Oh how I love raw brutal honesty. it makes me feel all moist and tingly.. I fucking dig the hell out of you . i'll definitely keep my eye out for you . you bring a fresh feel to the place.. I love it.
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On Monday, April 29, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
Haha thanks, you're awesome.
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On Sunday, April 21, 2013, Ortolan
(214) wrote:
This makes me feel even more hopeless than I already do about love.Something sinister gets between men and women and pries them apart.Every relationship I ever had was destroyed.I hate to think this is the truth.
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On Wednesday, April 24, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
It really does take a miracle for love to succeed.
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On Wednesday, April 3, 2013, Sean Mc Shane
(606) wrote:
Our darksides often try and convince us of these things. Sometimes they're believable, but usually not true. Hardcore write. Well done CR. Til next time -
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On Thursday, April 18, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
Thank you for the nice words :)
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On Monday, April 1, 2013, dwells
(4177) wrote:
Get some self-confidence girl and tomorrow will take care of itself, that guy wants you, not who you think you are! Cheers!!
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On Thursday, April 18, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
Thanks you:)
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On Monday, April 1, 2013, haunted
(837) wrote:
awe thats ashame you feel that way about yourself. you should never hide who you are. if you want someone to keep, it has to start with trust and honesty. i met mine in high school and its 26 years later and built on those two things. i dont think anybodys really that ugly inside i think that just means that the two arent compatible in each others eyes. good luck to you and quit beating yourself up...your beautiful.
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On Thursday, April 18, 2013, Intoxicating Delirium
(273) wrote:
Awe, thank you.