Once Upon a Story
By Gray Vision
Once upon a time
You were so good to me
Honest from the start
Such a perfect scenery.
Once
upon a time
You said you loved me
Those words caressed my heart
You meant the world to me.
Once upon a time
You
peered into my eyes
And stared at my soul
With such surmise.
Once upon a time
You grabbed me by the arm
Dragged
me to my room
Revealing a loaded firearm.
Once
upon a time
On the floor on all fours,
I begged and begged and
begged
But you had to settle a score.
Once upon
a time
I felt the gun against my head
And heard the rotation
of cylinders
As I thought,
This is how it ends.
Once upon a time
The rotation came to a halt
You peered down
the barrel
Right before it sparked.
Once upon a
time
As I laid by your side,
Gagging and coughing
You asked
for my forgiveness
As the life faded from your very eyes.
Once upon a time
I looked back at that day,
And remember
those words,
That won’t ever go away.
I forgive
you
And I can rest to sure now,
That everything will be okay.
Author's Note:
This piece was inspired by a Lifetime original movie.Comments on "Once Upon a Story"
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On Monday, August 15, 2011, Star
(879) wrote:
truly truly sad :( also moving to the read
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On Monday, August 15, 2011, Gray Vision
(424) wrote:
Ya the actual movie was sad but it was good and so I wrote this, I just felt like I had to you know, well Pretty thank you for dropping by =)
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A former member wrote:
wow .....pal that was a roller coaster ride.a calm
start ,a sudden twist..a suspense and a happy ending.Overall a 10 out of 10.great job. OH how was your vacations?:)
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On Friday, July 23, 2010, Gray Vision
(424) wrote:
It's been great so far, I'm running around with a clear mind, open heart, i'm just enjoying life right now. How is everything on your end, oh and thank you so much for commenting, i'm glad you liked it =)
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On Sunday, June 27, 2010, lupus tenebrae
(860) wrote:
Very vivid write my friend, I could hear the rotating barrel as if it were right next to my head, and inspired by a lifetime movie even, well done indeed.
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On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision
(424) wrote:
Wolfy it's always good hearing from you, I did enjoy writing this piece even though I felt as if I rushed it but none the less it was fun. Thank you for commenting and I'm awaiting another of your works patiently, thanks again =)
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On Sunday, June 27, 2010, NikesRain
(1240) wrote:
definitely puts the reader 'there'... vivid images... the feel.. suspense leading you along... well done
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On Sunday, June 27, 2010, Gray Vision
(424) wrote:
I felt like I sort of rushed it but that's just because I wanted to relate the suspence etc, while it was all still fresh from the movie. Thank you very much NR =)